The Spider
The life of a spider is all about spinning.26 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
An original take on the prompt- to select a spider! The use of alliteration here is very skilful and appropriate. the reader can imagine the intricate spinning of the web! I think you meant 'who' not 'whom'.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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An original take on the prompt- to select a spider! The use of alliteration here is very skilful and appropriate. the reader can imagine the intricate spinning of the web! I think you meant 'who' not 'whom'.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Sarah,
Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. I am glad you liked it and you are correct about the Who not the whom. I will make an edit asap.
Take care.
Barry Penfold.
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HAPPY NEW YEAR!
Comment from June Sargent
Roses have thorns, spiders can bite. Life offers beauty in many forms. We need to tread lightly, but with eyes open, we can enjoy them all. Spiders need to spin their webs for survival. We just need to respect that. Your poem captured those sentiments.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Roses have thorns, spiders can bite. Life offers beauty in many forms. We need to tread lightly, but with eyes open, we can enjoy them all. Spiders need to spin their webs for survival. We just need to respect that. Your poem captured those sentiments.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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June,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Spiders and their crucial place in the scheme of things are not understood very well.
Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever little write with a good metre and rhyme and it also gave me the chills as spiders are busy weaving their death webs. I enjoyed your description here and wish you luck with the contest, I reckon this is a winner, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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This is a clever little write with a good metre and rhyme and it also gave me the chills as spiders are busy weaving their death webs. I enjoyed your description here and wish you luck with the contest, I reckon this is a winner, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Dolly,
Thanks so much for taking time to read and review my poem. It did end up winning the day as you predicted. Hope you have a great day and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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Congratulations x
Comment from JT traveller
Great poem. I love the intensity of the rhyme. How you must have taken the time to watch the spider and then to put your feelings down in written form.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Great poem. I love the intensity of the rhyme. How you must have taken the time to watch the spider and then to put your feelings down in written form.
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Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Jacqueline,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. It did take some watching of a garden spider spinning their web to get the wording into shape.
Please take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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Thankyou Barry ☺️
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
Nice. This is a fun poem that I'd love to read to my grandchildren.
I like the rhythm. Your words did a great job of weaving the web as if you weaved it with him.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Nice. This is a fun poem that I'd love to read to my grandchildren.
I like the rhythm. Your words did a great job of weaving the web as if you weaved it with him.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Rebecca,
You made my day when you suggested you might read it to your grandchildren. I do not write specifically for children but find some poems do fit into a good read for children. This poem was not written specifically for this competition but fitted into it nicely. The inspiration came from a garden spider.
Take care and have a good day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from prettybluebirds
This poem rhymes beautifully. Nothing is more perfect than a spider web unless it is in the corner of one's home. I enjoyed this poem. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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This poem rhymes beautifully. Nothing is more perfect than a spider web unless it is in the corner of one's home. I enjoyed this poem. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 31-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Thanks for your best wishes and also for taking time to read and review my poem. It did win the competition. Yes webs are great but not inside the home.
Have a great day and take care.
Cheers
Barry Penfold