Surprise!
80 words short fiction.30 total reviews
Comment from equestrik
Ha! This is clever, indeed! I love the initial suspense along with the picture you chose. This is a very well done and creative presentation for the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Ha! This is clever, indeed! I love the initial suspense along with the picture you chose. This is a very well done and creative presentation for the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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thank you very much.
Comment from BethShelby
This is one is funny. It is hard to make me laugh with so few words but you did it. I don't even try this short flash because I'm too long winded when I write. You did good. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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This is one is funny. It is hard to make me laugh with so few words but you did it. I don't even try this short flash because I'm too long winded when I write. You did good. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
LOL I enjoyed reading this contest entry. Now one wonders what is going to happen and you left that up to our imagination probably due to the work count. LOL Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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LOL I enjoyed reading this contest entry. Now one wonders what is going to happen and you left that up to our imagination probably due to the work count. LOL Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this little story .Thanks for dropping by.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
That would be a surprise, Mystery Author. You set your little story up in nice fashion. The use of descriptive words and dialogue add to the 'fun.' Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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That would be a surprise, Mystery Author. You set your little story up in nice fashion. The use of descriptive words and dialogue add to the 'fun.' Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Begin Again
Good morning, mystery writer and thank you for the chuckle this day. How cute that not one but two thieves have chosen this house...Either they have a great treasure inside or they should learn to lock the doors. Good luck in the contest. Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Good morning, mystery writer and thank you for the chuckle this day. How cute that not one but two thieves have chosen this house...Either they have a great treasure inside or they should learn to lock the doors. Good luck in the contest. Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Glad i was able to give you a few chuckles. Thanks for dropping by.
Comment from Sharon Davis
A good response to the flash fiction writing prompt, Surprise.
A succinct story with a creative approach and twist ending.
Well done.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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A good response to the flash fiction writing prompt, Surprise.
A succinct story with a creative approach and twist ending.
Well done.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from RodG
I enjoyed the subtle humor in your 80-word story. How often do burglars run into another burglar in the house they are burgling? Good use of dialog between the thieves. Rod
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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I enjoyed the subtle humor in your 80-word story. How often do burglars run into another burglar in the house they are burgling? Good use of dialog between the thieves. Rod
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from tfawcus
Love it! That would have been a surprise. I wonder how they share the spoils - there being no honour among thieves. A good entry to the contest. I hope it does well.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Love it! That would have been a surprise. I wonder how they share the spoils - there being no honour among thieves. A good entry to the contest. I hope it does well.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much .Yes I did win.
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Many congratulations! Well deserved.
Comment from humpwhistle
Bad luck for those homeowners. Not just one thief, but two. I wonder how the thieves plan to split up the loot. Nice complete, concise storytelling.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Bad luck for those homeowners. Not just one thief, but two. I wonder how the thieves plan to split up the loot. Nice complete, concise storytelling.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Susan Newell
This is very funny. I guess the lesson is to expect the unexpected. I sure wish you had more words to let us know if they duked it out or partnered up. :-)
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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This is very funny. I guess the lesson is to expect the unexpected. I sure wish you had more words to let us know if they duked it out or partnered up. :-)
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2021
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True ,I too wished to continue once I reached that point. Thanks for dropping by