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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a sad story about Anneliese, she didn't tell them about Tom's son. Now it seems he was telling the truth. Will Allen tell them about him? Or will it be 'classified' while the war is on? I can't wait to find out what you decide to do with this half German lad. This is coming to the end, isn't it, and I won't know until the next book starts!! How frustrating! Lol. This is a great story, my friend. Well done again. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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That was a sad story about Anneliese, she didn't tell them about Tom's son. Now it seems he was telling the truth. Will Allen tell them about him? Or will it be 'classified' while the war is on? I can't wait to find out what you decide to do with this half German lad. This is coming to the end, isn't it, and I won't know until the next book starts!! How frustrating! Lol. This is a great story, my friend. Well done again. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for this six-star review. Chapter 48 is the last one so, yes. This is coming to the end but, of course, life goes on in a saga and I believe the trick is to make each book an entity on its own, while also being linked to what has gone before, and what will transpire in future. You must tell me, eventually, whether I have managed that.
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Only three to go! Mine won't be much longer. You're doing a great job with this saga, I'm thoroughly enjoying it. You must start sending out synopses and queries to as many publishers as you can with the first book, telling the second is almost finished and the third and fourth are in hand. I'm sure you'll get picked up. Go for an agent, that's the best way so I'm told. xxx
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An agent? I would if I could. Under which stone will I find one of those?
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Either in the Writers Year Book. Or you can look on Google, there are loads on there. Look for one that likes saga's and then read up what they want you to send.
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Thank you. I will have a go.
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Good luck, and don't give up until you've got one. You could be the next JKR, and remember me!!!! xx
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Ha ha! But I will remember you if...
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I'll be happy with that!!! Lol.
Comment from Bonnie Seach
A continuation of an interest story.
Review guidelines allow 4 stars or less where work is needed.
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*was paossible to get: needs work *As I were saying, before I were so rudely interrupted by
Needs work > as I was saying
*She were just a little gold-digger of.. Needs work
> was just a little gold digger
Unless the author intends incorrect grammar
*have got married if Tom had lived. That were what she were needs work >
*got* not necessary; it's a weak, unnecessary word
All Best wishes to you for a high rating.
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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A continuation of an interest story.
Review guidelines allow 4 stars or less where work is needed.
Here are some suggestions
*was paossible to get: needs work *As I were saying, before I were so rudely interrupted by
Needs work > as I was saying
*She were just a little gold-digger of.. Needs work
> was just a little gold digger
Unless the author intends incorrect grammar
*have got married if Tom had lived. That were what she were needs work >
*got* not necessary; it's a weak, unnecessary word
All Best wishes to you for a high rating.
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Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Please reconsider. The points you mention are all direct speech and in dialect. I fear you have missed the point. All were intentional.
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Very well. It would help if you could mention something about your writing style in the Author's notes section. Effective communication leads to smart results for all concerned. Kind regards
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This is a late chapter in the second boobook of a sequence of novels. When coming in at a late stage it is often a good plan to glance back at previous posts and comments. I no longer see the point of justifying my writing style every time I post. In any case it should be apparent to the discerning reader that these passages are direct speech. That is what the speech marks indicate.
It is as well to tread warily when new to a site.
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I subscribe reasonableness and win win solutions. I have taken the time and trouble to assist with your spelling errors for one. FanStory requires that reviews should be open and with the purpose of assisting one another to be better writers. I am grateful for their standards and ethics. At this stage I choose not to take offense. May you achieve what you wish to achieve. Sincerely
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"It is as well to tread warily when new to a site." I feel this is impolite and disrespectful.
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It was meant as a friendly warning. I ran into the same problem when I was new here. No disrespect was intended.
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Accepted in good faith. Thank you
Comment from BethShelby
This is an excellent chapter in which Allen seems to be getting the confirmation he needed to see that the lady was actually a lover of Tom's who was pregnant and the son was not someone planted by the Germans to get information.
I saw a couple of spags.
it but you can alwways tell, can't you?
Julia, although she did not realised it,
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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This is an excellent chapter in which Allen seems to be getting the confirmation he needed to see that the lady was actually a lover of Tom's who was pregnant and the son was not someone planted by the Germans to get information.
I saw a couple of spags.
it but you can alwways tell, can't you?
Julia, although she did not realised it,
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Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you for reading, reviewing and for spotting those two spags. They have been sorted.