Comment from
lyenochka
Super job with your haibun. You created the routine of life in a mental ward and how depressing it can be. I really liked the "quicksand mind."
Suggestion:
When I wake up is visitation time (it's) and maybe a dash after 'time' because it's followed by a full sentence.
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2022
This is autobiographical, I just didn't want to say. The woman sitting on my bed staring at me while I was sleeping, was very creepy and really happened to me.
Thank you for letting me know about the spelling error. I had 2 or 3 reviewers help me with the prose part, everyone very nice and helpful. I'm lucky. When I started writing I had some really mean reviewers.
Love you. Big Sis
reply by lyenochka on 11-Oct-2022
Love you, too!! And thank you for sharing. I sensed that your personal experiences were wrapped in there. So glad you came out of there okay and are now so compassionate toward others who suffer from mental illness. 💖💖💖