Heart Crafted Poems -2021
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Comment from Sherry Asbury
This rocks...I thought that was a cross, but sometimes I just imagine things because the cross is so dear to me, and it is the reason I fear death no more. God has reserved a fluffy cloud just for me. You did a splendid job here with just 8 words - the best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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This rocks...I thought that was a cross, but sometimes I just imagine things because the cross is so dear to me, and it is the reason I fear death no more. God has reserved a fluffy cloud just for me. You did a splendid job here with just 8 words - the best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
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thanks for reading my work.
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It was my pleasure.
Comment from jwsteele
Bemoaning life, he quivers!
Nearing deaths unknown rivers.
Exceptional poem
Exceptional Artwork
From this perspective very well done.
Yes death is the challenge!
What I like about the drawing is that it is difficult to identify what gender the subsect is. I'm content to remember it as a hermophrodite.
Nice work
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Bemoaning life, he quivers!
Nearing deaths unknown rivers.
Exceptional poem
Exceptional Artwork
From this perspective very well done.
Yes death is the challenge!
What I like about the drawing is that it is difficult to identify what gender the subsect is. I'm content to remember it as a hermophrodite.
Nice work
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you, death is a gender less process
Comment from amahra
I really really liked your artwork. It was unique as well as stunning. The poem required very few words but I found them quite compelling. Best wishes in the contest. Great job!
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I really really liked your artwork. It was unique as well as stunning. The poem required very few words but I found them quite compelling. Best wishes in the contest. Great job!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
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Thanks
Comment from Gert sherwood
lack of life-long preparation?
Unprepared
JLR I understand not preparing for death can make one cry a river.
And wonder if one was well prepared it's the same a river of tears? I like how you asked the questions ( who knows) ?
Gert
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lack of life-long preparation?
Unprepared
JLR I understand not preparing for death can make one cry a river.
And wonder if one was well prepared it's the same a river of tears? I like how you asked the questions ( who knows) ?
Gert
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
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Yes who knows thanks Gert
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JLR You are most welcone
Gert
Comment from Janetsue
Death is usually thought of as a dark subject, but you have addressed it very well in just two lines. I think most people have some reservations about this universal happening. If given a choice, I think we would all like to go in our sleep. That does happen to a lot of people.
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Death is usually thought of as a dark subject, but you have addressed it very well in just two lines. I think most people have some reservations about this universal happening. If given a choice, I think we would all like to go in our sleep. That does happen to a lot of people.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
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Yes, the time of transition remains a mystery for the curious of mind.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a deep one, Jim. You did a fantastic job with word choices and the rhyme scheme that you chose. The entire presentation is well thought out and deftly compiled. Well done and good luck, my friend.
Melissa
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This is a deep one, Jim. You did a fantastic job with word choices and the rhyme scheme that you chose. The entire presentation is well thought out and deftly compiled. Well done and good luck, my friend.
Melissa
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
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Hi Melissa, 🙏 thanks!
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi JLR,
Very well presented and composed.
Like the rhyme and sentiment, as it does blueprint a view of some people's demise.
If I may suggest *death's*.
All the very best in this contest, great job!
With our thoughts we create...
death's open door policy.
Kind regards,
James.
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Hi JLR,
Very well presented and composed.
Like the rhyme and sentiment, as it does blueprint a view of some people's demise.
If I may suggest *death's*.
All the very best in this contest, great job!
With our thoughts we create...
death's open door policy.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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James, thank you.
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My pleasure JLR.
Comment from Terry Broxson
An interesting eight words you have put together for this contest, good luck. I don't know if we are prepared for death or not. It is unknown, should we quiver? I just don't know. Very good job.
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An interesting eight words you have put together for this contest, good luck. I don't know if we are prepared for death or not. It is unknown, should we quiver? I just don't know. Very good job.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
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Yes this is a remaining mystery.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello JLR,
Even in 08 words, you have enriched this piece of Spiritual Poetry with charming rhyme. It's the remarkable plus point of this poem.
The minus point is that it doesn't depict any concrete sense. It's my opinion, and I hope you won't mind.
On the whole, nice Attempt!
GOOD LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Hello JLR,
Even in 08 words, you have enriched this piece of Spiritual Poetry with charming rhyme. It's the remarkable plus point of this poem.
The minus point is that it doesn't depict any concrete sense. It's my opinion, and I hope you won't mind.
On the whole, nice Attempt!
GOOD LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
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Thanks , death is a mystery and those who have not come to a place of yin yang may find the whole thought process one that make them shake and quiver or perhaps not.
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JLR, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Wendy G
It is strange that we have a whole life-time to prepare for death, and to consider our mortality, but for most it still brings fear and a sense of being unprepared. An effective use of eight words - best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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It is strange that we have a whole life-time to prepare for death, and to consider our mortality, but for most it still brings fear and a sense of being unprepared. An effective use of eight words - best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
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Thank you Wendy, this remains one of life?s great mysteries.