Betrayal
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Delightful dolphin scene! I can imagine the wet dress and Grant's reaction to the "reveal-ation" of Tania's ASSets. Already looking forward to next week. I fear that danger lurks.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Delightful dolphin scene! I can imagine the wet dress and Grant's reaction to the "reveal-ation" of Tania's ASSets. Already looking forward to next week. I fear that danger lurks.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thanks so much, Liz. Yes, it's not all clear sailing quite yet. :)) Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from blondie560
I feel sad for Monica, but hopeful as well. I'm glad she's getting something good out of this with her relationship with Jeff. It was fun to see Tania and Grant having fun. I love how attentive he is to Latifah. I hope all will continue to be ok for her and her husband, though I wonder if you're leaning towards some drama with the birth. Just a feeling I got. But the elephant in the room is what and who is Colin's mother scheming with? As always Sandra, I can't get enough! Hope you had a lovely Easter. Continue to have a wonderful week as well. Take care! Sally
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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I feel sad for Monica, but hopeful as well. I'm glad she's getting something good out of this with her relationship with Jeff. It was fun to see Tania and Grant having fun. I love how attentive he is to Latifah. I hope all will continue to be ok for her and her husband, though I wonder if you're leaning towards some drama with the birth. Just a feeling I got. But the elephant in the room is what and who is Colin's mother scheming with? As always Sandra, I can't get enough! Hope you had a lovely Easter. Continue to have a wonderful week as well. Take care! Sally
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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You are sneaking into my head, aren't you! LOL. There will be quite a bit of drama coming, in more ways than one. As for Colin's mother? Well, it's like this................................... Lol. Thank you so much for this lovely review, Sally, and the golden star. I hope you had a lovely Easter. Sending you a warm hug, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Jay Squires
You handled the scene very well when Monica had her final meeting with Mr. Drake. His disappointment and following resolve were quite believable.
Oh, and you covered my earlier concern about answering readers' questions about Latifah's childbirth. Good job.
"Monica sat on tenterhooks, as her boss, Mr Drake, stared, glass-eyed...[This might be another British-ism, but in America that sentence would be open to the interpretation that he had glass (i.e., artificial) eyes. We would likely use the term glassy-eyed.]
I enjoyed this chapter. By the way, this is going to be a long book, isn't it? Entirely sustainable, but I was just curious, since I don't believe I even was here for its beginning.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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You handled the scene very well when Monica had her final meeting with Mr. Drake. His disappointment and following resolve were quite believable.
Oh, and you covered my earlier concern about answering readers' questions about Latifah's childbirth. Good job.
"Monica sat on tenterhooks, as her boss, Mr Drake, stared, glass-eyed...[This might be another British-ism, but in America that sentence would be open to the interpretation that he had glass (i.e., artificial) eyes. We would likely use the term glassy-eyed.]
I enjoyed this chapter. By the way, this is going to be a long book, isn't it? Entirely sustainable, but I was just curious, since I don't believe I even was here for its beginning.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you so very much for this fabulous review and all the shiny stars, Jay! I thought of you as I posted this part with the answer to your question on Latifah's pregnancy. I'm glad you liked it.
The length isn't going to be long at all. This is part 28, I've just finished part 30, taking me up to 47,000 words. The thing is, I've been looking into a UK publisher who accepts books with 50,000 words, and no longer. I'll be pushing it to keep it that low, but what I'm going to do is write it as I am, and if it goes over the 50,000, (which it will) I'll give it a good edit, but keep the unabridged version in case I end up self-publishing again. I'm not sure if this is going to be as romantic as they want. But if we don't try, we'll never know. Finger's crossed.
Thanks again, my dear friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xxxx
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job, Sandra, with this chapter. I liked the parts about what Monica and Tania were both doing while they were apart. The dolphin were an added bonus to the story. You handled Tania's departure from her job well. I'm sure her company will be off and running soon and competitive with her former place of employment. I see a relationship with Jeff and Monica and Tania and Grant in the coming chapters. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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You did a good job, Sandra, with this chapter. I liked the parts about what Monica and Tania were both doing while they were apart. The dolphin were an added bonus to the story. You handled Tania's departure from her job well. I'm sure her company will be off and running soon and competitive with her former place of employment. I see a relationship with Jeff and Monica and Tania and Grant in the coming chapters. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Jan. Yes, romance is well and truly in the air! More on that soon! I'm delighted you are still enjoying the story as I really appreciate your support. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from royowen
It looks like Tania is enjoying herself on that wonderfully projected imagery of living on a small island somewhere in the Caribbean. And the very pregnant Latifa being fussed over by Grant. Meanwhile poor Monica may be forced to go it alone with her job now gone because of possible danger to her colleagues. But, of course there's Jeff...beautifully written Sandra, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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It looks like Tania is enjoying herself on that wonderfully projected imagery of living on a small island somewhere in the Caribbean. And the very pregnant Latifa being fussed over by Grant. Meanwhile poor Monica may be forced to go it alone with her job now gone because of possible danger to her colleagues. But, of course there's Jeff...beautifully written Sandra, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for another of your lovely reviews, Roy. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my story. I hope you had a lovely Easter! Warm hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
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I did, you too?
