A Narrow Trail
Forays into Forms ~ Quatern25 total reviews
Comment from TDLRasmar
You wrote a very nice poem with advice for the perils in life. I assume the narrow trail are the perils/pitfalls in life, where we need to be careful not to go over the edge. Nice job.
P.S.
I like your handle, SUGARRAY77.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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You wrote a very nice poem with advice for the perils in life. I assume the narrow trail are the perils/pitfalls in life, where we need to be careful not to go over the edge. Nice job.
P.S.
I like your handle, SUGARRAY77.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you very much!!
Glad you like my user name... its made up of moving parts. LOL
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I imagine it would be hard to walk on this trail and I think these silent walks give us chance to meditate and face the gales and we know how vulnerable we are out in the open on a winter's day. I enjoyed the repeated line you chose here Melissa, a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I imagine it would be hard to walk on this trail and I think these silent walks give us chance to meditate and face the gales and we know how vulnerable we are out in the open on a winter's day. I enjoyed the repeated line you chose here Melissa, a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello Dolly. Thank you. I would welcome some snow and a silent walk through it this winter.. not one flake so far. Glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
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Really? You are luck x x x
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is superbly done with no problem doing what was necessary for the quatern poem. I haven't heard of this one but I love the line which goes from stanza to stanza exchanging meanings as it goes. I love the meaning and the message is quite clear to go on thinking meditatively as you go on through life.
Jesse
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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This is superbly done with no problem doing what was necessary for the quatern poem. I haven't heard of this one but I love the line which goes from stanza to stanza exchanging meanings as it goes. I love the meaning and the message is quite clear to go on thinking meditatively as you go on through life.
Jesse
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello Jesse. Thanks so much!! I am fond of the French Forms and thought I would take one out for a spin ;). I so appreciate your comments on it... you inspire me!!
Melissa
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I am so glad I inspire you. Keep going with the different types of poetry!
Comment from Faith Williams
I like how you describe the scene in your first stanza--the brackened trees, soft and pale sunlight sifting through dense canopies. Definitely sets the scene and the mood for the second stanza. I can so relate to this poem, spending time in nature to clear my head. And I so loved the line, 'As solace healed his deep unease... '
On a totally different note, I was working on a story this morning, and my character was 'ambling down a path.' Then I read your poem and laughed--what are the chances?
Thanks for sharing your lovely and amazing poem.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I like how you describe the scene in your first stanza--the brackened trees, soft and pale sunlight sifting through dense canopies. Definitely sets the scene and the mood for the second stanza. I can so relate to this poem, spending time in nature to clear my head. And I so loved the line, 'As solace healed his deep unease... '
On a totally different note, I was working on a story this morning, and my character was 'ambling down a path.' Then I read your poem and laughed--what are the chances?
Thanks for sharing your lovely and amazing poem.
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you so very much, Faith. They do say 'great minds think alike', so I am honored to meet a 'great mind' like you. :). So appreciate your thoughts and review.
Melissa
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Every t you crossed and each i you dotted, so you met the needed requirements of 16 lines with a rambling refrain. Well done.
Brachened though is an unknown word. I search but did not fine. It wirk well, and I knew what was meant.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Every t you crossed and each i you dotted, so you met the needed requirements of 16 lines with a rambling refrain. Well done.
Brachened though is an unknown word. I search but did not fine. It wirk well, and I knew what was meant.
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Hello Tom. Thank you. I did change the spelling of brackened... thanks for the heads up.
Melissa
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