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Comment from Frank Malley
My suggestions: 'January is the coldest, biting cold opens the year'. Valentine's Day comes, hearts bloom despite the cold.' 'Saint Patty's day brings nothing green/This season's getting old.' 'I think of going south, but lose a long debate.' 'When I come back I'd still be freezing for this spring's birthday date.'
I only offer changes like this to embody differences that I believe make a poem better; of course, the poet and the poem deserve acknowledgement for the open window she creates.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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My suggestions: 'January is the coldest, biting cold opens the year'. Valentine's Day comes, hearts bloom despite the cold.' 'Saint Patty's day brings nothing green/This season's getting old.' 'I think of going south, but lose a long debate.' 'When I come back I'd still be freezing for this spring's birthday date.'
I only offer changes like this to embody differences that I believe make a poem better; of course, the poet and the poem deserve acknowledgement for the open window she creates.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Thank you Frank! I love your suggestions and will be editing shortly to make some of them. I appreciate greatly the time you took to read, review and offer ways to make it. Your respectful feedback means a lot to me, my dear friend.
Hi Frank, I did not get a chance to make those changes right away like I had planned on doing as I was running late for an eye doctor appt. I have an eye disease that is making it so I am allowed only a little time on the computer, before everything is a blurr, so I only am able to barely get my writing and thank you's done, but leaves me no time for reviewing and that is why you never see me on your page.
After another surgery we are hoping that will change.
But I did make everyone of the changes that you recommended, except just a few words at the end of one line. And yours would have had me leave out the word wait, so I just changed that one slightly.
I love how the poem sounded after I did it your way, and I can't thank you enough for that. You are truly a great friend and I do appreciate you so very much. Most of the time. LOL
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You were on a roll yesterday, so it seems. I'd invite you to visit us in NC, just a few miles North of SOUTH Carolina, but whoever you placed in charge of your weather must have left your gate open for we have been below freezing for over a week. Today's high thought will be mid-fifties.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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You were on a roll yesterday, so it seems. I'd invite you to visit us in NC, just a few miles North of SOUTH Carolina, but whoever you placed in charge of your weather must have left your gate open for we have been below freezing for over a week. Today's high thought will be mid-fifties.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Happy New year Tom! I really appreciate your very kind review and comments for my " waiting' poem.
'We're starting out badly here. Last wk temps minus thirty, close to minus seventy windchill temp and when the wind blew, we had a blizzard. Now tomorrow supposed to be the same. As much as those scenarios can happen, we have had a mild winter here and there.....in my lifetime. Lol!. Thanks again my dear friend!
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AArgh. Stuck inside for the duration of the Arctic Front. Brr. Minus 70? I cannot imagine.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
You paint a picture of very long winters with which many of us are not familiar. But you also paint a picture of inner strength and hope, finding both in the waiting. A very nice poem with good rhyming
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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You paint a picture of very long winters with which many of us are not familiar. But you also paint a picture of inner strength and hope, finding both in the waiting. A very nice poem with good rhyming
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Happy New year Ginda! I really appreciate your very kind review and comments for my " waiting' poem.
'We're starting out badly here. Last wk temps minus thirty, close to minus seventy windchill temp and when the wind blew, we had a blizzard. Now tomorrow supposed to be the same. As much as those scenarios can happen, we have had a mild winter here and there.....in my lifetime. Lol!. Thanks again my dear friend!
Comment from Heather Knight
Beautiful poem. Great rhymes as well.
You could send some snow over here. It's something we hardly ever see.
And I hate summers in Madrid, they are too hot.
Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Beautiful poem. Great rhymes as well.
You could send some snow over here. It's something we hardly ever see.
And I hate summers in Madrid, they are too hot.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Happy New year Heather!! I really appreciate your very kind review and comments for my " waiting' poem.
'We're starting out badly here. Last wk temps minus thirty, close to minus seventy windchill temp and when the wind blew, we had a blizzard. Now tomorrow supposed to be the same. As much as those scenarios can happen, we have had a mild winter here and there.....in my lifetime. Lol!. Thanks again my dear friend!
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Wrap up warm
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Lol, that is so funny, but unfortunately, it is true for many countries now. I really enjoyed your Spring contest entry, Debi, and wish you the best of luck. Have a great day and a fabulous 2023! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Lol, that is so funny, but unfortunately, it is true for many countries now. I really enjoyed your Spring contest entry, Debi, and wish you the best of luck. Have a great day and a fabulous 2023! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Happy New year Sandra! I really appreciate your very kind review and comments for my " waiting' poem.
