Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I so wish I had a six left for this poem. It's perfect, even the form you used made it realistic. WOW!! The emotion is strong. Thank you for sharing this contest entry and good luck, but I doubt you will need it.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021

thanks, Barbara

it was a fun write and I hope that everyone enjoys it. Thank you for your kindness and the review.

Smiles, Carol

Comment from Terry Overton

Excellent

The picture captured me right away. The technique of dispersing the letters all the way down was a good idea for this creepy poem. Nice work my friend! It had me a little frightened :)

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021

Sorry if I scared you with the poem... i had many of these nightmares when I was young minus the hugs unfortunately... Glad you enjoyed.

Smiles, Carol

Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

Well... this certainly gave me a few chills! Then I reached the final word and felt like a mom again, comforting a little boy who used to wake up screaming from a nightmare now and then. I think you've done a great job with your fifteen words. I hope this does well in the contest. Good luck!

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021

Thank you so much for your kind words and the review. I experienced the words many many times minus the hugs, unfortunately. I was blessed and found the love of my life (for a litle while) who erased all those moments in the past.

Smiles, Carol

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

Wow, what a great entry for this contest. So many of these things we face in our dreams/nightmares. Falling usually results in us waking up and realizing it is just a dream, but it is hard to shake the fear.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021

Thanks Anne for your kind words and the review. i appreciate it very much.

Smiles, Carol

reply by Anne Johnston on 16-Aug-2021

You are welcome, Carol.

Comment from Sherry Asbury

Excellent

OOOoooohhhh, scary-bad artwork...the things nightmares are made of!!
Good luck in the contest - you have used your 15 syllables so well. Nicest ending...always welcome after a scare.

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 Comment Written 13-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2021

thanks Sherry for the kind words and the review. Appreciate it very much.

Smiles, Carol

Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan

Exceptional

OMG! I have never come across this kind of presentation. As if the words are not ominous enough, the picture adds to the sinister atmospherics. This is a unique poem. Well deserved six. My last one for the week!:) Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2021

You are awesome, Seshadri!

I do not know if presenting it like I did is legal in a 15 syllable poem, but I thought it was awesome to do...until someone says I can't. It was fun to make it feel like the words were moving.... Thank you so much for your awesome review and stars. Smiles and hugs! Carol