One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I like the new poem form you have created. It reminds me of Robert's cube16 form because of it's symmetry. I hope I will find it as useful for considerations of death as the Cube is for happier occasions such as birthdays and weddings. I hope the restrictions of when to use it don't block its popularity. Kate xx
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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I like the new poem form you have created. It reminds me of Robert's cube16 form because of it's symmetry. I hope I will find it as useful for considerations of death as the Cube is for happier occasions such as birthdays and weddings. I hope the restrictions of when to use it don't block its popularity. Kate xx
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much, Kate. I appreciate your lovely review. I write it because I enjoy it, it's okay if others don't.
Hugs♡
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment from Fleedleflump
Fell winds spoil our supper,
death knells waft on the breeze,
incarcerating dread
within a grief-locked cell,
clamping our minds' thin weft
to flap - a flagged demise
I like it - cool form, and a beautiful pair of stanzas exploring the romance of the shade.
I very much enjoyed the read.
Mike
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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Fell winds spoil our supper,
death knells waft on the breeze,
incarcerating dread
within a grief-locked cell,
clamping our minds' thin weft
to flap - a flagged demise
I like it - cool form, and a beautiful pair of stanzas exploring the romance of the shade.
I very much enjoyed the read.
Mike
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Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Hello, Mike, I love your six feet under poem. You should post it. Thank you for the insightful feedback and excellent review. Hugs♡
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent post, the language is brilliant my friend, I love it. A quite dark post, but all of us fell that way sometimes, the death of a family member, or friend, or child. This is beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Suggestion : (that) stands 'round (a) small casket. A missing article!
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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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This is an excellent post, the language is brilliant my friend, I love it. A quite dark post, but all of us fell that way sometimes, the death of a family member, or friend, or child. This is beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Suggestion : (that) stands 'round (a) small casket. A missing article!
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Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and insightful feedback. I'm used to doing away with articles in Japanese poetry. I understand what you're saying but I need 6 syllables and 'small' is needed. Hugs♡
Gypsy
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A lot of people do, Eastern Europeans don?t have them in Slavic languages