The Boat
A 5-7-5 poetry contest entry.214 total reviews
Comment from makanjuola
A devastating description of poetic confidence. Good word choice with rhymes adding to the completeness. This is a good work, but can still be upgraded if the author so wishes, it would cost some more of the already possessed poetic flavors. A wonderful work.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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A devastating description of poetic confidence. Good word choice with rhymes adding to the completeness. This is a good work, but can still be upgraded if the author so wishes, it would cost some more of the already possessed poetic flavors. A wonderful work.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you, I wish I could have worked with it more but it was a 5-7-5, this was my first time even trying.
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I changed it, I think this sounds better now, its a better format, it was a 6-7-5 earlier (personal human error combined with computer error. do you like this one more?
Comment from elchupakabra
I like this short 5-7-5. The rhyme is solid and the flow is good, the allusion works toward the theme you indicate in your author's notes and I enjoyed the s alliteration of stone still. Excellent work on this piece, good luck in the contest, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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I like this short 5-7-5. The rhyme is solid and the flow is good, the allusion works toward the theme you indicate in your author's notes and I enjoyed the s alliteration of stone still. Excellent work on this piece, good luck in the contest, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you for your reply. and it could have been that if you wanted it to be :P that is a funny look on it too!
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I have changed it slightly so now its a better format. it was a 6-7-5 previously. (brought to my attention by another reviewer.
Comment from c_lucas
I came to the shore.
Ran out of pier, now I'm here
Bobbing with the waves.
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The above 5-7-5 came to mind after reading your first line. Your poem is very well written. Good luck in your contest.
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Very good
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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I came to the shore.
Ran out of pier, now I'm here
Bobbing with the waves.
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The above 5-7-5 came to mind after reading your first line. Your poem is very well written. Good luck in your contest.
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Very good
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Thank you, I actually just started into this site.
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Welcome to the site. You're welcome.
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I fixed my poem (sending out a blanket message to all who reviewed for me) It is now a 5-7-5 instead of a 6-7-5 :P
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I reviewed it. Well done.
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Thank you again :P
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was a fun poem. I wish you capitalize the "i", though. This would bring up the presentation a lot. Very witty and prevalent. It could be quite tragic when one doesn't know how to steer (lol).
Thank you for sharing this with us, good luck in contest.
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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This was a fun poem. I wish you capitalize the "i", though. This would bring up the presentation a lot. Very witty and prevalent. It could be quite tragic when one doesn't know how to steer (lol).
Thank you for sharing this with us, good luck in contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Thank you, I fixed the I's that is a problem of mine. Perhaps I should try another time? :P
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I changed it, now it is a 5-7-5 instead of a 6-7-5 xD another reviewer brought it to my attention.