Genius in Love
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Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I see the characters are developing here and there is an atmosphere of suspense and intrigue. What happened to Jenny? Why Cornelius is worried? Interesting developments. Good going!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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I see the characters are developing here and there is an atmosphere of suspense and intrigue. What happened to Jenny? Why Cornelius is worried? Interesting developments. Good going!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Seshadri! It's always good to have you as part of my reading audience. I'm happy you find it worth reading.
Comment from royowen
I got Elaine to read your script here, but there was no Cornelius or Cilila, so she had little to go on in her analysis. But with Jenny missing for three days, and Cornelius blaming himself well.... This episode is both much emotion and cerebral going's on. But where is she? And will Cornelius be OK? Well done, Jay, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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I got Elaine to read your script here, but there was no Cornelius or Cilila, so she had little to go on in her analysis. But with Jenny missing for three days, and Cornelius blaming himself well.... This episode is both much emotion and cerebral going's on. But where is she? And will Cornelius be OK? Well done, Jay, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Roy, again ... your comments and sharing your interest in my play with your wife, are so heartwarming. I so DO appreciate you!
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Jay, this is another exquisite chapter. The anxieties and the restraints of the day, shines through loud and clear. It is 1952 after all- a long time ago.
I really like how you let the characters develope through speech and interaction.
It's a great scene, a scene I'm keenly waiting for Cornelius to enter. Ulla:)))
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Oh, Jay, this is another exquisite chapter. The anxieties and the restraints of the day, shines through loud and clear. It is 1952 after all- a long time ago.
I really like how you let the characters develope through speech and interaction.
It's a great scene, a scene I'm keenly waiting for Cornelius to enter. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you for your words and the lovely sixer, Ulla. It's hard for people today to realize the role differentiation from 70 years ago. Change came gradually until the sixties when all hell broke loose.
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Hehehe, yes, well put. All hell did break lose in the sixties. As the saying goes, if you remember any of it you were never there.
Well, I do remember it, but then again, I was born in 1952 and at the the tail end of it all. It was some heady days.
Comment from BethShelby
You brought out a lot in this chapter that we didn't know about before. It seems you not only understand what goes on in the mind of Cornelius, but you have your other characters well developed also. We are getting to know all of them better and how they will react. Toley is nervous about how Cornelius might react to the news of why his friend isn't in school. Mr Hallows is very understanding and can be of help but Phyllis has only seen Cornelius on his best behavior. You really seem to understand human nature. It will be interesting to see how this goes when Cornelius is brought in.
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You brought out a lot in this chapter that we didn't know about before. It seems you not only understand what goes on in the mind of Cornelius, but you have your other characters well developed also. We are getting to know all of them better and how they will react. Toley is nervous about how Cornelius might react to the news of why his friend isn't in school. Mr Hallows is very understanding and can be of help but Phyllis has only seen Cornelius on his best behavior. You really seem to understand human nature. It will be interesting to see how this goes when Cornelius is brought in.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Beth. You are looking more deeply into the characters than most, it seems. I have no idea yet how Cornelius is going to react to the news. I'm looking forward to finding out.
Comment from NABattaglia
What you really did well here is not just the writing and dialogue aspect, but appropriately using the actions of the scene in a manner that added to and supported the dialogue. Particularly when you noted things such as when with the hand pulling away and grabbing back, or a finger to the lips or grabbing tissues. All of these set up the dialogue well without being intrusive.
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What you really did well here is not just the writing and dialogue aspect, but appropriately using the actions of the scene in a manner that added to and supported the dialogue. Particularly when you noted things such as when with the hand pulling away and grabbing back, or a finger to the lips or grabbing tissues. All of these set up the dialogue well without being intrusive.
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Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you for sharing your observations. I have chosen this type of writing because I don't plan on persuing having this go on stage. I've been told by experienced playwrights that directors would hate my descriptive interludes. They want to decide how the actors respond. I'm just glad this works for you, though. Please come back, won't you?
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Superb, Jay. It's a shame that there aren't more head-teachers like Mr Hallows. I can understand Phyllis's husband being over protective of his daughter after losing his son, but Phyllis is right, he needs counselling. He sees Cornie as someone who might hurt Jennie, not realising that would be the last thing Cornelius would do.
It's going to be interesting to read how he will take the news of Jennie's abduction. I agree with what Jeff said about the way children were brought up, but it's changes a lot now, thank goodness. Just think how many male dress designers there are, and chefs these days. Women are becoming mechanics. So, we are gradually breaking the his/her dominance. Another great part to your amazing script, my friend. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Superb, Jay. It's a shame that there aren't more head-teachers like Mr Hallows. I can understand Phyllis's husband being over protective of his daughter after losing his son, but Phyllis is right, he needs counselling. He sees Cornie as someone who might hurt Jennie, not realising that would be the last thing Cornelius would do.
It's going to be interesting to read how he will take the news of Jennie's abduction. I agree with what Jeff said about the way children were brought up, but it's changes a lot now, thank goodness. Just think how many male dress designers there are, and chefs these days. Women are becoming mechanics. So, we are gradually breaking the his/her dominance. Another great part to your amazing script, my friend. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Sandra thanks for taking your analysis to another level. I appreciate that more than you know. Also, the six is very satisfying. I love that shade of chartreuse, don't you?
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gripping--intense three-way interaction is masterfully rendered--I'm wondering if I missed an episode--I'll go back and check--seems it's been a few weeks since I got notification. Compelling scene!
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Gripping--intense three-way interaction is masterfully rendered--I'm wondering if I missed an episode--I'll go back and check--seems it's been a few weeks since I got notification. Compelling scene!
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Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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It has been taking me two weeks to do each scene, Liz, so I don't think you missed any. Your reviews are always appreciated. May I compliment you on your new hair style and choice of bio-pic.
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Thanks!--I checked--I didn't miss any!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I enjoy reading the dialogues and description of the action is very good and clear. I also like your introduction of the characters in the end which I could learn a few things for my script. Now I will see how Cornelius reacts when he find out that Jenny got abducted by her father.
Exceptionally done.
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I enjoy reading the dialogues and description of the action is very good and clear. I also like your introduction of the characters in the end which I could learn a few things for my script. Now I will see how Cornelius reacts when he find out that Jenny got abducted by her father.
Exceptionally done.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Lisa. I appreciate your kind words. Now if I could just make these scenes shorter, LOL. I appreciate the six stars, as well.
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Yes. You can probably make it shorter. But they are good details.