Heart Crafted Poems -2021
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "A Trinity Prayer"Musings of an old man -2021
36 total reviews
Comment from Susan Larson
Beautiful! When I'm working in the garden em, folding laundry or doing other "idiot work" I like to recite "mantras" to make me feel God's presence in the drudgery.I am adding this one to my "playlist." Thank you.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Beautiful! When I'm working in the garden em, folding laundry or doing other "idiot work" I like to recite "mantras" to make me feel God's presence in the drudgery.I am adding this one to my "playlist." Thank you.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Susan, wow! I am so honored.. I 🙏🙏🎶🎶🎶. I celebrate your Practice.
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Susan, wow! I am so honored.. I 🙏🙏🎶🎶🎶. I celebrate your Practice.
Comment from JennStar
I really liked this short prayer poem. I often find these shorter challenges the most difficult, trying to express complex emotions and thoughts in such few words. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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I really liked this short prayer poem. I often find these shorter challenges the most difficult, trying to express complex emotions and thoughts in such few words. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Jen, I agree the shelter th poem the much more challenging. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Strong choice of words eloquently convey your faith--an apt entry for the contest. Good end-line rhyme with bonus internal rhyme in line two--purify/sanctify.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Strong choice of words eloquently convey your faith--an apt entry for the contest. Good end-line rhyme with bonus internal rhyme in line two--purify/sanctify.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thanks Elizabeth.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is an excellent entry for this contest. It is dramatically and reverently
sincere in addressing the members of the Deity. You have used powerful action verbs.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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This is an excellent entry for this contest. It is dramatically and reverently
sincere in addressing the members of the Deity. You have used powerful action verbs.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Janice, thanks for the compliment.
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. It is interesting and unique. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. It is interesting and unique. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Raul, thanks for the review and good wishes.
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You're welcome!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"A Trinity Prayer", is a short, succinct and spiritually-uplifting piece. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth. It was a pleasure to read and review this talented poet's work.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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"A Trinity Prayer", is a short, succinct and spiritually-uplifting piece. Woven through each short line are the golden threads of truth. It was a pleasure to read and review this talented poet's work.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Duchess, thank you for your compliment.
JLR, you certainly deserved the compliment.
Bless you and take care,
the Duchess
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I loved this poem, but I would have appreciated a glossary, just for the first word. i have to admit to being bemused, even though my gut pushes me firmly in the way it wants me to go. It was great the way you created a second trinity-like turn of phrase on the second line.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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I loved this poem, but I would have appreciated a glossary, just for the first word. i have to admit to being bemused, even though my gut pushes me firmly in the way it wants me to go. It was great the way you created a second trinity-like turn of phrase on the second line.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Katherine, thank you for your review and compliment.
Comment from royowen
What a fabulous work you've written here my friend. In the name of the Father, the Son, and the Holy Spirit is a good way to start, although Jesus made it clear that His name was sufficient, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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What a fabulous work you've written here my friend. In the name of the Father, the Son, and the Holy Spirit is a good way to start, although Jesus made it clear that His name was sufficient, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much 🙏🙏
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Most welcome
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great contest entry, Mystery Author It is well presented. I like the smooth way it reads with great feeling. The image is appropriate, too. Great job and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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This is a great contest entry, Mystery Author It is well presented. I like the smooth way it reads with great feeling. The image is appropriate, too. Great job and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this compliment to this poem.
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem carries a true feeling of sanctity and respect for the trinity in which our souls find a home for all eternity. Using Latin links the feelings back in time through the ages of Christian belief.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Your poem carries a true feeling of sanctity and respect for the trinity in which our souls find a home for all eternity. Using Latin links the feelings back in time through the ages of Christian belief.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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LisaMay, thank you for your review and reflection on the Latin giving this a feeling of depth of time.