Summer
Anticipating Harvest26 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
I had to tear myself away from the beautiful artwork to review the great tanka, which is skillfully-composed and vividly descriptive. I especially like "ripened air."
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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I had to tear myself away from the beautiful artwork to review the great tanka, which is skillfully-composed and vividly descriptive. I especially like "ripened air."
Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Hi Janice. Thank you so much. Summertime seems so full and vibrant that it sparked this Tanka. I appreciate you!!!!
Melissa
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Hi Janice. Thank you so much. Summertime seems so full and vibrant that it sparked this Tanka. I appreciate you!!!!
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
As far as I can see this does all that a modern tanka should. The important third line works well both as a satori to the kami-no-ku and as a pivot into the the second half of the tanka, the shimo-no-ku.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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As far as I can see this does all that a modern tanka should. The important third line works well both as a satori to the kami-no-ku and as a pivot into the the second half of the tanka, the shimo-no-ku.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Thank you Jim? so glad I grabbed the correct elements this time. :).
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
I apologize that I am out of sixes for this lovely tanka. It is truly exceptional. It may be my favorite tanka that I've ever read. Your word choices are breathtaking--pregnant fields, burgeoning plenty. Each word more than pulls it's weight. And I love your melodies that settle in the turning line and ripple through both parts of the tanka.
My tanka lady is back. This will be on the leader board for sure.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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I apologize that I am out of sixes for this lovely tanka. It is truly exceptional. It may be my favorite tanka that I've ever read. Your word choices are breathtaking--pregnant fields, burgeoning plenty. Each word more than pulls it's weight. And I love your melodies that settle in the turning line and ripple through both parts of the tanka.
My tanka lady is back. This will be on the leader board for sure.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Thank you so very much, Debbie. Summertime seems so vibrant and the heat seems to pull it all together and finish the process of harvest. I so appreciate your lovely words.
Melissa
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That is a perceptive comment about summertime's heat. I would put it in the notes.
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written tanka, oh yes indeed, this should be the season of plenty, and you have fulfilled that very image in this poetic utterance, beautifully written Melissa, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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A beautifully written tanka, oh yes indeed, this should be the season of plenty, and you have fulfilled that very image in this poetic utterance, beautifully written Melissa, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Roy. I am glad you liked this Tanka. It describes my visions of summertime. :)
Melissa
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Well done
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Gorgeous artwork, Melissa,
where did you find that.
-You wrote a good tanka
to go with it.
-I like the theme of "melodies
of summer" in the opening lines.
-A good pivot line.
-Good concluding lines that
lets us see what the fields
have to offer with their
"burgeoning plenty."
-Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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-Gorgeous artwork, Melissa,
where did you find that.
-You wrote a good tanka
to go with it.
-I like the theme of "melodies
of summer" in the opening lines.
-A good pivot line.
-Good concluding lines that
lets us see what the fields
have to offer with their
"burgeoning plenty."
-Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Thanks so very much, Pam. I did a search for art? sunflowers and found it. Appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa
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You are welcome, Melissa, and thanks for sharing.
Comment from Senyai
Hi SugarRay,
Another lovely written and presented poem, this time a Tanka. Summer is a fertile time as your well crafted lines convey so beautifully ...
" Warm melodies of
summer drift through ripened air
elusive rhythms
ripple through the pregnant fields
of earth's burgeoning plenty."
Lovely indeed with a gorgeous drawing to accompany this pristine work!
Senyai
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Hi SugarRay,
Another lovely written and presented poem, this time a Tanka. Summer is a fertile time as your well crafted lines convey so beautifully ...
" Warm melodies of
summer drift through ripened air
elusive rhythms
ripple through the pregnant fields
of earth's burgeoning plenty."
Lovely indeed with a gorgeous drawing to accompany this pristine work!
Senyai
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Senyai. I am glad you liked this Tanka. It describes my perceptions of summertime. :)
Melissa
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Truly lovely poem :-)
Your beautiful 2 line poem is ingenious!