Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Forgive and Forget"Musing of an old man
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Comment from Ida T. Johnson
I guess I was expecting something that's a little more dynamic. Of course, it's concise, but it doesn't move me or pull on my heartstrings. It doesn't have that "WOW!" factor. I can't offer any suggestions because this is a rather difficult task. Good luck!
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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I guess I was expecting something that's a little more dynamic. Of course, it's concise, but it doesn't move me or pull on my heartstrings. It doesn't have that "WOW!" factor. I can't offer any suggestions because this is a rather difficult task. Good luck!
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Okay thanks!
Comment from Mintybee
Forgive and forget is advice with an impact, and even with the title your poem is seven words. It is a concise comment on self-improvement. I wish you the best in the contest.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Forgive and forget is advice with an impact, and even with the title your poem is seven words. It is a concise comment on self-improvement. I wish you the best in the contest.
Mintybee
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Mintybee, thank you.
Comment from Jim Wile
For such a short poem, this is very thought-provoking and not at all trite. Forgiving then forgetting is indeed very freeing. They free the mind from dwelling on past transgressions by others, often with accompanying bitterness, and instead allow you to move on and occupy your mind with more positive and constructive things. This promotes better mental health and doesn't put an end to a relationship.
All that in just 7 words. Well done!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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For such a short poem, this is very thought-provoking and not at all trite. Forgiving then forgetting is indeed very freeing. They free the mind from dwelling on past transgressions by others, often with accompanying bitterness, and instead allow you to move on and occupy your mind with more positive and constructive things. This promotes better mental health and doesn't put an end to a relationship.
All that in just 7 words. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry in the "Seven Words or Less" poetry contest. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. However, forgetting and forgiving are both difficult tasks to do, especially if one was mistreated as a child. As a former educator, I have seen my share of damaged children. Some were in counseling and others were just disruptive and angry.
For better spacing in the poem box, I would drop the first line down one space, so the bottom and top line have even space around them.
The visual is just okay. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This is a good entry in the "Seven Words or Less" poetry contest. The text is a great size. The message is clearly stated and easily understood. However, forgetting and forgiving are both difficult tasks to do, especially if one was mistreated as a child. As a former educator, I have seen my share of damaged children. Some were in counseling and others were just disruptive and angry.
For better spacing in the poem box, I would drop the first line down one space, so the bottom and top line have even space around them.
The visual is just okay. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello Sandra, As a. Hold that was raised in violent and abusive home, I so relate and had many hours of therapy following Viet Nam unpacking all way back through family of origin reality, Peace be with you, 🙏🙏🎶🎶
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Peace be with you too.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You have used your seven words well with a good topic.
-I like the formatting and opening line.
-A positive message about forgiving
and gaining a sense of freedom because of it.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You have used your seven words well with a good topic.
-I like the formatting and opening line.
-A positive message about forgiving
and gaining a sense of freedom because of it.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Smiles back Pam! Thanks.
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You are very welcome😊
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are powerful! I found these words having an excellent
message for all! The poem is clear, descriptive and creative. This poem
certainly has impact! The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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The author's words are powerful! I found these words having an excellent
message for all! The poem is clear, descriptive and creative. This poem
certainly has impact! The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Maria. Thank you very much!
Comment from Sugarray77
Such strong wisdom in such a short verse. You did a stellar job in choosing a theme and enhancing it with the perfect, joyful, and freeing art. I really enjoyed reading it and wish you luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Such strong wisdom in such a short verse. You did a stellar job in choosing a theme and enhancing it with the perfect, joyful, and freeing art. I really enjoyed reading it and wish you luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Smiles and more smiles.
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent poem for the contest with the maximum seven words
and a very good message about freedom found in forgiveness.
Good choice of art work to match.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This is an excellent poem for the contest with the maximum seven words
and a very good message about freedom found in forgiveness.
Good choice of art work to match.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Robert, I am so grateful for your validation.