Separate Pools
A commentary on the recent school shooting in Michigan.51 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
As long as adults have guns, young men will get their hands on them before they are responsible enough to be careful. I have seen accidents on farms where children are taught early in life how to handle a gun. Something always goes wrong even though guns are necessary on farms. But you are absolutely correct when you say they do not make a gift for a child even an older child, Giddy
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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As long as adults have guns, young men will get their hands on them before they are responsible enough to be careful. I have seen accidents on farms where children are taught early in life how to handle a gun. Something always goes wrong even though guns are necessary on farms. But you are absolutely correct when you say they do not make a gift for a child even an older child, Giddy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you Miss Giddy. It is a pleasure to make your acquaintance. I also enjoyed your thoughts on this difficult subject.
Comment from VJWild
Wow, what I find to be interesting about this poem is it flows and feels like a nursery rhyme (even though we know it isn't) then that last line...BOOM...it hits hard. One line brings the entire situation right into our hearts and minds. Well done, this is pretty amazing!
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Wow, what I find to be interesting about this poem is it flows and feels like a nursery rhyme (even though we know it isn't) then that last line...BOOM...it hits hard. One line brings the entire situation right into our hearts and minds. Well done, this is pretty amazing!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you, That was my exact intention.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Nomi,
I believe not only your poem makes a big and truthful statement, your notes solidify the mentality of believing that guns in the hands of any people who are harbouring a myriad of issues and mental health is never going to end with a good result.
I loved your poem, I love your intent, and the kind soul behind it all.
I know it's going to be hard to change a nation so ingrained in gun culture... and the antiquated laws and amendments who encourage certain rights and excuses. Here in Australia and elsewhere around the world who have cracked down on certain weapons, guns and such., still have gun related killings, It's wrong, it's sad... but where there is a buck to be made, lives do not come into the equation... just further instability.
Thank you for sharing your poem my friend... well said!
With our thoughts we create...
sensibility of a peaceful existence.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hi Nomi,
I believe not only your poem makes a big and truthful statement, your notes solidify the mentality of believing that guns in the hands of any people who are harbouring a myriad of issues and mental health is never going to end with a good result.
I loved your poem, I love your intent, and the kind soul behind it all.
I know it's going to be hard to change a nation so ingrained in gun culture... and the antiquated laws and amendments who encourage certain rights and excuses. Here in Australia and elsewhere around the world who have cracked down on certain weapons, guns and such., still have gun related killings, It's wrong, it's sad... but where there is a buck to be made, lives do not come into the equation... just further instability.
Thank you for sharing your poem my friend... well said!
With our thoughts we create...
sensibility of a peaceful existence.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you James for your sober and intelligent assessment on gun violence and the attitude that allows it to continue unabated.
Comment from Sapphire P.
Hi. This is a wonderfully written poem about a very sad situation. It shows how some parents abuse with their lack of love and affection, thus leading their kids down a road of destruction. It's an eye opener and a reminder of school violence. Very well done.
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Hi. This is a wonderfully written poem about a very sad situation. It shows how some parents abuse with their lack of love and affection, thus leading their kids down a road of destruction. It's an eye opener and a reminder of school violence. Very well done.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you Nina, I appreciate your great comments.
Comment from Gloria ....
I like everything about this poem. In its subtly, starting with the artwork's silhouette, shadow and puddles leads into the tragedy that occurs with too little intelligent love, and too much fire power.
Top of the line poem here, that will stick with me.
Many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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I like everything about this poem. In its subtly, starting with the artwork's silhouette, shadow and puddles leads into the tragedy that occurs with too little intelligent love, and too much fire power.
Top of the line poem here, that will stick with me.
Many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Ah Gloria, I have received many complimentary comments regarding this poem. Your comments are by far the most enjoyable, I thank you from the bottom of my heart all the way up to the top.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Nomi338,
You have beautifully depicted that the Parents/ Guardians should teach their wards the techniques of controlling a fit of anger before putting guns in their hands.
Impressive wording; Smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Nice piece of poetry with a Moral!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Hello Nomi338,
You have beautifully depicted that the Parents/ Guardians should teach their wards the techniques of controlling a fit of anger before putting guns in their hands.
Impressive wording; Smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
Nice piece of poetry with a Moral!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate your thoughts. I am well pleased that I have not been attacked by any gun enthusiasts, at least not yet.
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Nomi338, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from LJbutterfly
This piece is perfectly titled and your poem adequately captures the essence and horror of the shooting event in Michigan. Unstable individuals and young irresponsible people should not have easy access to firearms. Your message is clear. Thank you.
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This piece is perfectly titled and your poem adequately captures the essence and horror of the shooting event in Michigan. Unstable individuals and young irresponsible people should not have easy access to firearms. Your message is clear. Thank you.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you, your thoughts are both supportive and uplifting.
Comment from roof35
This poem is certainly topical. It was such a sad event and the young shooter was a victim, too, as you indicated with your words. All parents make mistakes but this is beyond terrible. You captured my feelings.
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This poem is certainly topical. It was such a sad event and the young shooter was a victim, too, as you indicated with your words. All parents make mistakes but this is beyond terrible. You captured my feelings.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much. As a writer, it is always gratifying to know that I am not the only one who sees thing a certain way.
Comment from dragonpoet
Nomi,
This is a simple recap of yet another horrible school shooting done in mono-rhyme quatrains. I think that there should be stricter gun laws in the U. S. and better gun training for owners. No one under 21 should own a gun or have unsupervised use of it. Good artwork.
Keep writing and stay healthly
Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Nomi,
This is a simple recap of yet another horrible school shooting done in mono-rhyme quatrains. I think that there should be stricter gun laws in the U. S. and better gun training for owners. No one under 21 should own a gun or have unsupervised use of it. Good artwork.
Keep writing and stay healthly
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you Joan. I appreciate you.
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My pleasure, Nomi
Joan
Comment from royowen
I wrote a poem called "Jesus didn't come with sword in hand" and it's so sad that people blame people for the shootings, rather the weapons providing temptation, to the weakness of human nature. It's like strong drink, or sexual deviousness, it's a weapon of offence not defence. Why o why, don't people understand. And how many young lives will be surrendered to the furnace of pointless self gratification. Blessings Roy
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I wrote a poem called "Jesus didn't come with sword in hand" and it's so sad that people blame people for the shootings, rather the weapons providing temptation, to the weakness of human nature. It's like strong drink, or sexual deviousness, it's a weapon of offence not defence. Why o why, don't people understand. And how many young lives will be surrendered to the furnace of pointless self gratification. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you Brother Roy, your strong feelings and opinions resonate with this fed up witness to man's inhumane treatment of his fellows.
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Well done