The Rock of Mich-uk-isaw
A Tale From Fanny's Grand-Nephew33 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Very interesting contest entry. I have a feeling this incident happens more than once in these small towns. LOL I am curious what happened to Sarah. I surely hope it ended well. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Very interesting contest entry. I have a feeling this incident happens more than once in these small towns. LOL I am curious what happened to Sarah. I surely hope it ended well. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Barbara, for the kind words and for buffering it all up with a sixer! I purposely left it open as to Sarah's and the unnamed narrator's fate.
Comment from amahra
Jay, buddy...that was torture LOL! Ok, I get the granny Brauwarmer, but to throw this on top of it was sheer murder on my poh ole eyes. It's going to take me a while to get my eyes uncrossed.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Jay, buddy...that was torture LOL! Ok, I get the granny Brauwarmer, but to throw this on top of it was sheer murder on my poh ole eyes. It's going to take me a while to get my eyes uncrossed.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Ah, thank you, Amahra, for stopping by. Are you really having trouble with your eyes? I hope not. You have too many good stories still untold in you. That might have been too much, throwing Fanny's grand-nephew's dialect atop her own. I just didn't want you to get out of practice while I'm preparing Miss Fanny's next scene to post.
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Jay, you're a real meanie. LOL. You don't seem broken up about torturing me at all. I'm kidding, the story was fine.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I had to read this twice to get all the implications, Jay, but I enjoyed it. The dialogue is great. Although Sarah being pregnant and Grand-nephew being her best friend and telling the story are obvious, you've left us with a lot of questions to consider. Maybe this is the best way to write interesting flash fiction. :) Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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I had to read this twice to get all the implications, Jay, but I enjoyed it. The dialogue is great. Although Sarah being pregnant and Grand-nephew being her best friend and telling the story are obvious, you've left us with a lot of questions to consider. Maybe this is the best way to write interesting flash fiction. :) Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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It's tough to write any fiction in exactly 250 words. I'm glad you took the time to read it twice. I was hoping there would be a lot of open questions. I'm always honored to have you reading my stories, Judy.
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You are most welcome, Jay. I always enjoy reading your work, and being made to think about it. :)
Comment from Shirley McLain
I liked your story, but I didn't like the dialect used. It was difficult to read for me. You did a great job, and I didn't see any errors. Have a great Father's Day. Shirley
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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I liked your story, but I didn't like the dialect used. It was difficult to read for me. You did a great job, and I didn't see any errors. Have a great Father's Day. Shirley
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much, Shirley, for the greetings this Father's Day. I understand about the dialect. It's really no different from Fanny's, except for the lack of y'all's. I'm just happy you're weighing in!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, since about everyone in the parts where I grew up talk about like the character you've portrayed, I didn't have any trouble understanding. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Well, since about everyone in the parts where I grew up talk about like the character you've portrayed, I didn't have any trouble understanding. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Ric. I appreciate your stopping by.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jay, this was priceless. You really made me smile with this little gem. So wee shy Sarah was not so shy after all lol but grand-nephew was not involved.
I loved ' like maggots a-toppa shit.' that's priceless. Good luck with this one. Ulla:)))
I'm not posting the Fisherman this week, but I have two other stories still paying.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Hi Jay, this was priceless. You really made me smile with this little gem. So wee shy Sarah was not so shy after all lol but grand-nephew was not involved.
I loved ' like maggots a-toppa shit.' that's priceless. Good luck with this one. Ulla:)))
I'm not posting the Fisherman this week, but I have two other stories still paying.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Ulla. I'm glad you enjoyed the little story. And the six you attached to it. There are little towns like this aplenty in rural America. I don't know how I missed your other postings, but I'll try to check them out today. Busy day!
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You will find them in my portfolio. One is a blind contest, the other is in my name. lol.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Great dialectic representation. I wouldn't want to attempt a novel length of it, but 250 words, i could handle.
So did the pastor pay grandma a visit, or Sarah a visit?
She was new there, so she came to live with Grandma to have her baby. But who was in the 'night glazed car winder'?
Another reason to avoid flash fiction, I guess.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Great dialectic representation. I wouldn't want to attempt a novel length of it, but 250 words, i could handle.
So did the pastor pay grandma a visit, or Sarah a visit?
She was new there, so she came to live with Grandma to have her baby. But who was in the 'night glazed car winder'?
Another reason to avoid flash fiction, I guess.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Wayne. It's always good to have you stop by. I purposely kept key issues concealed. Probably, though (I'm almost certain) that if Sarah wasn't around when the pastor got there the content of his visit was about her. Thanks again. Have a happy Father's Day.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Well, I'm guessing someone hit their mark, and it doesn't seem to be Fanny's Grand-Nephew. It seems Sarah skipped dinner, went to the dessert buffet, and got herself a mini cake in the oven. Ha! great stuff, Jay. I'm wondering if he's an introduction to new characters to come?
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Well, I'm guessing someone hit their mark, and it doesn't seem to be Fanny's Grand-Nephew. It seems Sarah skipped dinner, went to the dessert buffet, and got herself a mini cake in the oven. Ha! great stuff, Jay. I'm wondering if he's an introduction to new characters to come?
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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No, I don't look for ... (Geez, I don't think I gave him a name) for the lad to show up in a play or story of his own. I swon I was trying to get away from Fanny's dialect once the play's over. I just included a similar dialect today since it'll be another week before the "incomparable" returns, and I didn't want you to forget.
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No one forgets, Fanny! LOL. You didn't give him a name. He didn't need one, Jay.
Comment from BethShelby
I got a good chuckle from this one. That good-looking Sarah must not of been all that shy. It seems like a lot happened in just three weeks if I'm understanding the kid's way of talking. I grew up in Mississippi but this wasn't the lingo of my day.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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I got a good chuckle from this one. That good-looking Sarah must not of been all that shy. It seems like a lot happened in just three weeks if I'm understanding the kid's way of talking. I grew up in Mississippi but this wasn't the lingo of my day.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Hey, Beth ... thanks for stopping by. In my day a lot of the shy gals ended up pregnant. It was good she had a friend like the one I forgot to name. I appreciate you, Beth!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a tremendous little story. It is extremely expressive, with excellent imagerery (rumors spread like maggots a-toppa shit was priceless). It was perfectly paced for the content, and I loved every word of it
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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This is a tremendous little story. It is extremely expressive, with excellent imagerery (rumors spread like maggots a-toppa shit was priceless). It was perfectly paced for the content, and I loved every word of it
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Many thanks, Katherine. I'm happy you found the little snippet to your liking. The six stars made my morning!