Heart Crafted Poems -2021
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Comment from lyenochka
What a great response to the club challenge! You used the theme of mirror which works nicely with the mirrored 8-syllable lines. And yes, we can all relate to looking older in the mirror. Lol.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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What a great response to the club challenge! You used the theme of mirror which works nicely with the mirrored 8-syllable lines. And yes, we can all relate to looking older in the mirror. Lol.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello JLR, I like this poem and my advice is to keep telling yourself the mirror sometimes lies. I would use the hall mirror, dimly lit and you will see a young man. Great. But we all age, regardless of what we see in the mirror. We just must accept and be happy. (keep away from botox LOL)
I enjoyed the read and the horrible picture LOL! Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Hello JLR, I like this poem and my advice is to keep telling yourself the mirror sometimes lies. I would use the hall mirror, dimly lit and you will see a young man. Great. But we all age, regardless of what we see in the mirror. We just must accept and be happy. (keep away from botox LOL)
I enjoyed the read and the horrible picture LOL! Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Yes Dorothy, you are so very correct! We just have to take what comes...
Comment from kmoss
Hello. I enjoyed this octelle poem. Thanks for including the information in the author's notes. The first town and last two lines are not identical though-what am I missing?
Well written poem
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Hello. I enjoyed this octelle poem. Thanks for including the information in the author's notes. The first town and last two lines are not identical though-what am I missing?
Well written poem
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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I screwed up when I revised it, so thank you I have fixed this. Ugh....
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Great!
Comment from royowen
There's one thing that makes one confident is seeing one's image in muted light, it's seems like the clock's been wound back, and the image is younger, upon looking more closely, that's not the case. Well done Jim, blessings Roy
Suggestion, "As I'm hoping to see clearer"
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There's one thing that makes one confident is seeing one's image in muted light, it's seems like the clock's been wound back, and the image is younger, upon looking more closely, that's not the case. Well done Jim, blessings Roy
Suggestion, "As I'm hoping to see clearer"
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Roy, thank you that reads far better, have a good one, my friend!
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My pleasure Jim.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Did you finally see what you expected to see. LOL. This is very well done.
With this pandemic, I am bereft of a hairdresser and can't stand what I see in the mirror, these days.
Ralf
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Did you finally see what you expected to see. LOL. This is very well done.
With this pandemic, I am bereft of a hairdresser and can't stand what I see in the mirror, these days.
Ralf
Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Ha Ha, I sorely know this to be true, enjoy the weekend.
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Thanks, I am in hiding, but I will.
Comment from rspoet
Hello JLR,
This is an interesting Octelle poem of that mirror image
that may reveal more than we intend.
For some, it's best not to look to closely.
The poem reads smoothly except for one line:
"This not right, I looked once more"
Good choice of art work to match.
Best wishes to all.
Robert
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Hello JLR,
This is an interesting Octelle poem of that mirror image
that may reveal more than we intend.
For some, it's best not to look to closely.
The poem reads smoothly except for one line:
"This not right, I looked once more"
Good choice of art work to match.
Best wishes to all.
Robert
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Thanks Robert it did feel a bit jammed, I changed it, I appreciate your imput...Jim
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Your poem reminds of the portrait of Dorian Grey: "
I peered into the hall mirror
hoping to see me more clearer.
There was no light where it hung
the image I saw was young." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Your poem reminds of the portrait of Dorian Grey: "
I peered into the hall mirror
hoping to see me more clearer.
There was no light where it hung
the image I saw was young." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2021
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Thanks so much for your time taken to read and comment on this poem.