Poems from a Pensive Poet
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Comment from nomi338
A righteous statement, artfully stated. The ability to express oneself through writing is one of God's most precious gifts. According to scriptures, God's holy spirit inspired the early bible writers to write down God's own thoughts. I do not believe that most writers today experience the same sort of inspiration. We do however, receive inspiration from observing the things going on around us. When we write about vegetation, the animals, the workings of nature, etc. We are, I believe, writing about God's creations and his blessings.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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A righteous statement, artfully stated. The ability to express oneself through writing is one of God's most precious gifts. According to scriptures, God's holy spirit inspired the early bible writers to write down God's own thoughts. I do not believe that most writers today experience the same sort of inspiration. We do however, receive inspiration from observing the things going on around us. When we write about vegetation, the animals, the workings of nature, etc. We are, I believe, writing about God's creations and his blessings.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for the review. i do be we are often devinely inspired because not all my thought are something that sound like something I would have come up with on my own. I appreciate your comments.
Beth
Comment from robyn corum
Beth,
What a fun poem! I just wrote something like this recently. About not getting wound up and letting myself get caught up in drama. I mean, why bother? All you do is get yourself all 'het up'. It almost never makes a difference in anyone else who already has their minds made up - and mostly only wants to cause trouble. *smile*
I thought you used a lot of creative and original language here. The flow was even and easy. I did see a few places I wanted to mention - and made notes for you - but feel free to disagree with all of them. *smile*
1.) I keep my feeling(s) in control;
2.) Like Shakespeare strutting on a stage,
I'll emote on printed page.
--> So, unlike Shakespeare on his stage,
I'll emote on printed page.
3.) Writing allows me to impart
--> this seemed to jump out of scansion
--> My writing frees me to impart
4.) feeling festering in my heart.
--> plural? 'feelings'?
5.) More freely flowing once I start,
(i)t's my outlet, and my art.
I did enjoy this a lot - and would never deduct a star over any of these minor things. Thanks so much and good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Beth,
What a fun poem! I just wrote something like this recently. About not getting wound up and letting myself get caught up in drama. I mean, why bother? All you do is get yourself all 'het up'. It almost never makes a difference in anyone else who already has their minds made up - and mostly only wants to cause trouble. *smile*
I thought you used a lot of creative and original language here. The flow was even and easy. I did see a few places I wanted to mention - and made notes for you - but feel free to disagree with all of them. *smile*
1.) I keep my feeling(s) in control;
2.) Like Shakespeare strutting on a stage,
I'll emote on printed page.
--> So, unlike Shakespeare on his stage,
I'll emote on printed page.
3.) Writing allows me to impart
--> this seemed to jump out of scansion
--> My writing frees me to impart
4.) feeling festering in my heart.
--> plural? 'feelings'?
5.) More freely flowing once I start,
(i)t's my outlet, and my art.
I did enjoy this a lot - and would never deduct a star over any of these minor things. Thanks so much and good luck!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much Robyn. I'm so glad you liked this. It seem a lot of writers are able to relate. You suggesting are very helpful and you notice a couple of errors no one seemed to pick up on. I really appreciate it.
Beth
Comment from royowen
You're right. It's much, much better to declare the negative on the pages of a page than let it do damage let go. Great range of emotions, I'll bet you've always been a person in control of their emotion, no prone to excess. Beautifully written in verse monorhyme Beth. Well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion, on.the page receives the light.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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You're right. It's much, much better to declare the negative on the pages of a page than let it do damage let go. Great range of emotions, I'll bet you've always been a person in control of their emotion, no prone to excess. Beautifully written in verse monorhyme Beth. Well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion, on.the page receives the light.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you Roy. I can remember a few moment of rage when I was a very young but I' ve learned to control it and put my feeling on paper they people can choose if they want to read. I always appreciate your thoughts and I like your suggestion. Also I thrilled ithe the six stars.
