Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 56 "Football Chapter 30 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Sankey
Wow! What a chapter. Seems Gabriel and Katherine are talked about all over the place. Seems like a lot of jealousy. This was a great read and I hope you are getting better.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Wow! What a chapter. Seems Gabriel and Katherine are talked about all over the place. Seems like a lot of jealousy. This was a great read and I hope you are getting better.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This was great chapter. I like the way Katherine knows just what to do to get a win out of her girls The fight song didn't hurt either. Gabriel is like the dad her boys need in their life. He reall yseems to care about them.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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This was great chapter. I like the way Katherine knows just what to do to get a win out of her girls The fight song didn't hurt either. Gabriel is like the dad her boys need in their life. He reall yseems to care about them.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent post Barbara. It's very clever the way you wrote this. I like the feistiness of your main character Katherine, in this. It matches her love interest in Gabe, so well matched, I'm glad you provided a athletic background for you main character, well done, blessings Roy (my daughter, Catherine was athlete of the year in her teens, my granddaughter is a dance star, so proud of them) great post Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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This is an excellent post Barbara. It's very clever the way you wrote this. I like the feistiness of your main character Katherine, in this. It matches her love interest in Gabe, so well matched, I'm glad you provided a athletic background for you main character, well done, blessings Roy (my daughter, Catherine was athlete of the year in her teens, my granddaughter is a dance star, so proud of them) great post Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This chapter confirms the growing relationship between Gabriel and Katherine satisfactorily. I just have one niggle with the characters as they are developing. I suppose such perfect people do exist somewhere, but I've never seen any. The odd negative trait could be useful.
SPAG:
I'm going to busy Monday > I'm going to have a busy Monday
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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This chapter confirms the growing relationship between Gabriel and Katherine satisfactorily. I just have one niggle with the characters as they are developing. I suppose such perfect people do exist somewhere, but I've never seen any. The odd negative trait could be useful.
SPAG:
I'm going to busy Monday > I'm going to have a busy Monday
Comment Written 10-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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I've made that correction. They have faults and we've seen them They'll show up again. I promise.
Comment from judiverse
That was an interesting bit of controversy the opposing team's coach brought in about the coach not being allowed to run alongside her team. Gabriel helped settle it with the rule book saying that is was all right if the coach runs on the grass. There are certainly plenty of problems that come for Katherine, since it's not been long since she started her teaching job. Great characterizations in this. I believe you need to show something that's related to Katherine's teaching. Teaching AP classes is quite an achievement for someone just starting out, so show her doing something related to teaching. I recall something about a math word for the day. You might go back to that.
judi
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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That was an interesting bit of controversy the opposing team's coach brought in about the coach not being allowed to run alongside her team. Gabriel helped settle it with the rule book saying that is was all right if the coach runs on the grass. There are certainly plenty of problems that come for Katherine, since it's not been long since she started her teaching job. Great characterizations in this. I believe you need to show something that's related to Katherine's teaching. Teaching AP classes is quite an achievement for someone just starting out, so show her doing something related to teaching. I recall something about a math word for the day. You might go back to that.
judi
Comment Written 10-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Unfortunately other than Katherine teaching math, it doesn't move the story along. Thank you for the kind review.
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Teaching math is pretty important, and you could probably find a way to work it in, just to complete the picture. judi
Comment from Begin Again
"It's a nice,
Leave to these boys to come up
I'm going to busy Monday."
Just a couple of slips. Barbara. The brain is shifting faster than the fingers. LOL
Loved the chapter and the story, of course. Keep up the good work.
Hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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"It's a nice,
Leave to these boys to come up
I'm going to busy Monday."
Just a couple of slips. Barbara. The brain is shifting faster than the fingers. LOL
Loved the chapter and the story, of course. Keep up the good work.
Hugs, Carol
Comment Written 10-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the catches. I've fixed them and fund an additional one.
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Nice job!
Comment from Ulla
This is great, Barbara. They certainly put that coach in his place. He tried too belittle her as best as he could but never got away with it. Let the romance in now. I'm waiting.
"It's a nice, but why?" = "It's nice, but why?"
All best. Ulla:)))
I'm glad there's progress with your wrist. I hope all will go well. xx
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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This is great, Barbara. They certainly put that coach in his place. He tried too belittle her as best as he could but never got away with it. Let the romance in now. I'm waiting.
"It's a nice, but why?" = "It's nice, but why?"
All best. Ulla:)))
I'm glad there's progress with your wrist. I hope all will go well. xx
Comment Written 10-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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I've made the correction. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Another very interesting chapter. I was just wondering this week when we would see another chapter. Nice that your granddaughter was able to supply this picture for you, it is perfect for this part of your story. I am glad that your surgery is behind you and pray that your hand will heal quickly.
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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Another very interesting chapter. I was just wondering this week when we would see another chapter. Nice that your granddaughter was able to supply this picture for you, it is perfect for this part of your story. I am glad that your surgery is behind you and pray that your hand will heal quickly.
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Comment Written 10-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. I normally only post on Sunday's.
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You are welcome