More Grist to the Mill
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Breakdown - 1933"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
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Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear jim, all of this description would be fascinating to someone trying to restore the mill to working condition, But for the casual reader, this whole chapter is boring.
For the sake of the novel as a whole, please delete this chapter ASAP.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Dear jim, all of this description would be fascinating to someone trying to restore the mill to working condition, But for the casual reader, this whole chapter is boring.
For the sake of the novel as a whole, please delete this chapter ASAP.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you for an honest opinion that I appreciate greatly. We shall have to see whether there is support for your argument, but it marks a significant milestone in the story of the mill. The moment it ceases useful work and becomes... well, we shall see.
Comment from nomi338
I am in total awe at your ability to write of such complicated things in a way that convinces me that you either read this somewhere are you are well acquainted with the dynamics of such things which also impresses me no end. It would appear that Jack Bache is a bit of a thinker and a tinkerer. I do believe that he will go far.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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I am in total awe at your ability to write of such complicated things in a way that convinces me that you either read this somewhere are you are well acquainted with the dynamics of such things which also impresses me no end. It would appear that Jack Bache is a bit of a thinker and a tinkerer. I do believe that he will go far.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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You are forgetting I think, that I restored and operated the mill on which this story is based for several years in the 1980s. Butv thank you anyway for these six lovely stars.
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I did forget, but you must remember that I will be 78 years old in about two weeks.
Comment from damommy
Oh, dear! What now? Can it be fixed, or is it the end of the mill? What will Tommy and Heather do without the mill?!
I enjoyed the description of how the wheel worked and what happened to it. Jack seems exceptionally knowledgeable for a 15 year old boy.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Oh, dear! What now? Can it be fixed, or is it the end of the mill? What will Tommy and Heather do without the mill?!
I enjoyed the description of how the wheel worked and what happened to it. Jack seems exceptionally knowledgeable for a 15 year old boy.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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It doesn't look too good for the mill's future does it? But there is still the farm of course and I am sure some use will be found for the mill. thank you for this concerned review.
Comment from robyn corum
Jim,
Ugh. Your time line bugs me no end.
Okay first things first. I have to tell you that when the guys were crawling on the millwork, I was screaming, get off there! Get out of that! I was so afraid you were about to do something extremely dastardly. It would be just like you, you meanie. But - whew- you didn't and thank you very much. And then I was thinking that what Tom's been leaning toward forEVER has happened, right? The mill is done for. BUT no! Jack cleverly comes up with his engineering stuff and I'm thinking, no way! Good ole Jim gonna be nice and let Jack save the day!
Then I'm scrolling down here to say good job and the last line of your STUPID timeline gives it away. Great. Fabulous. Wonderful.
I have an idea. Maybe update the timeline AFTER it happens?
Thanks!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Jim,
Ugh. Your time line bugs me no end.
Okay first things first. I have to tell you that when the guys were crawling on the millwork, I was screaming, get off there! Get out of that! I was so afraid you were about to do something extremely dastardly. It would be just like you, you meanie. But - whew- you didn't and thank you very much. And then I was thinking that what Tom's been leaning toward forEVER has happened, right? The mill is done for. BUT no! Jack cleverly comes up with his engineering stuff and I'm thinking, no way! Good ole Jim gonna be nice and let Jack save the day!
Then I'm scrolling down here to say good job and the last line of your STUPID timeline gives it away. Great. Fabulous. Wonderful.
I have an idea. Maybe update the timeline AFTER it happens?
Thanks!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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It just did - didn't it? Lol.
Well it may be finished as a working mill but it will still feature strongly in the story.
You weren't alone in thinking some accident was going to happen to jack but not to worry he will be around after a fashion for this book and Book 3 too.
Thank you for becoming so involved with this story. I thought your review was great.
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It was, wasn't it?
Comment from Judy Lawless
Another chapter full of shared knowledge! I find mechanics much more interesting now than I did when I was growing up, probably because of being a girl who was never exposed to such things! I like the relationship between Tommy and his son too.
