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Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "A Lack of Curiosity"Book 2 of the Cleeborough Mill Trilogy
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This has jumped the pace up considerably. As far as I can see, nothing much is revealed other than emotions, but there are plenty of those and tension flying around. I am looking forward greatly to what is said next.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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This has jumped the pace up considerably. As far as I can see, nothing much is revealed other than emotions, but there are plenty of those and tension flying around. I am looking forward greatly to what is said next.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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And when you are no longer looking forward to that I will be devastated. Lol.
Many thanks for for reviewing.
Comment from robyn corum
Jim,
You nasty, tricky rabbit. You're trying to tell us that after all this, Heather never knew about the baby at ALL until the trial? So that day after speaking with Hettie and returning so mad and upset, she had NO IDEA Hettie was preggers? OMS. You are reversing our history, here!
hahaha
Notes, if I may:
1.) '"Hello, Tommy. Who be in this afternoon then?" I asked(.)'
2.) 'So, I tries again(,/.) "Hettie, look, you must realise
3.) 'So it was the mill, not the baby!' (h)e exclaimed.
Thanks a bunch!
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Jim,
You nasty, tricky rabbit. You're trying to tell us that after all this, Heather never knew about the baby at ALL until the trial? So that day after speaking with Hettie and returning so mad and upset, she had NO IDEA Hettie was preggers? OMS. You are reversing our history, here!
hahaha
Notes, if I may:
1.) '"Hello, Tommy. Who be in this afternoon then?" I asked(.)'
2.) 'So, I tries again(,/.) "Hettie, look, you must realise
3.) 'So it was the mill, not the baby!' (h)e exclaimed.
Thanks a bunch!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thank you for reviewing. I don't think I am cheating here. No one but Hettie knew about the baby. Tom tore the second letter up without reading it and the first letter didn't mention the pregnancy. The pregnancy wasn't revealed until mentioned at the inquest in the medical evidence.
As far as items 2 and 3 are concerned. These have been addressed. Thank you for spotting them.
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Yeah, but in the first book, we all ASSUMED that Hettie told Heather at their meeting. She came back so mad, you know? I did, anyway. She was so mad at her brother, too. I had no doubt whatsoever that Heather KNEW.
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Never assume anything when dealing with nasty tricky rabbis. Lol
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hmmmm.... true that.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I thought by the time Heather went to talk to Hettie, she knew Tom J was the father of Hettie's baby. Am I forgetting something?
Allen laughed. 'Sorry about that,' he said. (period after that. You don't need 'he said.' it's extra)
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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I thought by the time Heather went to talk to Hettie, she knew Tom J was the father of Hettie's baby. Am I forgetting something?
Allen laughed. 'Sorry about that,' he said. (period after that. You don't need 'he said.' it's extra)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for reviewing. There was no way Heather knew about the baby when she went to the mill. The news was in the letter Tom tore up without reading. We knew because we are reviewing the situation like Allen, a quarter of a century later. Hettie's pregnancy only became public knowledge at the inquest.
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I thought Heather read the letter before Tom tore it up.
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No. Heather is too much of a goody goody to read mail addressed to someone else. Chapters 49 -51 of Maid of the Mill deal with the correspondence.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is so sad, Jim. I really feel sorry for Hettie. She blamed herself for the plight of the farm, and Heather's father. Our Tom was exactly what Hettie called him, a lying toad, and I could add to that. Hettie was the wronged one in that story, and I can't say I'm unhappy that our Tom was killed. We still don't know what happened to Hettie. I just can't see her commiting suicide and leaving her father that way. It was most definitely something else. But, with most of them dead now, I can't ever see the truth coming out. Unless, the author has something up his sleave that will explain it all!!!! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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That is so sad, Jim. I really feel sorry for Hettie. She blamed herself for the plight of the farm, and Heather's father. Our Tom was exactly what Hettie called him, a lying toad, and I could add to that. Hettie was the wronged one in that story, and I can't say I'm unhappy that our Tom was killed. We still don't know what happened to Hettie. I just can't see her commiting suicide and leaving her father that way. It was most definitely something else. But, with most of them dead now, I can't ever see the truth coming out. Unless, the author has something up his sleave that will explain it all!!!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this lovely six-star review, we still have a few more chapters to go before moving on into the 1930s and another generation enters the scene. This Book 2 is in three parts and we are coming to the end of the first part.
