The Wall
brick by brick37 total reviews
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I really liked this short story. Great start. This happens to all of us at some time or the other. Then you really want to run away from it all. Great use of metaphor. Smooth flowing words. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I really liked this short story. Great start. This happens to all of us at some time or the other. Then you really want to run away from it all. Great use of metaphor. Smooth flowing words. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Many thanks, my friend. GMG
Comment from Jay Squires
Ah-ha! Mortal enemy, that! And sometimes, yes, you just gotta walk away from the computer and murmer, "Maybe tomorrow."
It is so good to have you back, Gareth.
I loved the way you took the reader on an extended metaphor describing the process of blockage, creative constipation that can be followed by diarrhea of material you just have to work through. Kind of a dirty job that I don't feel like talking more about, and you are probably happy for that.
No, a brick wall is better.
There was only ever going to be one winner. [I have trouble with "ever" being in there. It makes perfect sense without it, and one stumbles to get past it.]
Thank you for writing this and I hope it's the first of a whole new spurt of writing from you.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Ah-ha! Mortal enemy, that! And sometimes, yes, you just gotta walk away from the computer and murmer, "Maybe tomorrow."
It is so good to have you back, Gareth.
I loved the way you took the reader on an extended metaphor describing the process of blockage, creative constipation that can be followed by diarrhea of material you just have to work through. Kind of a dirty job that I don't feel like talking more about, and you are probably happy for that.
No, a brick wall is better.
There was only ever going to be one winner. [I have trouble with "ever" being in there. It makes perfect sense without it, and one stumbles to get past it.]
Thank you for writing this and I hope it's the first of a whole new spurt of writing from you.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for checking this one pout, Jay. I've been away for most of last year, life, work and all that. I hope to be around a bit more this year. Much appreciated, as always. G
Comment from Paws4FX
so (long) low - Typo? At least if you're referencing the LaVern Baker song. Nice analogy for writer's block! I enjoyed this one. Thanks for the read!
Michael
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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so (long) low - Typo? At least if you're referencing the LaVern Baker song. Nice analogy for writer's block! I enjoyed this one. Thanks for the read!
Michael
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Yep, that's a typo. Good spot. many thanks. GMG
Comment from Ric Myworld
If we are lucky, there is always another tomorrow. If we aren't so lucky and tomorrow never comes, then what does it all matter anyway. Thanks for sharing another fine story.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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If we are lucky, there is always another tomorrow. If we aren't so lucky and tomorrow never comes, then what does it all matter anyway. Thanks for sharing another fine story.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I almost burst into a song from 'Annie' there! lol Much appreciated, as always, Ric. G
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Now this really is a great depiction of writer's block.
Cameron Wilkes stared at the wall. It stared right back. > fantastic start.
the words of a song from a long-ago school assembly > the answer was on the tip of my tongue for so long, but words failed me. Hurrah for Google. However did we used to manage?
Blood pebbled on the fingertips of his right hand > the ultimate in concision that shows everything about the extent of the battle between the two.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Now this really is a great depiction of writer's block.
Cameron Wilkes stared at the wall. It stared right back. > fantastic start.
the words of a song from a long-ago school assembly > the answer was on the tip of my tongue for so long, but words failed me. Hurrah for Google. However did we used to manage?
Blood pebbled on the fingertips of his right hand > the ultimate in concision that shows everything about the extent of the battle between the two.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I worked hard on this piece to not use any obtrusive adverbs ('ly' words). Without them you need to be precise and choose strong verbs. much appreciated. G
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thank you for the 'ly' hint
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I know just how he feels these days. Having to do so much with a reduced team at work due to covid is killing me. So tired and then the brain shuts down and you hit a wall you can't get around. Well done as always sir.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I know just how he feels these days. Having to do so much with a reduced team at work due to covid is killing me. So tired and then the brain shuts down and you hit a wall you can't get around. Well done as always sir.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Work... grr. this year has been a nightmare. I've been working the entire time and not from home either. I had covid way back in March too - not nice. Much appreciated. G
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Oh my. Sorry you have the virus, but glad you recovered.
Comment from Sugarray77
I absolutely love this story... sort of a glimpse into your mind... or the mind of many writers who are very familiar with that wall you wrote about. Great set and relatable closing. I really enjoyed reading it.
Melissa
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I absolutely love this story... sort of a glimpse into your mind... or the mind of many writers who are very familiar with that wall you wrote about. Great set and relatable closing. I really enjoyed reading it.
Melissa
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Many thanks as always. GMG
Comment from royowen
Of course you've got me mystified at this one, but being restricted to one place, it can only be one or two possibilities, but this story is true to style my friend, well done, great story, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Of course you've got me mystified at this one, but being restricted to one place, it can only be one or two possibilities, but this story is true to style my friend, well done, great story, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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lol, I don't always make it easy. the wall is really just representative of any obstacles we have to overcome but can't see a way out of or around. in this case not being able to write but it could be anything. Many thanks, Roy. G
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Good job,
Comment from nancy_e_davis
You too? I just can't seem to gain any headway over, under or through that wall. Maybe tomorrow? My tomorrows are very few. I wish I could write poetry again like I used to. Well done Gareth. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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You too? I just can't seem to gain any headway over, under or through that wall. Maybe tomorrow? My tomorrows are very few. I wish I could write poetry again like I used to. Well done Gareth. Nancy:)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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I think it happens to us all at some point. For me, it's apathy. I just can't be bothered as opposed to not being able to. lol Many thanks, G.
Comment from w.j.debi
As always, you have me wondering where the story is going. This solid brick wall certainly is an obstacle. How to get through or around something so solid? An excellent twist at the end, leaving the reader to imagine what kind of metaphorical wall they need to overcome.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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As always, you have me wondering where the story is going. This solid brick wall certainly is an obstacle. How to get through or around something so solid? An excellent twist at the end, leaving the reader to imagine what kind of metaphorical wall they need to overcome.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2021
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Nice reading of the post. Always appreciated. G