The Other Side
What lies ahead44 total reviews
Comment from Willie P. Smith
When I first started reading your poem, I thought you were dying. There's a lot of lessons to be learned in your poem. I really enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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When I first started reading your poem, I thought you were dying. There's a lot of lessons to be learned in your poem. I really enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Willie. Not dying yet, but getting closer.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Excellant presentation !!
This is well realized and composed.
The sentiment is heartfelt and well
received. I hope all of your readers
will take the message to heart.
The metre created from the rhymes is
just right and is not forced.
This is a great contest submission that
I hope will do well. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Excellant presentation !!
This is well realized and composed.
The sentiment is heartfelt and well
received. I hope all of your readers
will take the message to heart.
The metre created from the rhymes is
just right and is not forced.
This is a great contest submission that
I hope will do well. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, KL. Hope to see you there.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
This piece relates much of how I feel. Even though our shell is left behind our form continues on and if there is one thing we take with us it is the intelligence learned.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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This piece relates much of how I feel. Even though our shell is left behind our form continues on and if there is one thing we take with us it is the intelligence learned.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Tom. We will probably find out that some of the things we learned on Earth were incorrect.
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Probably? 😳
Comment from jake cosmos aller
great poem about the afterlife and what is to come.
like this stanza the best
If I can help incoming souls
Adapt to their immortal roles.
But now I'll wait and pin my hopes
On watching close and learn the ropes.
Then when I'm trained, and things are clear,
I'll see if I can find God here.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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great poem about the afterlife and what is to come.
like this stanza the best
If I can help incoming souls
Adapt to their immortal roles.
But now I'll wait and pin my hopes
On watching close and learn the ropes.
Then when I'm trained, and things are clear,
I'll see if I can find God here.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Jake. I'll be really interested to see what He looks like.
Comment from jessizero
I love your poem. I especially loved the part about "walking arm in arm with someone who had done me harm." Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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I love your poem. I especially loved the part about "walking arm in arm with someone who had done me harm." Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Jessi. Hopefully, I will see you there.
Comment from Spitfire
No one else mentioned this spag in their review, so maybe it only shows up on my computer. Line 5 reads:
I leave my humble place of birth â?"
As for the content, from what I'm this is what to expect: meeting those who have passed over, no animosities. I never heard the theory that it takes time to adjust. That has been explored in a few movies on the subject.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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No one else mentioned this spag in their review, so maybe it only shows up on my computer. Line 5 reads:
I leave my humble place of birth â?"
As for the content, from what I'm this is what to expect: meeting those who have passed over, no animosities. I never heard the theory that it takes time to adjust. That has been explored in a few movies on the subject.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Shari. Hope you are doing better.
Comment from royowen
I think because of the conflicts of this life, even with the quirks and foibles of those we are closely allied to, and if we can't resolve them, we realise how disharmony can ruin even an agreeable situation, we have to learn, it's not easy, but we know that our intentions of the heart is good. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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I think because of the conflicts of this life, even with the quirks and foibles of those we are closely allied to, and if we can't resolve them, we realise how disharmony can ruin even an agreeable situation, we have to learn, it's not easy, but we know that our intentions of the heart is good. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Roy. You have always set a fine example.
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Well done Paul, thank you
Comment from dragonpoet
Paul,
This poem flows smoothly and has simple unforce rhymes. It tells of how life in Heaven in so different than it is on Earth. Their are no friends and enemies, just family. I wonder what you would be trained to do up there.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Paul,
This poem flows smoothly and has simple unforce rhymes. It tells of how life in Heaven in so different than it is on Earth. Their are no friends and enemies, just family. I wonder what you would be trained to do up there.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Joan. There must be things to do there which require training. I can't imagine spending eternity just sitting around.
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You're welcome, Paul. Maybe they train you on how to be a guardian angel.
Joan
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I would like that.
Comment from amahra
There are so many great writers on FS, I have to sigh when contemplating whether to give a six-star rating. I'm always afraid a writing will come along later and I wished I'd held out; we're only given so many. Well, I held out, and here you are. You told a believable story, with awesome rhyming and great rhythm. Fantastic job. Now if something finer comes along, which I seriously doubt, I'm up doo-doo creek without a paddle. LOL!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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There are so many great writers on FS, I have to sigh when contemplating whether to give a six-star rating. I'm always afraid a writing will come along later and I wished I'd held out; we're only given so many. Well, I held out, and here you are. You told a believable story, with awesome rhyming and great rhythm. Fantastic job. Now if something finer comes along, which I seriously doubt, I'm up doo-doo creek without a paddle. LOL!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks for the great review, amahra. Thanks for saving the six stars.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sad tale of the end of life and your dream of a perfect afterlife is something you must cling to Paul. A fine poem for the contest, a faithful write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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A sad tale of the end of life and your dream of a perfect afterlife is something you must cling to Paul. A fine poem for the contest, a faithful write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks, Christine. Maybe we will meet up there and compare sonnets.
