One Worn Out Worker
Working during covid49 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
One Worn Out Worker
by Cindy Warren
Excellent job with your poem story. It has to be told and medical staff needs to get a break but with so many people with covid nurses and nurses aids work night and day until they reach their end. Overwhelmed medical staff, nurses, and doctors put their lives on the line every day. The sad thing is that if the unvaccinated would get vaccinated there wouldn't be so many sick people.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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One Worn Out Worker
by Cindy Warren
Excellent job with your poem story. It has to be told and medical staff needs to get a break but with so many people with covid nurses and nurses aids work night and day until they reach their end. Overwhelmed medical staff, nurses, and doctors put their lives on the line every day. The sad thing is that if the unvaccinated would get vaccinated there wouldn't be so many sick people.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks. I think the last two years have been hard on us. Health care workers are overworked, and other occupations have lost their jobs and businesses. Hopefully things will get back to normal soon.
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Yes, I hope things improve soon. It seems that way. Thank you very much for your dedication and hard work.
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Yes, I hope things improve soon. It seems that way. Thank you very much for your dedication and hard work.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed the rhyming scheme. You did a wonderful job describing the emotion of the situation. You are your co-workers are truly angels on Earth.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed the rhyming scheme. You did a wonderful job describing the emotion of the situation. You are your co-workers are truly angels on Earth.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks. It's a tough job, but it's worth it.
Comment from SimianSavant
Great story and reminder about how much it sucks to take care of the dying, especially in the Covid era.
I see a few places where the meter could be smoothed out by shortening some of your lines, to make your poem "pop" a little more, consistent with the meter of your first stanza. Let me give some examples:
With a deadly new virus, a terrible thing. <= this deadly virus does its thing. (I know that sounds a bit silly)
The lovely Addie is a bit confused. <= lovely Addie is confused
I tell her I must wear this in case I cough <= I tell her it's in case I cough
But Addie immediately snatches it off. <= but Addie snatches it right off
Any germs that may lurk on mask or bands <= germs that lurk on mask or bands
Are now being clutched in both her hands. <= she now clutches in both hands
I pry them loose, a little squashed <= good, no changes
And proceed to get Addie up and washed. <= maybe: and get my Addie up and washed
She must stay in her room, she doesn't know why
<= stuck in her room, she wonders "why?"
She's scared and confused and starts to cry.
<= scared and confused, she starts to cry
You get the idea. Hopefully this is helpful!
Best,
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Great story and reminder about how much it sucks to take care of the dying, especially in the Covid era.
I see a few places where the meter could be smoothed out by shortening some of your lines, to make your poem "pop" a little more, consistent with the meter of your first stanza. Let me give some examples:
With a deadly new virus, a terrible thing. <= this deadly virus does its thing. (I know that sounds a bit silly)
The lovely Addie is a bit confused. <= lovely Addie is confused
I tell her I must wear this in case I cough <= I tell her it's in case I cough
But Addie immediately snatches it off. <= but Addie snatches it right off
Any germs that may lurk on mask or bands <= germs that lurk on mask or bands
Are now being clutched in both her hands. <= she now clutches in both hands
I pry them loose, a little squashed <= good, no changes
And proceed to get Addie up and washed. <= maybe: and get my Addie up and washed
She must stay in her room, she doesn't know why
<= stuck in her room, she wonders "why?"
She's scared and confused and starts to cry.
<= scared and confused, she starts to cry
You get the idea. Hopefully this is helpful!
Best,
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks for the review and the suggestions. I'll take another look at those lines.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This poem is exceptional in every respect--skillfully written, so moving, and vividly descriptive. The details are so realistic because they ARE real--the confused, pitiable, difficult patients that throw stuff, the clingy ones that don't want you to leave their room, the feeling of being drained at the end of the day . . . ! God bless you for what you do and for sharing your experiences with us!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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This poem is exceptional in every respect--skillfully written, so moving, and vividly descriptive. The details are so realistic because they ARE real--the confused, pitiable, difficult patients that throw stuff, the clingy ones that don't want you to leave their room, the feeling of being drained at the end of the day . . . ! God bless you for what you do and for sharing your experiences with us!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks for the six! Yes, it's real, and it's tough, but these people are worth it.
Comment from Terry Broxson
A well-written and heartfelt poem. Thank you for your service to all the patients you take care of in this time of need. I cannot imagine how hard this must have been in the beginning and there is no end in sight! Outstanding work as a human being and a writer!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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A well-written and heartfelt poem. Thank you for your service to all the patients you take care of in this time of need. I cannot imagine how hard this must have been in the beginning and there is no end in sight! Outstanding work as a human being and a writer!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks for the six! Yes, it was hard, but these vulnerable people are worth the effort.
Comment from RGstar
I felt this to my bones Cindy. If we had more sixes you would have received.
This summed up the light of some of our healthcare workers. A first hand view and angle many might not think of.
Its an eye opener many not understanding the emotional turmoil.
Bravo.
Well done.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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I felt this to my bones Cindy. If we had more sixes you would have received.
This summed up the light of some of our healthcare workers. A first hand view and angle many might not think of.
Its an eye opener many not understanding the emotional turmoil.
Bravo.
Well done.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks. It's not an easy job, but it's worth it.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A wonderful story and tribute to all those who work so hard during this pandemic, and to you for working so hard under difficult circumstances.
Very well-rhymed and excellent "tell it like it is." poem.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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A wonderful story and tribute to all those who work so hard during this pandemic, and to you for working so hard under difficult circumstances.
Very well-rhymed and excellent "tell it like it is." poem.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks. Yes, it's been hard but these people are worth it.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
I really like your poem, because it epitomizes just what the covid epidemic is all about. If your poem were read in one hundred years, readers would get a painful idea of how terrible covid was.
Blessings to you and good luck in the contest.
Cindy
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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I really like your poem, because it epitomizes just what the covid epidemic is all about. If your poem were read in one hundred years, readers would get a painful idea of how terrible covid was.
Blessings to you and good luck in the contest.
Cindy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks. Hopefully the end is in sight and in a few years Covid will just be a memory.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Cindy a marvelous Monday morning to you. I hope this finds you well. First let me say thank you to all the Front line workers out there risking their health to keep the world moving. You did a good job telling your story, the flow and rhymes were good. Have a great day!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Hello Cindy a marvelous Monday morning to you. I hope this finds you well. First let me say thank you to all the Front line workers out there risking their health to keep the world moving. You did a good job telling your story, the flow and rhymes were good. Have a great day!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem and found it meaningful.
Comment from karenina
Thank you so very much for this difficult work you have done... Continue to do. All you handle, plus trying but juggle A personal life, keep yourself healthy, deal with the emotional drain! I was nearly 35 years an RN. I'm so glad I am retired now. Your poem reminded me off all of my Alzheimer's patients. They must be so frightened!
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you so very much for this difficult work you have done... Continue to do. All you handle, plus trying but juggle A personal life, keep yourself healthy, deal with the emotional drain! I was nearly 35 years an RN. I'm so glad I am retired now. Your poem reminded me off all of my Alzheimer's patients. They must be so frightened!
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thanks. Yes, it was scary for the Alzheimer's patients, especially when the families couldn't visit. Those visits make a big difference, even if they don't remember ten minutes later.
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True! So true! They forget, and when they are reminded they are retraumatized all over again.