You have one unneeded comma in this sentence. "answered his father as he(,) replaced the wooden cover,"
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Another chapter full of shared knowledge! I find mechanics much more interesting now than I did when I was growing up, probably because of being a girl who was never exposed to such things! I like the relationship between Tommy and his son too.
You have one unneeded comma in this sentence. "answered his father as he(,) replaced the wooden cover,"
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Oh thanks for the heads up on that comma. Those little tadpoles have a life of their own sometimes. When I'm no looking they take themselves away from where I wanted them and stick themselve in where they are not wanted, like that one,
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You're welcome. They play tricks on all of us from time to time. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh dear, imagine fixing these old mills is a skilled job and will take some engineering skills to put this problem right, but between the two of them they might work it out. An interesting veering in a new direction with this story, love Dolly
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Oh dear, imagine fixing these old mills is a skilled job and will take some engineering skills to put this problem right, but between the two of them they might work it out. An interesting veering in a new direction with this story, love Dolly
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you very much for this sympathetic, six-star review. There isn't a task in that mill that couldn't be undertaken but the question is whether it would be worth doing. There could be two views on that one I think.
Comment from BethShelby
This is a little sad. It doesn't sound as though this can be repaired. What happened it a bit complicated and I think one would have to have a firm understanding of how a mill works to be able to visualize this. Didn't your say that the beginning of your story that you had bought a mill or even the mill you are writing about? I'm looking forward to what is next.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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This is a little sad. It doesn't sound as though this can be repaired. What happened it a bit complicated and I think one would have to have a firm understanding of how a mill works to be able to visualize this. Didn't your say that the beginning of your story that you had bought a mill or even the mill you are writing about? I'm looking forward to what is next.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Yes. I did restore and operate the mill on which this is based. It could be repaired but would it be worth doing. Remember, we are in the midst of the depression.
Thank you so much for your review and continued interest.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love Tommy's unscientific explanation, lol, 'You mean she'm broke eh, Jack? She'm buggered?' Lol, I know it's not funny, but after Jack's carefully laid out engineering details, to have it put like his dad has, is funny. I have to tell you, all the while Jack was crawling underneath all that heavy metal and stone, I was gearing myself up for him being in an accident. This was really interesting, Jim. Now to find out when on earth Heather and Tommy will do now. Well done, and I'm already looking forward to Wednesdays part. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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I love Tommy's unscientific explanation, lol, 'You mean she'm broke eh, Jack? She'm buggered?' Lol, I know it's not funny, but after Jack's carefully laid out engineering details, to have it put like his dad has, is funny. I have to tell you, all the while Jack was crawling underneath all that heavy metal and stone, I was gearing myself up for him being in an accident. This was really interesting, Jim. Now to find out when on earth Heather and Tommy will do now. Well done, and I'm already looking forward to Wednesdays part. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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Thank you for this lovely six-star review and for your interesting comments, I am glad you found it funny. The contrast between the two 'explanations' was intentional.
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I guessed that. That was what made it so funny. Tommy would only understand it the way he said it. Loved it.
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It won't matter much to the farm. It is what it will mean to Jack that is the tragedy, or the first act of the tragedy.
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Now you've spurred my interest, I'll be wanting to know what the tragedy for Jack is now. Hmm!
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It's no secret. He was the one who wanted to grow up as a wealthy miller. Is that likely now?
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No, bless him. I hope you have a good career in mind for him? His talent seems to be in art and engineering. Perhaps he'll invent something and he'll become wealthy that way? :)
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That is for me to know and you to have to wait for Lol.
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Lol!! Ok, but don't think I won't keep asking.
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;))
Comment from barbara.wilkey
HMMM, I am wondering if the 'she'm' is just a term or if Tommy means Hettie. I may be reading too much into this but who knows. LOL I enjoy the story and enjoyed reading this addition to it.
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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HMMM, I am wondering if the 'she'm' is just a term or if Tommy means Hettie. I may be reading too much into this but who knows. LOL I enjoy the story and enjoyed reading this addition to it.
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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'She'm' is a contraction of the colloquial 'she am' or more correctly 'she is'. It refers here to the mill or part thereof and has nothing to do with Hettie.