'We're starting out badly here. Last wk temps minus thirty, close to minus seventy windchill temp and when the wind blew, we had a blizzard. Now tomorrow supposed to be the same. As much as those scenarios can happen, we have had a mild winter here and there.....in my lifetime. Lol!. Thanks again my dear friend!
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Beautiful poem, reflecting the excitement of anticipation for warmer, hot oh! so short days. I like the strong words which drive the point and the solid rhyming pattern.
Well done
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Beautiful poem, reflecting the excitement of anticipation for warmer, hot oh! so short days. I like the strong words which drive the point and the solid rhyming pattern.
Well done
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Happy New year Mario! I really appreciate your very kind review and comments for my " waiting' poem.
'We're starting out badly here. Last wk temps minus thirty, close to minus seventy windchill temp and when the wind blew, we had a blizzard. Now tomorrow supposed to be the same. As much as those scenarios can happen, we have had a mild winter here and there.....in my lifetime. Lol!. Thanks again my dear friend!
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I hope you stay home and enjoy the warmth of home and family !!!
Happy New Year 2023!!!!!!!!
Comment from Kaiku
Yep, and the 10,000 lakes and all their bugs lie a bit dormant providing a reprieve of sorts. Having been raised in the upper midwest, I fully sympathize with your tale. Nicely done and keep the wood fire crackling. At least romance has a chance even in winter.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Yep, and the 10,000 lakes and all their bugs lie a bit dormant providing a reprieve of sorts. Having been raised in the upper midwest, I fully sympathize with your tale. Nicely done and keep the wood fire crackling. At least romance has a chance even in winter.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Happy New year Kaiku! I really appreciate your very kind review and comments for my " waiting' poem.
'We're starting out badly here. Last wk temps minus thirty, close to minus seventy windchill temp and when the wind blew, we had a blizzard. Now tomorrow supposed to be the same. As much as those scenarios can happen, we have had a mild winter here and there.....in my lifetime. Lol!. Thanks again my dear friend!
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Comment from Ricky1024
"An Eight Month Wait" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned most Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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"An Eight Month Wait" was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned most Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2023
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Happy New year Ricky! I really appreciate your very kind review and comments for my " waiting' poem.
'We're starting out badly here. Last wk temps minus thirty, close to minus seventy windchill temp and when the wind blew, we had a blizzard. Now tomorrow supposed to be the same. As much as those scenarios can happen, we have had a mild winter here and there.....in my lifetime. Lol!. Thanks again my dear friend!
Comment from karenina
Our of sixes...because it's Thursday and I am me! :)
No frrrrrreeeezzzzing way could I deal with those weather conditions!
I thought New England winters were bad! You make us,seem like the Bahamas!
Great entry! I bet you do very well!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Our of sixes...because it's Thursday and I am me! :)
No frrrrrreeeezzzzing way could I deal with those weather conditions!
I thought New England winters were bad! You make us,seem like the Bahamas!
Great entry! I bet you do very well!
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Karenina,,I thank you so very much! You are so sweet, and I
thank you for your kind comments regarding my poem.
Much appreciated my dear friend!,.
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Hope you are bundling up!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I live in Minnesota, too and lived here for thirty-two years. For me, the bitter cold months are January and February yet I still go outside ski, walk and skate every day. It have to say that this Christmas was very cold. Even though I walked twice every day, I didn't enjoy it very much until Monday. We went cross-country skiing.
Well done and goo luck.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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I live in Minnesota, too and lived here for thirty-two years. For me, the bitter cold months are January and February yet I still go outside ski, walk and skate every day. It have to say that this Christmas was very cold. Even though I walked twice every day, I didn't enjoy it very much until Monday. We went cross-country skiing.
Well done and goo luck.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2022
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Thank you Jasmine for always being such a lovely reviewer and friend.
I love that this poem has helped me get to know my already good friends, even better because of them sharing where they are from. Where in MN do you live? I absolutely love finding out who is from here. And also that you stay active even in our cold weather. Like I wrote in my authors notes, that extreme cases like I wrote about only happen every so many years, but last year was one of them. Yes, and last week was horrible but only got 16 inches of snow with it, but boy did it blow. We had a temp of minus thirty and windchill at minus 70. But we live out in the open where it gets colder too.
I live near Buffalo. In fact last year I wrote a poem called, "Deadly Shooting at Allina Clinic." I go there and one of my friends was shot 5 times and survived. You must have heard about it? Anyway,, thank you again, my dear friend.