Heart Crafted Poems - 2023
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was super well-done, I enjoyed every line. The sad thing about this story, is that it happened to way to many young ladies back in the day when it was frowned upon to be an unmarried mum. Lied made the journey a little bit easier for them. The son in this poem, loved his mother even though he wanted to know his real father. A man that would do that to a woman, is not one you'd want to be your father. Well done, I really enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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That was super well-done, I enjoyed every line. The sad thing about this story, is that it happened to way to many young ladies back in the day when it was frowned upon to be an unmarried mum. Lied made the journey a little bit easier for them. The son in this poem, loved his mother even though he wanted to know his real father. A man that would do that to a woman, is not one you'd want to be your father. Well done, I really enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Sandra, yes times were way to Patriarchal back in the day. Fortunately things have changed for the better.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
This poem is a response to a major challenge. The form, largely met, is in itself very challenging. The poem movingly records the anguish of the child to know the mystery of his father's identity and the single mother's struggle and sacrifice!
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This poem is a response to a major challenge. The form, largely met, is in itself very challenging. The poem movingly records the anguish of the child to know the mystery of his father's identity and the single mother's struggle and sacrifice!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Sarah thanks!
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Happy New Year!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Very lengthy poem. It is well-written; except line five reads:"whenand." The poem rhymes and has seven divisions. This poem tells a story about a mom who loved and lost.
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Very lengthy poem. It is well-written; except line five reads:"whenand." The poem rhymes and has seven divisions. This poem tells a story about a mom who loved and lost.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Thanks Rosemary caught this one havea good day.
Comment from royowen
Congratulations Jim, you've made one gigantic leap forward, and you've attempted and done extremely well with this heroic sonnet, there's only been a few that have attempted, and I haven't seem one for a long time my friend. A great backstory, befitting of this original form, well done. Blessings Roy
Typo : When()and
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Congratulations Jim, you've made one gigantic leap forward, and you've attempted and done extremely well with this heroic sonnet, there's only been a few that have attempted, and I haven't seem one for a long time my friend. A great backstory, befitting of this original form, well done. Blessings Roy
Typo : When()and
Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Roy thanks Sir, I caught this amonga few others. Be well!
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You too Jim
Comment from susand3022
Hi J!
Now THAT is a story in a poem! I found a few typo's for you... just little things.
second stanza... (whenand... when and)
Verse V stanza 3, you're in 2 tenses...
Verse 6 stanza 2, Complied or Compiled? typo?
Verse 7 stanza 4, (allthe... all the)
I really liked the story it was told very well.
Susan :)
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Hi J!
Now THAT is a story in a poem! I found a few typo's for you... just little things.
second stanza... (whenand... when and)
Verse V stanza 3, you're in 2 tenses...
Verse 6 stanza 2, Complied or Compiled? typo?
Verse 7 stanza 4, (allthe... all the)
I really liked the story it was told very well.
Susan :)
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Susan, so very grateful for your good eyes! Thanks!🙏🙏🎶🎶
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You're very welcome! :)
Comment from Ricky1024
This series of Sonnets were well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
Also, it read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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This series of Sonnets were well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
Also, it read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023
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Be blest in all things, thanks!