Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Thoughts on Love through Nature"Musings of an old man -2021
44 total reviews
Comment from estory
This is really classic pastoral romanticism, and you did a good job in this free verse narrative format. It really reminded me of Coleridge or Landor, in how it seemed so much like listening in on a conversation with yourself. The colorful imagery, the soft flow of the language, like a mountain stream, brought the idyllic scene to life and it seemed we were sitting right there watching the flowers bloom, the birds singing, the lovers entering the scene like Adam and Eve walking into the Garden of Eden. You summed it up well in the last stanza, focusing all the emotions with this cerebral analysis and coming to the conclusion that it is a creation of God to fascilitate love. estory
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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This is really classic pastoral romanticism, and you did a good job in this free verse narrative format. It really reminded me of Coleridge or Landor, in how it seemed so much like listening in on a conversation with yourself. The colorful imagery, the soft flow of the language, like a mountain stream, brought the idyllic scene to life and it seemed we were sitting right there watching the flowers bloom, the birds singing, the lovers entering the scene like Adam and Eve walking into the Garden of Eden. You summed it up well in the last stanza, focusing all the emotions with this cerebral analysis and coming to the conclusion that it is a creation of God to fascilitate love. estory
Comment Written 07-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Estory ? thank you, thank you🙏🙏🙏! Your six stars are a wonderful experience to be the recipient of for this cerebral free verse offering.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello JLR,
You are good at Free Verse Poetry too!
Nice piece of poetry having impressive wording, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the theme and Natural surroundings.
3rd stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Marvelous Indeed!!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Hello JLR,
You are good at Free Verse Poetry too!
Nice piece of poetry having impressive wording, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting the theme and Natural surroundings.
3rd stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Marvelous Indeed!!
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Thank you! 🙏
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JLR, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Sanku
Though the shoulders are slumped and feet are slower, the eyes still see the gentle beauty of the trees and the lush grass. The sight fills the mid with solace
The free verse was well written .a kind of nostalgic soliloquy...
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Though the shoulders are slumped and feet are slower, the eyes still see the gentle beauty of the trees and the lush grass. The sight fills the mid with solace
The free verse was well written .a kind of nostalgic soliloquy...
Comment Written 07-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Sanku, your words are so validating, thanks 🙏
Comment from amahra
This was a great Free Verse poem for the contest. It made you think very deeply about the meaning and the responsibility of love. The artwork was very simple and appropriate. Great job.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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This was a great Free Verse poem for the contest. It made you think very deeply about the meaning and the responsibility of love. The artwork was very simple and appropriate. Great job.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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amahra, thank you for your review,
Comment from MissMerri
This is such a thoughtful, analytical piece. I really had to read it twice, once for the beauty of the poetic language and once for the depth of ideas, which were not easily grasped in one reading. I think a few well-placed commas might help, but perhaps you are one of those poets who don't care for commas. I can accept that. You poem is full of interesting ideas and therefore a fun one to read. I enjoyed it very much. MM
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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This is such a thoughtful, analytical piece. I really had to read it twice, once for the beauty of the poetic language and once for the depth of ideas, which were not easily grasped in one reading. I think a few well-placed commas might help, but perhaps you are one of those poets who don't care for commas. I can accept that. You poem is full of interesting ideas and therefore a fun one to read. I enjoyed it very much. MM
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Miss Meri. thank you for your kind words. Yep commas dull the senses.
Comment from Sally Law
Sorry to be so late coming into this one. A beautiful poem of observed love set in nature's splendor. It's amazing what we see and the parallels we draw when studying. Marvelous offering, dear Jay! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the approaching contest,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Sorry to be so late coming into this one. A beautiful poem of observed love set in nature's splendor. It's amazing what we see and the parallels we draw when studying. Marvelous offering, dear Jay! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the approaching contest,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Sal, thank you so very much always good to hear from you!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image, Jim, and
a profile picture, too!
-A well written poem
with many vivid images,
especially of nature, like
"buttery fragrance of honeysuckles" and
" the soft carpet of grass."
-Good transition to when your
are older with a "repository of memories."
-Good concluding verses, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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-Nice image, Jim, and
a profile picture, too!
-A well written poem
with many vivid images,
especially of nature, like
"buttery fragrance of honeysuckles" and
" the soft carpet of grass."
-Good transition to when your
are older with a "repository of memories."
-Good concluding verses, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Thanks Pam
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You are welcome, Jim.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
What a beautifully written free verse with a deep appreciation of nature. Very beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. So nicely done.Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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What a beautifully written free verse with a deep appreciation of nature. Very beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. So nicely done.Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2021
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Joanne I am so very, very humbled by your super six star validation... Wow, thank you 🙏
Comment from Begin Again
Beautiful and nicely written. Your vision of nature and life was painted with a fine artist brush.
I could smell the honeysuckles and purple clover. see the lush green grass and feel nature beneath my feet. It's a shame that we seem to wait until we are older to truly discover the beauty of what was always here. I moved to my family home in the country a few years ago and I find myself in awe at the life that surrounds me here. People say I am alone, but I am not...
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2021
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Beautiful and nicely written. Your vision of nature and life was painted with a fine artist brush.
I could smell the honeysuckles and purple clover. see the lush green grass and feel nature beneath my feet. It's a shame that we seem to wait until we are older to truly discover the beauty of what was always here. I moved to my family home in the country a few years ago and I find myself in awe at the life that surrounds me here. People say I am alone, but I am not...
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2021
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Carol, you get it 🙏🙏🙏 Thanks so much!
Comment from Senyai
Hi JLR,
I love this poem! Wonderful verse that transverses time and contains the description of feeling that great Oneness out in nature that is so hard to describe, but your have! I often just think, how can it be that day in and day out, the beauty is given without a hitch, and we just need to show up to witness it. When I do, the gift given is without measure ...
" What I have come to realize is that the soft carpet of grass,
surrounded by this canopy of Pine, Maple, Ash and Poplar trees,
with an under-growth of brightly colored, fragrant flowers
and shrubs are all connected into a Oneness --
crafted by a great unseen, mysterious Creator of all this
which is before my very eyes!
I have a knowing -- welling up from deep within my bones
that this experience unfolded, time and time again,
from the very beginning to this present moment."
Perfectly written!
All the best in the far far off contest in March, lol. I think this poem is indeed a winner! I'm out of sixes :-( but if I had one, it would be yours.
Senyai
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2021
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Hi JLR,
I love this poem! Wonderful verse that transverses time and contains the description of feeling that great Oneness out in nature that is so hard to describe, but your have! I often just think, how can it be that day in and day out, the beauty is given without a hitch, and we just need to show up to witness it. When I do, the gift given is without measure ...
" What I have come to realize is that the soft carpet of grass,
surrounded by this canopy of Pine, Maple, Ash and Poplar trees,
with an under-growth of brightly colored, fragrant flowers
and shrubs are all connected into a Oneness --
crafted by a great unseen, mysterious Creator of all this
which is before my very eyes!
I have a knowing -- welling up from deep within my bones
that this experience unfolded, time and time again,
from the very beginning to this present moment."
Perfectly written!
All the best in the far far off contest in March, lol. I think this poem is indeed a winner! I'm out of sixes :-( but if I had one, it would be yours.
Senyai
Comment Written 06-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2021
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Senyai, I will treasure your virtual six. Thank you so much, Jim
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