Modern life
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Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Wendy,
this poem starts off with a rat-a-tat-tat and delivers all the way.
Your minimalistic format, allowed the words and intent to pop with each new verse... all of which made perfect sense in perfect rhyme.
The time theme and image, pair beautifully.
I believe you captured the mood within the bustle of city living.
The... time unwinds inside my head
Then it snaps-life's broken thread.
I know that's pretty much the way I feel every time I visit Sydney, or even Brisvagas...
that and,
Jostle, jangle
what a tangle
Harsh vibrations
Weird sensations.
I enjoyed the ease of this read, but not only the ease, the composition, whilst simple, it's catchy, lyrical and stays in theme in every verse.
Very enjoyable... well done, especially sensing... a stepping out of the usual style I am use to reading from you. Can't be a bad thing, right?
With our thoughts we create...
a sense of congestion.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Hi Wendy,
this poem starts off with a rat-a-tat-tat and delivers all the way.
Your minimalistic format, allowed the words and intent to pop with each new verse... all of which made perfect sense in perfect rhyme.
The time theme and image, pair beautifully.
I believe you captured the mood within the bustle of city living.
The... time unwinds inside my head
Then it snaps-life's broken thread.
I know that's pretty much the way I feel every time I visit Sydney, or even Brisvagas...
that and,
Jostle, jangle
what a tangle
Harsh vibrations
Weird sensations.
I enjoyed the ease of this read, but not only the ease, the composition, whilst simple, it's catchy, lyrical and stays in theme in every verse.
Very enjoyable... well done, especially sensing... a stepping out of the usual style I am use to reading from you. Can't be a bad thing, right?
With our thoughts we create...
a sense of congestion.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Wow, thank you very much James for the Exceptional rating and the six beautiful stars. Very different one from me, you are right, but it almost wrote itself, and expressed my horror of that jarring life! So glad it was just one day (in the last two or three years!)
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Wendy,
What a fantastic work of avant-garde poetry. Your use of rhyme and alliteration make this poem flow. I love the sound of it. And the meaning is clear about city living; even though small towns have their own brand of cacophony and strict conforming to conventions. (I live in a small town, but have lived in a few cities).
Awesome work, Wendy.
Good luck with this and all of your writing!
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Wendy,
What a fantastic work of avant-garde poetry. Your use of rhyme and alliteration make this poem flow. I love the sound of it. And the meaning is clear about city living; even though small towns have their own brand of cacophony and strict conforming to conventions. (I live in a small town, but have lived in a few cities).
Awesome work, Wendy.
Good luck with this and all of your writing!
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Wow, thank you so much Cindy. I appreciate your Exceptional rating and stars. So glad you enjoyed it, even though it is very different from my usual style.
Wendy
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Wendy,
It?s great to experiment with different styles.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment from Mrs. KT
Delightful offerng and so true, Wendy!
I must admit, however, that as I began reading your exceptional offering, for which I have no six stars left, I thought you were describing the inside of my purse! Too funny! It, too, calls for "compelling restoration," but, sadly, it is my "life's broken thread!" :)
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Delightful offerng and so true, Wendy!
I must admit, however, that as I began reading your exceptional offering, for which I have no six stars left, I thought you were describing the inside of my purse! Too funny! It, too, calls for "compelling restoration," but, sadly, it is my "life's broken thread!" :)
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Lol. Then your purse must be a bit like mine! Quite funny - it almost could apply when I am scrabbling around in there for keys or lip balm or multiple other assorted things. Many thanks for your fun review!
Wendy
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is genuine genius - reflecting the theme of your poem not just in the words but in the pace and breakneck, machine gun rhythm. I love how naturally discordant this feels. Awesome!
Mike
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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This is genuine genius - reflecting the theme of your poem not just in the words but in the pace and breakneck, machine gun rhythm. I love how naturally discordant this feels. Awesome!
Mike
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you Mike! I am so pleased to read your super words. It is not so much a poem to "like", but the theme resonates with many of us, because of that precise discord about city life. I appreciate your very encouraging review.
Wendy
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and good presentation, Wendy.
-I love the background color!
-Notes are appreciated, too.
-You did a good job with the poem and form,
and get across the feelings you had when in the city.
-Very good images and rhyme, like
"Harsh vibrations
Weird sensations"
-I also like the closing verse.
-Very well done!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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-Nice artwork and good presentation, Wendy.
-I love the background color!
-Notes are appreciated, too.
-You did a good job with the poem and form,
and get across the feelings you had when in the city.
-Very good images and rhyme, like
"Harsh vibrations
Weird sensations"
-I also like the closing verse.
-Very well done!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much Pam. Your thoughtful review is helpful and encouraging.
Wendy
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You are very welcome, Wendy.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a clever write, I love the alliteration and the inventive use of words that remind me of the ticking clock and the chaos we find ourselves in during this city life and how we want to escape and enjoy some peace, I loved this write Wendy, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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This is a clever write, I love the alliteration and the inventive use of words that remind me of the ticking clock and the chaos we find ourselves in during this city life and how we want to escape and enjoy some peace, I loved this write Wendy, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Wow, thank you so much Dolly. I appreciate your Exceptional rating and stars. So glad you enjoyed it.
Wendy
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done. Your writing is excellent and you have a wonderful way of choosing the perfect words to help this flow and also share your message. Great job.
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Nicely done. Your writing is excellent and you have a wonderful way of choosing the perfect words to help this flow and also share your message. Great job.
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Than you very much Michael. I am glad to read your review with its encouraging words.
Wendy
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I believe your trip to the bustling noisy city had a peculiar effect on you. What did you do to have you skew what was written here by you? Take a pill. Chill. and whatever you do try to avoid going back. jk but this the
A.B Normal, Igor found in the graveyard.
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I believe your trip to the bustling noisy city had a peculiar effect on you. What did you do to have you skew what was written here by you? Take a pill. Chill. and whatever you do try to avoid going back. jk but this the
A.B Normal, Igor found in the graveyard.
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2022
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Thank you Tom. Yes, I was glad to get home - but I did enjoy shocking some people with this jarring write! It almost wrote itself. My mind has now settled back to its normal peace and quiet.
Wendy
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No I?ll intent intended Sincerely
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No I?ll intent intended Sincerely
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All good, don't worry, Tom! You are right - the trip to the city did my head in! But I enjoyed shocking people a bit with this way-out piece too!
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All good!
