Magical Moonbeams
a rhyming poem35 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wonderful entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. I don't know the Amphibrach meter, it looks hard to write.
I heard good things about the meter class. Rhyme is not my Forte but I enjoy to read it.
Outstanding imagery and nice presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
  |
Wonderful entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. I don't know the Amphibrach meter, it looks hard to write.
I heard good things about the meter class. Rhyme is not my Forte but I enjoy to read it.
Outstanding imagery and nice presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
-
Thank you very much Gypsy. I love writing in this meter and especially with a whimsical theme... its so fun. So appreciate you!
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
I like the imaginative aspects of this poem, as well as the personification you used. Good rhymes and perfect Amphibrach rhythm. The descriptions in the first stanza are especially wonderful. Nicely done! Best wishes in the contest. Carol
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
 |
I like the imaginative aspects of this poem, as well as the personification you used. Good rhymes and perfect Amphibrach rhythm. The descriptions in the first stanza are especially wonderful. Nicely done! Best wishes in the contest. Carol
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
-
Thank you Carol. I enjoy writing in this meter and the more whimsical the better. LOL. Appreciate your lovely words.
Melissa
-
You're welcome, Melissa. I enjoyed the whimsy.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A finely rhymed and metered poem with an upbeat theme and fabulous flow. I love the content and the joy is in the metre here Melissa, perfectly executed and skilfully written, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
|
A finely rhymed and metered poem with an upbeat theme and fabulous flow. I love the content and the joy is in the metre here Melissa, perfectly executed and skilfully written, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
-
Thank you so very much, Dolly. I love to write in this meter and the more whimsical the better. I am just delighted that you like it, my friend!!
Melissa
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, wow, not only do I delight in the beauty of the imagery this lovely poem evokes, I am enthralled by the meter, and I learned what it is that I actually write from time to time! (LOL) Thank you for sharing this jewel.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
|
Oh, wow, not only do I delight in the beauty of the imagery this lovely poem evokes, I am enthralled by the meter, and I learned what it is that I actually write from time to time! (LOL) Thank you for sharing this jewel.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
-
Hello Dawn. Thank you so much for your lovely words. I love this meter and turn to it with a sense of fun now and again. So appreciate you!!
Melissa
-
The feeling is mutual! You are very welcome!
Comment from June Sargent
This poem has the feel of a waltz with the meter you've chosen to use! So I can totally picture you dancing with Mars amidst magical moonbeams. Well done! Should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
|
This poem has the feel of a waltz with the meter you've chosen to use! So I can totally picture you dancing with Mars amidst magical moonbeams. Well done! Should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
-
Hello sweet June. Thank you so much. I had never likened it to the waltz, but I believe you have something there. As I write, I always feel the beats to this meter as it sings in my head. i so appreciate you, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
I'm so pleased you decided to post this excellent little example of amphibrachic tetrameter. The alternating catalectic lines add a touch of comfort to the way the piece cenolves. Whiilenitxmight be possible to write a wholly amphibrach piece, the final words would be very limited.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
|
I'm so pleased you decided to post this excellent little example of amphibrachic tetrameter. The alternating catalectic lines add a touch of comfort to the way the piece cenolves. Whiilenitxmight be possible to write a wholly amphibrach piece, the final words would be very limited.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
-
I am glad you liked it Jim. I pulled it out and it hit me that this was the time to finish it. Your meter classes are ultimately responsible for me writing in amphibrach... I just love the flow of it!! Big hugs!
Melissa
Comment from jmdg1954
I don't understand the three bests in a foot for this poem, but I do understand the poem.
I like the line for sun-up:
dawn sits upon the horizon
and peeps o'er the hills with a sunny, bright face,
Good luck in the contest. You have a potential winner here.
Cheers, John
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
|
I don't understand the three bests in a foot for this poem, but I do understand the poem.
I like the line for sun-up:
dawn sits upon the horizon
and peeps o'er the hills with a sunny, bright face,
Good luck in the contest. You have a potential winner here.
Cheers, John
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
-
Hello John... the three beats stand for how many syllables there are in a metrical foot... different types of meter have different combinations...for example... amphibrach has three in an unstressed, stressed, unstressed pattern. i.e. whenever, remember, my name... Melissa. Etc. and no matter what... you follow that pattern throughout the poem... you are allowed to end alternating lines with one less syllable, but I am getting into the complicated stuff. I encourage you to take the FS Meter classes because they are really good at explaining this type of thing. Thank you very much.
Melissa
Comment from Janet Foor
This is a delightful Amphibrach metered poem. I love the three beats in a foot. It bounces along and the "Magical Moonbeams" was a joy to read.
Creative and clever with lovely alliteration as well as perfect rhyme.
Well done Sugarray
Blessings and Happy New Year
Janet
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
|
This is a delightful Amphibrach metered poem. I love the three beats in a foot. It bounces along and the "Magical Moonbeams" was a joy to read.
Creative and clever with lovely alliteration as well as perfect rhyme.
Well done Sugarray
Blessings and Happy New Year
Janet
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
-
Hello Janet... thank you so very much. I enjoyed writing this whimsical piece and hoped you all would like it too! :). Happy New Year to you too!
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
Excellent piece, Melissa. I read it aloud several times to practice the meter. I was totally impressed with your attention to multi-syllable words. They make the piece flow properly, but they must have been a pain to use properly like you did.
You create a nice mood with your alliteration and whimsy. I think I would change the font though. I have an after-Christmas migraine and the words are hard for me to read.
Hope you have a wonderful New Year's Eve.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
|
Excellent piece, Melissa. I read it aloud several times to practice the meter. I was totally impressed with your attention to multi-syllable words. They make the piece flow properly, but they must have been a pain to use properly like you did.
You create a nice mood with your alliteration and whimsy. I think I would change the font though. I have an after-Christmas migraine and the words are hard for me to read.
Hope you have a wonderful New Year's Eve.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
-
You are the second person to tell me about the font, so I will rush over to change it. Thank you so much sweet Debbie!!
Melissa
Comment from Jim Wile
This was an excellent rhyming poem--my favorite kind. In addition to the rhyming, the meter was also excellent, and the poem just flowed beautifully.
It's also an interesting idea: to have night become day, so to speak, and day become night. I guess to a nocturnal creature, that's what it's like.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
|
This was an excellent rhyming poem--my favorite kind. In addition to the rhyming, the meter was also excellent, and the poem just flowed beautifully.
It's also an interesting idea: to have night become day, so to speak, and day become night. I guess to a nocturnal creature, that's what it's like.
Very well done.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
-
Thanks so much Jim. I like to write whimsical pieces and hope you all enjoy them too. Appreciate your comments!! :)
Melissa
