Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Great story in a poem Stuart with a delightful twist in the end.
I was drawn into the story from the very beginning and you kept the pace to the very end.

Well done.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022

Thanks so very much.......My grandma could have pulled this off!......Godspeed to you and yours going forward......Stu Harrell

Comment from NANCY V. FORREST

Excellent

Interesting piece with a nice blend of history and a legend twist. It flows well and evokes a sense of the character's feelings and experience. I enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022

Thanks so very much....Godspeed to you and yours going forward.....Stu Harrell

reply by NANCY V. FORREST on 18-Jan-2022

:-)

Comment from Susan Newell

Excellent

This is a beautifully told story in poetic form. The surprise ending added to the fun of it. I had heard of one woman who disguised herself as a man in order to fight in the Civil War (I think; memory is sketchy.) But I like this story of a young girl eager to challenge the crown.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022

Thanks so very much....As a tiny footnote ...there are some heartfelt stories of black women...former slaves.....who rode with the black Buffalo Soldiers in the West disguised as men......Godspeed to you and yours going forward......Stu Harrell

reply by Susan Newell on 18-Jan-2022

You are welcome. Interesting about the female Buffalo Soldiers.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. If history book wrote poem/stories as well as you do, I would probably be better at history. I found history boring, but I loved this. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022

Thanks so very much...I am an old guy...but a young man asked me once ...being raised in Virginia....if I had ever met General Lee....Good Heavens...Thanks again....and Godspeed to you and yours.....Stu Harrell

Comment from Wayne Fowler

Excellent

I'm not a poet, and probably shouldn't play one here.
But your story looks like a poem to me. Good job, I think.
I assume the 2nd and 4th lines are to rhyme. I get confused when others rhyme, as well.
Thanks for the story.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022

Thanks so very much.....Not sure I am much of a poet...you are right ...the second and fourth lines are the rhyme....I sort of bash these out on a legal pad and then launch them into the contest void....some better than others....Thanks again and Godspeed....Stu Harrell

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

LOL, a very well-done poem for this contest, good luck. I did like the surprise ending. You tell a charming story set in a battle that has a good outcome for everyone but those pesky brits. Good work.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022

Thanks so very much......I enjoy these little squiggle, wiggle tales.......Godspeed and Good Luck going forward......Stu Harrell

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

This is an interesting story in a poem. It's beautifully written. It makes sense. I have enjoyed reading it. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022

Yo Brother.....Thanks so much....Most of my entries are like this...a sort of jumble bumble verse.....not elegant like some others...but fun for the old guy....Godspeed and Best Wishes.....Stu Harrell

reply by Raul1 on 17-Jan-2022

You're welcome!

Comment from Barry Penfold

Excellent

Had a laugh with this one and well written. It is awhile since I have read an Ode but I will not forget the one to Grendy Frump. Excellent.
Have a good day.
Regards
Barry Penfold

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022

Thanks so very much ....these are little jibber jabber verses so I am trying to trim the sails somewhat...as they say....Godspeed to you and yours......Stu Harrell

Comment from Melodie Michelle

Good

The poem itself is worth of five stars but I hesitate on giving that because it's the entire presentation that I review on!
I would consider adding imagery to the piece to brighten and to tie it all together and find a warmer happier background color!
Thanks for sharing and many blessings to you and your family this New Year;-)

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 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022

Thanks so much....you are right....this is a bit slapped together..Can you help me?...whenever..I get confused by the whizbang art that comes with some of these entries....did the writer draw that?....Is it chosen from a broad gallery?...Glad to pay extra fees....but not sure what all this is....Should know by now I guess....Godspeed to you and yours and thanks again.....Stu Harrell

reply by Melodie Michelle on 16-Jan-2022

Stu, you can choose an image from you device or from FanStory Art! It gives you the option when you choose an image. Yes, what do you need help with?

Comment from Sally Carter

Excellent

That's a great story -no wonder it inspired you to write a poem.

There's so much in Grendy Flump that I enjoyed I feel a bit mean with my 4. However, some of the meter is inconsistent, which is a shame. (And I acknowlege I am a bit meter obsessive....) I see it's a contest entry, so I wonder whether it would be worth a few tweaks if you have the time. Did a word escape in the verse beginning, "We're in dire little lad"? Or am I reading it wrong?

Actually I just read it again, and it's got a 5! LOL

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022

Thanks so much.....you are right...this is a little sloppy....need tweaks as you say...Can you help me? ...whenever.....I get confused by the whizbang art that goes with many of these entries....is the writer drawing that?...selecting from a large gallery in the art section?.....Glad to pay extra fees...just not quite sure how some of this works....should know by now I guess.....Thanks again and Godspeed to you and yours.

reply by Sally Carter on 16-Jan-2022

Haha, I am a new returner, absent now for probably eight years. And I am a bit mindblown by all the promotion opportunities that have appeared in my absence. One could spend a fortune on this! I would like to think talent is recognised as such without massive promotion, but will take my time and see what emerges. To be honest I'm pretty tied up at the moment, but I love your positive response, and IF I get any free time I'll have another read and see if any suggestions leap out at me. Best wishes, Sally