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Quiet, but nice. We will be released in the next couple of weeks to see more of our family. Can't wait. :))
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That?s great news, England appears to be doing well, better than the chaos in Europe, well done, Roy
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We are! Boris has got that right, at least! He really has had a bad run at being PM, I doubt any other politician envies him. xx
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I?ll bet
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, this is another great chapter. Tania has a great time and the moment with the dolphins was wonderful. It's sad that Monica had to leave her job. On the other hand, she does have other plans. Now what is going to happen? Happy Easter. A big hug, Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Hi Sandra, this is another great chapter. Tania has a great time and the moment with the dolphins was wonderful. It's sad that Monica had to leave her job. On the other hand, she does have other plans. Now what is going to happen? Happy Easter. A big hug, Ulla xxx
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Aw, thank you, Ulla, for the lovely six stars. Monica will be fine, she has Jeff supporting her. I hope you had a lovely Easter, my friend. Warm hugs. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Iza Deleanu
So each of those ladies found romance, but they need to fight all that old bad ugly wolf Colin and that piece of snake, his precious mom. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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So each of those ladies found romance, but they need to fight all that old bad ugly wolf Colin and that piece of snake, his precious mom. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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We all need a bit of romance in our lives sometimes! So, I thought why not give both my ladies a nice man in their lives. :)) Thanks so much, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra x
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Sandra:
As usual, I love your writing - especially when your italics shares with the reader what someone is thinking. I got a little confused with the one I am noting below. I'm not sure who is thinking this and wonder if it is supposed to relate to Tania and Grant. I went back and reread the beginning of the chapter and was still unsure how these two sentences fit. What did I miss?
"So, what's that woman up to? And how the hell did she manage to get involved with that piece of camel dung?"
Jan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Sandra:
As usual, I love your writing - especially when your italics shares with the reader what someone is thinking. I got a little confused with the one I am noting below. I'm not sure who is thinking this and wonder if it is supposed to relate to Tania and Grant. I went back and reread the beginning of the chapter and was still unsure how these two sentences fit. What did I miss?
"So, what's that woman up to? And how the hell did she manage to get involved with that piece of camel dung?"
Jan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much, Jan. It's lovely to know that you are enjoying my story.
That line was referring to the man that Grant's mother has enlisted to help her. His name is Rapier, he was introduced in the last part. Jeff sent a text message to Grant about him, that's why he wants to talk to Jeff. How and why does Grant's mother know Rapier, he is a nasty piece of work, worse than Colin.
It just means there might be trouble ahead. You will learn more about him in the next part.
Thanks again, my friend. I hope you had a lovely Easter. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-An excellent and most
refreshing chapter for the
most part, Sandra.
-It was nice to see Tania
enjoying herself, and the
description of the dolphins
was vivid; something tells me
you might have seen this
first hand, too.
-She and Grant are having
a good time, and all is
good when they return to the villa,
except for the thought, that I
assume was from Grant,
regarding his mother.
-I felt bad for Monica, but
she and Jeff had spoken of her
starting her own business.
-Still, I am sure it hurt that she
had to be let go.
-I hadn't thought that far ahead,
and it was a reasonable concern
of her boss about everyone else
that worked in the office.
-The ending is good, and I
am sure Monica will be
delighted to hear from Tania!
-Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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-An excellent and most
refreshing chapter for the
most part, Sandra.
-It was nice to see Tania
enjoying herself, and the
description of the dolphins
was vivid; something tells me
you might have seen this
first hand, too.
-She and Grant are having
a good time, and all is
good when they return to the villa,
except for the thought, that I
assume was from Grant,
regarding his mother.
-I felt bad for Monica, but
she and Jeff had spoken of her
starting her own business.
-Still, I am sure it hurt that she
had to be let go.
-I hadn't thought that far ahead,
and it was a reasonable concern
of her boss about everyone else
that worked in the office.
-The ending is good, and I
am sure Monica will be
delighted to hear from Tania!
-Well done.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, Pam. I might have to go over that part where Grant has that thought about his mother's association with Rapier. It will all become clear in the next part after he's had a chat with Peter and Jeff.
I'm really pleased you enjoyed the dolphin part, I do love them, they are such fun. I've not actually experienced it for myself but seen it happen to a couple while we were on holiday. It was funny.
Thank you again, my friend, as usual, your review was amazing. Warm hugs. Sandra. xxx
I'll be listening to your video this afternoon. :)) xxx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. Did I miss something with Rapier?! I love dolphins. Years ago we rented a place on the ocean and you could see the dolphins jumping out of the water early in the morning. They are such beautiful, peaceful creatures. I haven't watched the bears yet, either.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh yes, Tania and Monica have found themselves two wonderful men who would do anything for them. I love it. I do enjoy reading this. It's one of favorite Sunday reads. Thank you.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Oh yes, Tania and Monica have found themselves two wonderful men who would do anything for them. I love it. I do enjoy reading this. It's one of favorite Sunday reads. Thank you.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Barbara! We have to give our women hunky men, don't we!! Lol. Thanks so much for the lovely six stars, my friend. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx