Renga Two
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--and 'bare branch tree nudity' is HOT! Those exhibitionists' trees have no shame; oh, I've heard some say it's 'natural'--it's just perversion!
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--and 'bare branch tree nudity' is HOT! Those exhibitionists' trees have no shame; oh, I've heard some say it's 'natural'--it's just perversion!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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LoL a seasoned octet
Servant of All : W. R. Jerman
by lyenochka
hugs,
gypsy
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a beautiful addition to your book. I particularly liked the term 'timidly disrobe' which I found very evokative of a slow transition from autumn to winter.
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This is a beautiful addition to your book. I particularly liked the term 'timidly disrobe' which I found very evokative of a slow transition from autumn to winter.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Wow, thank you very much for your exceptional review and six stars, I treasure them.
hugs,
gypsy
Comment from robyn corum
M,
What a delightful image! This poem makes a startling and clear haiku and a wonderful addition to your renga.
This is a wonderful project you've begun. Thanks so much!
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M,
What a delightful image! This poem makes a startling and clear haiku and a wonderful addition to your renga.
This is a wonderful project you've begun. Thanks so much!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you, Robyn, I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Gloria ....
Your other renga books was so successful so book number two is a great idea. This one begins with fall and with lots of potential.
Congrats on the success of your last Renga and great wishes on this one too. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Your other renga books was so successful so book number two is a great idea. This one begins with fall and with lots of potential.
Congrats on the success of your last Renga and great wishes on this one too. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Gloria. I appreciate your wonderful review and kind words. Have a great weekend!
hugs,
gypsy
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I really like this opening chapter of a new Renga book, I assume. I can't find the book link. The second and third lines are very animated. You did a great job. What a Haiku expert!
Exceptionally done.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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I really like this opening chapter of a new Renga book, I assume. I can't find the book link. The second and third lines are very animated. You did a great job. What a Haiku expert!
Exceptionally done.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Wow, thank you very much for your exceptional review and six stars, I treasure them. I am a bit confused about 'I can't find the book link'... do you mean book one? I will add that link, good idea.
hugs,
gypsy
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I found the book one link. We need a link for book two.
Comment from Taurus the Elder
Very good. Technically sound, perfect syllable count. The words paint a beautiful image of trees in autumn and the art work enhances the effect. I think it's great that you are giving us a chance to take part in a different style of Japanese poetry ( Renga). I love reading your work and it has helped me out a lot. Great job.
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Very good. Technically sound, perfect syllable count. The words paint a beautiful image of trees in autumn and the art work enhances the effect. I think it's great that you are giving us a chance to take part in a different style of Japanese poetry ( Renga). I love reading your work and it has helped me out a lot. Great job.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Wow, I love your review... it's so exceptional. Thank you for the six stars and the wonderful feedback. Have a great weekend!
gypsy hugs
Comment from AnnieDawn
I really like the subject that you chose for your poem. It reads well but I have one suggestion. The first line is plural "trees" and the last line reads singular "disrobes". If you could change either one it would be perfect. Because "trees disrobe" and "tree disrobes". Otherwise it is perfect.
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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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I really like the subject that you chose for your poem. It reads well but I have one suggestion. The first line is plural "trees" and the last line reads singular "disrobes". If you could change either one it would be perfect. Because "trees disrobe" and "tree disrobes". Otherwise it is perfect.
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
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Thank you for your review. Thank you for the wonderful feedback. Have a great weekend!
gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
That's so cool! I like the "timidly disrobes!" This year has been so strange with the deciduous trees here. Some are disrobed overnight and some are still green! Beautiful poem and picture!
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That's so cool! I like the "timidly disrobes!" This year has been so strange with the deciduous trees here. Some are disrobed overnight and some are still green! Beautiful poem and picture!
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2020
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Wow, I love your review... it's so positive. Thank you for the stars and the wonderful feedback. Have a great weekend!
gypsy hugs
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