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The Incomparable Fanny Barnwarmer

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America's First Female Comic

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Comment from cat frenette
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What an amazing finish to a fascinating story!
I enjoyed every step of the journey, and love the way to tied it all together.
Flourney finally got what was coming to him, and Fanny and Juniper were there to witness the finale.
Thank you for sharing Fanny and her story with us.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 25-Sep-2022
    Thank you, Cat, for being there. I appreciate you!
    Jay
Comment from royowen
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A great finish and Flourney gets his, a great script, you've gone and written such a great finish to this long script. And it would be great to see it on stage, well done Jay, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
    Now you know you wouldn't stay awake for all 21 scenes, you old reprobate! LOL, I wouldn't even stay awake! Seriously, though I am so very happy you weighed in on every single scene. Thank you!

    Jay
reply by royowen on 26-Sep-2022
    Heh heh
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Oh, I went all goosified! That was a brilliant ending, and you should be so proud of yourself. I would love to see this on stage. There is nothing I would change about this script, it was perfect. I'm going to miss Fanny. I had a chuckle when the reporter read out that poem underneath the statue of that slimeball, Flourney, and what the rest of the money was to be used for. LOL. I'm sure it will soon run out! I can't say enough about this story, my friend, it was a delight to read. Why on earth did you post it today and not tomorrow? You always tell us off when we do it! Well done, dear friend. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2022
    Thank you so much, Sandra! Hahaha, last question first. I thought it was Saturday. I patiently waited until after midnight, eastern time -- nine o'clock here, and began the promotion thinking, "At least I'll have a few minutes on page one before the big shooters come along with their dollar-thirty-five posts. Of course, that didn't happen for another 24 hours. So I will dance along with your five stars and feel blessed because of your 7-star kindness!
    Jay
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi Jay,

This is very nice in conclusion and Miss Fanny kept her humour intact until the very end. It's very fitting and I think when played out, very moving.

Great stuff
G

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
    Thank you so much, G. I've appreciated your taking the time to read my play when you are so busy with your own projects. The sixes are a bonus!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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You may have learnt a lot about perseverance (why don't you like what you learnt?), but you lost patience today, and broke your own rule. You didn't wait for the sixes to come in for this wonderful closure. I can't help feeling you cheated on Fanny and on us. If this wasn't a weekend where I have zero control over organization, as my family are here, I would have made you wait until tomorrow for the rating this so richly deserves! I will miss Fanny terribly, I love her as much as Tom does. Kate xx

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
    Oh, but I didn't knowingly break my rule. I thought it WAS Saturday. You are redeemed by your kind words. A lot of people tell me they will miss Fanny.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
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A very nice ending. The final dig at Flourney sends the reader off in grand fashion. The dialogue is believable. The stage instructions are masterfully done. The post dramatic ending is a true epilogue since the story is already done and we just needed the bow and ribbon to tie it up.

Thanks for a good read.

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2022


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2022
    You are too kind. Thank you for weighing in on the finale. It was a long time coming and I'm exhausted from it. Take care and keep writing!
    Jay
reply by dellsworthpoet on 28-Sep-2022
    You are welcome. Do a small celebration and then write again. I loved it.