Man From My Past
A Short Love Story32 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, interesting, descriptive and creative.
I pondered on the words of this poem and also the title of these words.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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The author's words are engaging, interesting, descriptive and creative.
I pondered on the words of this poem and also the title of these words.
The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much, haarmony 13.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This poem says so much. "I wanted your thirst." This is extremely sensual. I can visualize the eyes of a sexually thirsty man, lusting for a woman. "you drank from the red ripe glass." The woman willingly quenched his thirst. "wine and roses days." Like the song The days of wine and roses laugh and run away like a child at play. . .to a door marked 'nevermore.' This poem is creative and realistic. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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This poem says so much. "I wanted your thirst." This is extremely sensual. I can visualize the eyes of a sexually thirsty man, lusting for a woman. "you drank from the red ripe glass." The woman willingly quenched his thirst. "wine and roses days." Like the song The days of wine and roses laugh and run away like a child at play. . .to a door marked 'nevermore.' This poem is creative and realistic. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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thank you so much for understanding so well that thirst...
Comment from palmart
Short, nice and direct! All the ingredients of a great poem! Last line closes the circle that the first two has started. Picture was a great choice to complement your 5-7-5. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Short, nice and direct! All the ingredients of a great poem! Last line closes the circle that the first two has started. Picture was a great choice to complement your 5-7-5. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much.
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You`re very welcome, Amada!!
Have a wonderful weekend!!
God Bless you!
Comment from Begin Again
Sounds like one of those "never meant to be forever" moments in time...two ships passing in the night.... but lasting memories left behind to dwell in the mind forever.
smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Sounds like one of those "never meant to be forever" moments in time...two ships passing in the night.... but lasting memories left behind to dwell in the mind forever.
smiles, Carol
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much, Carol.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork, amada.
-A well written poem with
good syllable count and topic.
-Effective imagery with
"the red ripe glass."
-You told a good love story
in a few words.
-A good concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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-Very nice artwork, amada.
-A well written poem with
good syllable count and topic.
-Effective imagery with
"the red ripe glass."
-You told a good love story
in a few words.
-A good concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review, Pam.
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You are welcome, amada.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is evocative, but I am not sure what it means. I am assuming that the love was good but did not last. That is not clear, however. The last line simply says, 'wine and roses days.' So, it was romantic, right? The metaphor for the wine glass being you is not lost on me. I totally get it. I like the first line the best. 'I wanted your thirst--' this is a good beginning and, I wish it had stayed as strong as that first line, throughout the 5-7-5 poem. Thank you for letting me be honest with my response. I did not want to offend. Just to comment on this piece. Thank you for posting and, for risking getting reviews like mine, haha.
Have a great Tuesday,
Jesse
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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This is evocative, but I am not sure what it means. I am assuming that the love was good but did not last. That is not clear, however. The last line simply says, 'wine and roses days.' So, it was romantic, right? The metaphor for the wine glass being you is not lost on me. I totally get it. I like the first line the best. 'I wanted your thirst--' this is a good beginning and, I wish it had stayed as strong as that first line, throughout the 5-7-5 poem. Thank you for letting me be honest with my response. I did not want to offend. Just to comment on this piece. Thank you for posting and, for risking getting reviews like mine, haha.
Have a great Tuesday,
Jesse
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you for expressing your thoughts, Jesse.
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You're welcome, Amada.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from Senyai
Hi Amada,
I like your 5-7-5 poem. It rings with a sure ting* as if off the "red ripe glass" of which you speak.
Funny how so much meaning and emotion can be packed into so few words when wielded by a gifted writer. Amazing. A very fine entry for the contest that was written with skill :-)
Have a great week,
Senyai
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hi Amada,
I like your 5-7-5 poem. It rings with a sure ting* as if off the "red ripe glass" of which you speak.
Funny how so much meaning and emotion can be packed into so few words when wielded by a gifted writer. Amazing. A very fine entry for the contest that was written with skill :-)
Have a great week,
Senyai
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Oh...thank you so much for reading my short poem, Senai...
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is sad. Along with the title it reeks of a broken relationship, the loss of an important one. And yet all time should be 'wine and roses days' if we are to be happy. A powerful pice you have penned here.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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This is sad. Along with the title it reeks of a broken relationship, the loss of an important one. And yet all time should be 'wine and roses days' if we are to be happy. A powerful pice you have penned here.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for reading this post, Katherine.
Comment from Yardier
I am new on this site and am still wandering through the processes. I loved your poem and the rich romantic thread you wove. I too, have desired such a drink, such a toast. Still, correct me if I am wrong, the word count does not seem to add up.
I wanted your thirst-- (I count 4 words. (5 is required. Does the dash count as 1?)
you drank from the red ripe glass... (I count 7 words) (7 is required)
wine and roses days. ( I count 4 words) (5 is required)
All the best to you.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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I am new on this site and am still wandering through the processes. I loved your poem and the rich romantic thread you wove. I too, have desired such a drink, such a toast. Still, correct me if I am wrong, the word count does not seem to add up.
I wanted your thirst-- (I count 4 words. (5 is required. Does the dash count as 1?)
you drank from the red ripe glass... (I count 7 words) (7 is required)
wine and roses days. ( I count 4 words) (5 is required)
All the best to you.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my work.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is a sensuality too these words as we become needy in romantic situations and also vulnerable, I enjoyed your 5-7-5, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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There is a sensuality too these words as we become needy in romantic situations and also vulnerable, I enjoyed your 5-7-5, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Thank you for commenting in my work, Dolly.