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Do we ever know the truth about Hettie?
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That would be telling.
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LOL! You really are a meanie!
Comment from Judy Lawless
It feels like the truth might be coming to light, at least as far as how Hettie was feeling at the time of her death. She was feeling guilty for, by her actions, causing the loss of business for the mill. But I'm sure carrying the baby of Tom Joliffe added to her despair.
It will be interesting to see if Mr. Allen accomplishes what he came for.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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It feels like the truth might be coming to light, at least as far as how Hettie was feeling at the time of her death. She was feeling guilty for, by her actions, causing the loss of business for the mill. But I'm sure carrying the baby of Tom Joliffe added to her despair.
It will be interesting to see if Mr. Allen accomplishes what he came for.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Many thanks for this review. They were very unconventional people the Mansfields. Hettie's mum was a gypsy. (Revealed in Book 1)
Comment from roof35
You always have a way of painting the scene, but this one with Tommy in the horse barn was exceptional. I definitely could see what Heather saw and what Tommy saw and what they felt. As always, error free.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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You always have a way of painting the scene, but this one with Tommy in the horse barn was exceptional. I definitely could see what Heather saw and what Tommy saw and what they felt. As always, error free.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the lovely six star review confirming that the imagery had worked for you. That is great to know.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jim, that was a good read and here Heather gives us a little more insight to how Hettie was dealing with it all. She sounds angry more than anything. Not one who was ready to commit suicide. But we'll see.
Just a minor thing: '"'Course not," seems like the last quotation mark is turning the wrong way.
Great writing and a great story. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Hi Jim, that was a good read and here Heather gives us a little more insight to how Hettie was dealing with it all. She sounds angry more than anything. Not one who was ready to commit suicide. But we'll see.
Just a minor thing: '"'Course not," seems like the last quotation mark is turning the wrong way.
Great writing and a great story. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thanks for reviewing and for continuing to enjoy the content. That last quotation mark isn't one. Lol. It is an apostrophe in front of Course to indicate the contraction of - 'Of course'.
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Ah, Okay, silly me, LOL
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Hettie has some spirit and I find it hard to believe that someone with so much strength of character, could kill herself. She seems to be the strongest character in the book for me. She knows her own mind and her business. I enjoyed these conversations and it must be hard to write with this dialect, but it sounds authentic and real, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Hettie has some spirit and I find it hard to believe that someone with so much strength of character, could kill herself. She seems to be the strongest character in the book for me. She knows her own mind and her business. I enjoyed these conversations and it must be hard to write with this dialect, but it sounds authentic and real, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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She felt that she was solely responsible for yet one more nail in the mill's coffin and simply could not bear the thought that she had let her father down and destroyed her birthright. The baby was nothing compared to that. Many thanks for your review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Chapter of the Fiction speaks expressively thru a narrative taletelling, progresses thru a good plot development, fostered by dialogues appropriately realistic, ends with resolved ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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This Chapter of the Fiction speaks expressively thru a narrative taletelling, progresses thru a good plot development, fostered by dialogues appropriately realistic, ends with resolved ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from BethShelby
i really like this conversation between the three of them. It sounds exactly as it should. I'm amused by the use of "anyroad" We've always said "anyway" and I never thought anything about it but a "way" and a "road" is basically the same. That must have been the English way o saying it.
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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i really like this conversation between the three of them. It sounds exactly as it should. I'm amused by the use of "anyroad" We've always said "anyway" and I never thought anything about it but a "way" and a "road" is basically the same. That must have been the English way o saying it.
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Comment Written 21-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2021
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Anyroad is found in English from Birmingham in the midlands northwards. In medieval English it was 'algattes' or 'all gates', but south of that we would say anyway. The usage is the same.