Poems from a Pensive Poet
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Ballad of John Howland"Verses from my heart
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Comment from Susan Newell
This is an epic part of history that you have presented in an impeccable rhyming poem. It's interesting that organizations like the Mayflower Society and D.A.R. seem to have slipped into obscurity at the same time everyone is turning to Ancestry, 23 and Me and the other DNA banks. I'm pretty sure our family goes back to the Mayflower, but my brother has all the records. Being childless, it didn't seem right for me to take custody of them.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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This is an epic part of history that you have presented in an impeccable rhyming poem. It's interesting that organizations like the Mayflower Society and D.A.R. seem to have slipped into obscurity at the same time everyone is turning to Ancestry, 23 and Me and the other DNA banks. I'm pretty sure our family goes back to the Mayflower, but my brother has all the records. Being childless, it didn't seem right for me to take custody of them.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I think you should have copies too. My records are all on line so anyone in the family can see them and others as well.
Beth
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
What a wonderful poem and a great piece of history, Beth. How interesting to find that one of your ancestors was on the Mayflower and all you learned about your own history. Very cool! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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What a wonderful poem and a great piece of history, Beth. How interesting to find that one of your ancestors was on the Mayflower and all you learned about your own history. Very cool! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments. I really am honored that you have given me six stars.
Beth
Comment from royowen
We saw the Mayflower replica parked near Plymouth Rock, the ship was only tiny, you wouldn't have thought it would carry a 100+ people, and the Plymouth Rock though caged, is small too. Yes we had Germans who settled in the Barossa valley and in the south of Adelaide, who make the finest wine in the world probably, they likewise escaped persecution in Germany. This is brilliantly written, well done Beth, blessings Roy
Typo : Less (tolerate) tolerant? 2: In the title (Ballard) ballad
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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We saw the Mayflower replica parked near Plymouth Rock, the ship was only tiny, you wouldn't have thought it would carry a 100+ people, and the Plymouth Rock though caged, is small too. Yes we had Germans who settled in the Barossa valley and in the south of Adelaide, who make the finest wine in the world probably, they likewise escaped persecution in Germany. This is brilliantly written, well done Beth, blessings Roy
Typo : Less (tolerate) tolerant? 2: In the title (Ballard) ballad
Comment Written 11-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much Roy. I really appreciate the review and the heads up on the errors that needed attention. I've seen the replica of the Mayflower as well. I was shocked that it could carry so many people and that such a small ship could survive all the storms.
Beth
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Well done
Comment from Sankey
This was a great read. Some spags some suggestions for flow. Great layout as well.
One hundred (and)two would crowd aboard
Makes it flow better.
Oops! Sorry did they get on after 2 months or off?
should not hurt the flow
In Author note
Holland was becoming less tolera(n)t[e].
when they (dis)embarked at last.
John Holland, a cousin, went along as one (of)several
My sister got us all top do our DNA it has had some interesting results.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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This was a great read. Some spags some suggestions for flow. Great layout as well.
One hundred (and)two would crowd aboard
Makes it flow better.
Oops! Sorry did they get on after 2 months or off?
should not hurt the flow
In Author note
Holland was becoming less tolera(n)t[e].
when they (dis)embarked at last.
John Holland, a cousin, went along as one (of)several
My sister got us all top do our DNA it has had some interesting results.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments and help with the spags. I appreciate your help.
Beth
Comment from bob cullen
This is a fabulous read. I did however note a couple of errors. I'm not a nitpicker, I'd just hate to see this poem beaten because of minor mistakes. In the second line of verse one you have 'there' in this instance it should be 'their.'
In the second line of verse two, you have the word 'obey' twice. Was this intended? Verse seven, second line again. Should 'embarked' be disembarked?
Verse five, line three. You have 'road', it should be 'rode.' To me, your poem would be a deserving winner. Good luck.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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This is a fabulous read. I did however note a couple of errors. I'm not a nitpicker, I'd just hate to see this poem beaten because of minor mistakes. In the second line of verse one you have 'there' in this instance it should be 'their.'
