NightHawk
like a nightmare, almost...27 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
It's fascinating how one creature. the NightHawk can direct so many things here, the tone, the sleep, the antagonist, the level of fear. This could be a strong metaphor. Well done.
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It's fascinating how one creature. the NightHawk can direct so many things here, the tone, the sleep, the antagonist, the level of fear. This could be a strong metaphor. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a fine free form poem. But the sounds of it, this nighthawk is really giving you grief, keeping you awake for hours and hours past time o'clock to sleep.
Great job and best of luck with the voters.
Gloria
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This is a fine free form poem. But the sounds of it, this nighthawk is really giving you grief, keeping you awake for hours and hours past time o'clock to sleep.
Great job and best of luck with the voters.
Gloria
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
Comment from Marienkiefer
An interesting poem. It gives the impression that this may well be where nightmares stem from.
-I love the coloured backdrop of your poem and the barely perceptible picture, lending and eerie quality to the night and the nighthawk.
My favourite line: I resent the nighthawk who pecks at my temporal lobes.
Nice work.
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An interesting poem. It gives the impression that this may well be where nightmares stem from.
-I love the coloured backdrop of your poem and the barely perceptible picture, lending and eerie quality to the night and the nighthawk.
My favourite line: I resent the nighthawk who pecks at my temporal lobes.
Nice work.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
An excellent free verse for the you choose writing prompt. I especially liked the imaginative alternative way you used the term nighthawk. Extremely effective. Kate xx
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An excellent free verse for the you choose writing prompt. I especially liked the imaginative alternative way you used the term nighthawk. Extremely effective. Kate xx
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
Comment from Raul1
This sounds like a very strategic creature flying above us and it is creative. I like the structure of your poetry. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Good luck in the contest!
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This sounds like a very strategic creature flying above us and it is creative. I like the structure of your poetry. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
Comment from leather
Yes, this does sound like a nightmare that stalks you relentlessly. The descriptions are vivid enough that I think you should check into a lobotomy. Joking aside, this is an excellent poem.
May you sleep peacefully tonight!
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Yes, this does sound like a nightmare that stalks you relentlessly. The descriptions are vivid enough that I think you should check into a lobotomy. Joking aside, this is an excellent poem.
May you sleep peacefully tonight!
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Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
Comment from Eternal Muse
I like the creative imagery and visuals here, also the sense of humor.
Excellent metaphor of a hawk, to induce the meaning. Good artistic presentation too, good luck in the contest.
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I like the creative imagery and visuals here, also the sense of humor.
Excellent metaphor of a hawk, to induce the meaning. Good artistic presentation too, good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 26-Aug-2022