Beth
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Most welcome
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a well-written poem. very relatable. For me, I put whoever I feel has done me wrong in a story and you know what happens to them from there. lol. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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This is a well-written poem. very relatable. For me, I put whoever I feel has done me wrong in a story and you know what happens to them from there. lol. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the review and comments. I think it is a good thing you get it all out on paper because otherwise you might end up in jail. LOL I think some bad things happed to you at some point but I love the way your write about it.
Beth
Comment from Omar sb
Poetry has become my new outlet as well.
It brings me peace.
"And even when I'm feeling rage, I'm not likely to engage.
Like Shakespeare strutting on a stage, I'll emote on printed page."
Very clever! By far my favorite line.
Another winner Beth!
Keep em coming! :-)
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Poetry has become my new outlet as well.
It brings me peace.
"And even when I'm feeling rage, I'm not likely to engage.
Like Shakespeare strutting on a stage, I'll emote on printed page."
Very clever! By far my favorite line.
Another winner Beth!
Keep em coming! :-)
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you Omar, I'm so glad you like this. I guess that is the reason most of us write. It makes me feel better to get my thoughts on paper.
Beth
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Beth, this lovely 20 line poem tells us all so much about you. Indeed your pen tells all. As you know I have been a faithful reader of every post about your family, even your early life, and all the events that shaped the woman And writer that you have become. So I am not surprised that you have opened your heart to write this poem.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Dear Beth, this lovely 20 line poem tells us all so much about you. Indeed your pen tells all. As you know I have been a faithful reader of every post about your family, even your early life, and all the events that shaped the woman And writer that you have become. So I am not surprised that you have opened your heart to write this poem.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you Suzanna. The truth is that you and other people on this site know me better than those who have been around me for years because the real me comes out in writing. I tend to keep my feeling to myself around people and I let them rattle on about them selves while I listen. I really feel closer to my FanStory friends and I do especially appreciate you because you are so faithful about reading what I write.
Beth
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I like this poem about writing as a therapy and outlet. The rhyming really works for all five stanzas. You did a good job. I like the following line:
I leave my left brain on patrol.
What an exceptional writing.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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I like this poem about writing as a therapy and outlet. The rhyming really works for all five stanzas. You did a good job. I like the following line:
I leave my left brain on patrol.
What an exceptional writing.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you for the review and nice comments. I'm appreciate you telling me which like was your favorite. I'm so glad you found it worthy of six stars.
Beth
Comment from Boogienights
I feel as you do, writing is a great outlet for your feelings. I have been on a journey of self discovery ever since I started writing, I've learned a lot about myself. Best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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I feel as you do, writing is a great outlet for your feelings. I have been on a journey of self discovery ever since I started writing, I've learned a lot about myself. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'll bet a lot of writers feel that way.
Beth
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written 20 line poem. Writing allows me to impart feeling festering in my heart. More freely flowing once I start , it's my outlet and my art. Great flow and rhyme scheme. Nice photo to go with your words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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This is a beautifully written 20 line poem. Writing allows me to impart feeling festering in my heart. More freely flowing once I start , it's my outlet and my art. Great flow and rhyme scheme. Nice photo to go with your words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank you Jaanne, I'm so glad you like the and appreciate you letting me know the part you liked best.
I really appreciate the six stars.
Beth
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Beth, this is an excellent poem well rhymed and in mono-rhyme - well done. The contents, I think, will resonate with many and you speak clearly and honestly. I enjoyed the read - particularly -
For me, my grief's a private thing.
I, alone, should feel its sting.
But in a poem, a dirge I'll sing--
like a bird, my tears take wing..... well said. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Hello Beth, this is an excellent poem well rhymed and in mono-rhyme - well done. The contents, I think, will resonate with many and you speak clearly and honestly. I enjoyed the read - particularly -
For me, my grief's a private thing.
I, alone, should feel its sting.
But in a poem, a dirge I'll sing--
like a bird, my tears take wing..... well said. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 26-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2021
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Thank ;you so much Dorothy. I appreciate the review and the comments.
Beth