In the second line of verse two, you have the word 'obey' twice. Was this intended? Verse seven, second line again. Should 'embarked' be disembarked?
Verse five, line three. You have 'road', it should be 'rode.' To me, your poem would be a deserving winner. Good luck.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I really appreciate you pointing out the errors. A couple had been corrected but the two obeys weren't mentioned.
Beth
Comment from C2
Beth,
What a great poem and message. My favorite stanzaand the one I think that hold the theme
The estimate's ten million souls,
now in this nation thrive,
Because John didn't die at sea,
that's why I am alive.
Oh...and I think I found a typo you may want to fix. 'By summer less (the) half remained...' I think you meant 'than.'
Nice work.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Beth,
What a great poem and message. My favorite stanzaand the one I think that hold the theme
The estimate's ten million souls,
now in this nation thrive,
Because John didn't die at sea,
that's why I am alive.
Oh...and I think I found a typo you may want to fix. 'By summer less (the) half remained...' I think you meant 'than.'
Nice work.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for the great review and comments. Thank you for seeing the error that needed correcting.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Marvelous journey tale!
who left [there=>THEIR] homes behind.
The Mayflower [road=>RODE] the stormy sea,
Carver's=>CARVERS (2 places)
With `Lizabeth his [birde=>BRIDE]
was becoming less tolerate=>TOLERANT
Doing Ancestry, I discovered that one of my ancestor's=>ANCESTORS
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Marvelous journey tale!
who left [there=>THEIR] homes behind.
The Mayflower [road=>RODE] the stormy sea,
Carver's=>CARVERS (2 places)
With `Lizabeth his [birde=>BRIDE]
was becoming less tolerate=>TOLERANT
Doing Ancestry, I discovered that one of my ancestor's=>ANCESTORS
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you Elizabeth. I'm glad to found these errors before the star dedicators saw it. I think I've fixed them.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Love your historical story in ballad form, Beth! I don't think my husband is related to Howland but he has ancestors (I think two) on the Mayflower. Great thing to ponder. God preserved our ancestors to create us! Best wishes in the contest!!
who left there homes behind. (their)
One hundred, two (no comma needed if you meant 102)
King James VIII (Henry) Henry started the Church of England. Or did you mean James I of King James Version fame?
you inheired DNA had not lived, (inherited)
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Love your historical story in ballad form, Beth! I don't think my husband is related to Howland but he has ancestors (I think two) on the Mayflower. Great thing to ponder. God preserved our ancestors to create us! Best wishes in the contest!!
who left there homes behind. (their)
One hundred, two (no comma needed if you meant 102)
King James VIII (Henry) Henry started the Church of England. Or did you mean James I of King James Version fame?
you inheired DNA had not lived, (inherited)
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and for seeing the spots that needed work. I checked two sources about the king that caused the pilgrims to leave England and one James VIII and the other said James VI. He was a Scottish king but the sources said he was responsible. Maybe I'll say king. Richard Warren is another on the Mayflower in my DNA along with all the Tilleys.
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This site said pilgrims left during the reign of James I.
https://www.themayflowersociety.org/the-pilgrims/pilgrim-history
My husband's ancestry includes two people on the Mayflower but I don't know their names.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, this rhyming poem is a wonderful tribute to John Howland who refuse to die even when washed overboard. It took people of courage to even make the trip on the mayflower, and those with physical strength to survive in the New World.
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Dear Beth, this rhyming poem is a wonderful tribute to John Howland who refuse to die even when washed overboard. It took people of courage to even make the trip on the mayflower, and those with physical strength to survive in the New World.
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much Suzanna. I really appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from DonandVicki
I enjoyed the history and the research that you did to come up with this fantastic poem. I enjoyed reading your authors note as I am a history buff. Don and Vicki.
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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I enjoyed the history and the research that you did to come up with this fantastic poem. I enjoyed reading your authors note as I am a history buff. Don and Vicki.
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Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovely comments. I'm glad you liked it.
Beth