Where can I go?
A poem41 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent write, Roy. Yes, none can hide from Him, and for those who love Him there is comfort in knowing that even the darkness of grief, persecution or difficulty can separate us from His love, care and wisdom. Well written!!
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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An excellent write, Roy. Yes, none can hide from Him, and for those who love Him there is comfort in knowing that even the darkness of grief, persecution or difficulty can separate us from His love, care and wisdom. Well written!!
Wendy
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thanks Wendy, for these splendid comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This was definitely a spiritual poem.
Four quatrains was an effective form to choose. I think you included all the important words for spiritual thoughts, like creation's, hearts, love, light, silence, peace, faith, mercy, prayer, grace, etc. I think I liked these lines best:
My prayer is that faith pierces night,
that darkness trembles, then takes flight.
It seems to have an implied metaphor there, with 'flight' suggesting perhaps that darkness has something in common with a bird that might be easily frightened into flying away. Strong sense of rhythm and rhyme, as always!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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This was definitely a spiritual poem.
Four quatrains was an effective form to choose. I think you included all the important words for spiritual thoughts, like creation's, hearts, love, light, silence, peace, faith, mercy, prayer, grace, etc. I think I liked these lines best:
My prayer is that faith pierces night,
that darkness trembles, then takes flight.
It seems to have an implied metaphor there, with 'flight' suggesting perhaps that darkness has something in common with a bird that might be easily frightened into flying away. Strong sense of rhythm and rhyme, as always!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much Crystie, for these terrific comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this spiritual verse exploring one's faith.
The repeated phrases were effective to circle the reader back to poems beginning, further strengthening the message.
The tone is one of positivity, and I think with the state of our country- world we can all use inspiration for a brighter tomorrow.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed this spiritual verse exploring one's faith.
The repeated phrases were effective to circle the reader back to poems beginning, further strengthening the message.
The tone is one of positivity, and I think with the state of our country- world we can all use inspiration for a brighter tomorrow.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much for these terrific comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wow, what a beautiful poem, Roy. You describe that sacred place where God's beautiful nature holds an intimate place no one else can share, it's just you and God. The imagery is outstanding as the presentation is too. Well done, my friend.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid."-+ Atticus
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Wow, what a beautiful poem, Roy. You describe that sacred place where God's beautiful nature holds an intimate place no one else can share, it's just you and God. The imagery is outstanding as the presentation is too. Well done, my friend.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid."-+ Atticus
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Thanks Gypsy, for these most positive comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from lyenochka
You're so right - there is no place that we can hide from God. And He knows everything about us - even those things we don't know about ourselves. Beautiful spiritual poem, Roy! You must reflect a lot on the wings of the morning.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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You're so right - there is no place that we can hide from God. And He knows everything about us - even those things we don't know about ourselves. Beautiful spiritual poem, Roy! You must reflect a lot on the wings of the morning.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2022
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Thanks Helen, for these most positive comments and a kind review, blessings Roy
Comment from bob cullen
I'm not sure if you've ever bettered this poem, Roy. The phrasing here floats effortlessly. You pose questions then provide the answers. Best line.
'My prayer is that Faith pierces night.' Just superb.
My translation and my belief. "My prayer is that the Lord forgives.'
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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I'm not sure if you've ever bettered this poem, Roy. The phrasing here floats effortlessly. You pose questions then provide the answers. Best line.
'My prayer is that Faith pierces night.' Just superb.
My translation and my belief. "My prayer is that the Lord forgives.'
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much Bob, for these terrific comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your skillfully written, deeply reverent poem conveys a powerful message about our omniscient, omnipotent, omnipresent God. We must strive to do His will so these realities won't terrify us!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Your skillfully written, deeply reverent poem conveys a powerful message about our omniscient, omnipotent, omnipresent God. We must strive to do His will so these realities won't terrify us!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much Janice, for these terrific comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from sunnilicious
You can go anywhere your mind desires. It could be an at home or outdoor adventure. It was lovely work. Nice poem. However, I question "crimson tide". It has double meaning to inbreeding because, a few years ago, I saw it in a film with the same title.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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You can go anywhere your mind desires. It could be an at home or outdoor adventure. It was lovely work. Nice poem. However, I question "crimson tide". It has double meaning to inbreeding because, a few years ago, I saw it in a film with the same title.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thanks Alicia, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from GWHARGIS
I have been gone from Fanstory for close to 2 years. So happy that I came back and your poetry was the first thing I find. I love the value of silence. The older I get the more I cherish it. God does speak through noise and chaos but it is in those quiet moments that I truly hear him. Once again your poetry has grounded me. Keep up your moving and spiritually uplifting work
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I have been gone from Fanstory for close to 2 years. So happy that I came back and your poetry was the first thing I find. I love the value of silence. The older I get the more I cherish it. God does speak through noise and chaos but it is in those quiet moments that I truly hear him. Once again your poetry has grounded me. Keep up your moving and spiritually uplifting work
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much Gretchen, for these terrific comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Roy,
Your poem shines as you stress God's power, yet His gentle, loving nature. It reminds me of the 23rd psalm that stresses He is with us, even in the shadow of death. No problem or situation is too big for God's light. We just need to embrace His light.
Beautiful work, Roy.
Good luck!
Blessings
I love your unique use of adjectives: dawn's mercy glow, deepest night....
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Roy,
Your poem shines as you stress God's power, yet His gentle, loving nature. It reminds me of the 23rd psalm that stresses He is with us, even in the shadow of death. No problem or situation is too big for God's light. We just need to embrace His light.
Beautiful work, Roy.
Good luck!
Blessings
I love your unique use of adjectives: dawn's mercy glow, deepest night....
Comment Written 11-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much Cindy, for these terrific comments and a super review, blessings Roy
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Good morning, Roy.
Have a wonderful day!
Blessings,
Cindy
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You too Cindy
