Morning Display
A Contest Entry24 total reviews
Comment from Frank Malley
"Morning Display" captures the universally admired spectacle of a spider's web limned in dew, and it does so in 17 syllables. And then the poem makes an observation on how this fan wheel of diamonds reveals the arachnid's silken trap.
I don't write many haiku, but this very terse opportunity for expression thrives upon compression - few words - and selection - words that work together to create an image or idea that throws a pebble into the puddle of the ordinary.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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"Morning Display" captures the universally admired spectacle of a spider's web limned in dew, and it does so in 17 syllables. And then the poem makes an observation on how this fan wheel of diamonds reveals the arachnid's silken trap.
I don't write many haiku, but this very terse opportunity for expression thrives upon compression - few words - and selection - words that work together to create an image or idea that throws a pebble into the puddle of the ordinary.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Hmmm...I think perhaps you should write a haiku. Your imagery is certainly better than mine.
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Morning Display, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, finds the eight-legged predator's "welcome mat", made less or more attractive by the beads of dew which decorate it. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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This haiku, Morning Display, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, finds the eight-legged predator's "welcome mat", made less or more attractive by the beads of dew which decorate it. Nice poem.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read my poem.
Comment from royowen
An excellent haiku Faith, classically written, and making much out of just a few words, the imagery created is first class, and the satori line gives that necessary boost at the end, well done, blessings and good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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An excellent haiku Faith, classically written, and making much out of just a few words, the imagery created is first class, and the satori line gives that necessary boost at the end, well done, blessings and good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your kind words.
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Most welckme
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Faith.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-You create a good word picture of
the droplets on the spider's web.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Faith.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-You create a good word picture of
the droplets on the spider's web.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you for your kind words.
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You are welcome.