Amber and Rust Leaves
5/7/5 Autumn Haiku - contest entry24 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Nice very nice Gypsy
Oh my what a beautify sight to behold of the amber and rust leaves crunch between the hoops with a whispering a soft murmuring sound
I wish you the best in this 5-7-5
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Nice very nice Gypsy
Oh my what a beautify sight to behold of the amber and rust leaves crunch between the hoops with a whispering a soft murmuring sound
I wish you the best in this 5-7-5
Gert
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Cheers,
Gypsy
Comment from Joan E.
What a striking painting you selected to match your haiku! Thank you for your appeal to our senses of sight and sound and our reaction to autumn. Best wishes in the 5-7-5 contest. Cheers- Joan
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What a striking painting you selected to match your haiku! Thank you for your appeal to our senses of sight and sound and our reaction to autumn. Best wishes in the 5-7-5 contest. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for the six stars and your exceptional review
Cheers,
Gypsy
Comment from June Sargent
This an outstanding example of a seasonal haiku. The sight of the forest carpeted in rust leaves and the sound of the hooves crunching them - a feast for the senses. I love the accompanying artwork. Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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This an outstanding example of a seasonal haiku. The sight of the forest carpeted in rust leaves and the sound of the hooves crunching them - a feast for the senses. I love the accompanying artwork. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much, June. I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem. Thank you very much for the six stars.
Cheers
Gypsy
Comment from mermaids
I learned a new word today, susurrus. Your poem paints a vivid picture of nature. Your use of words appeals to the senses, crunching of leaves and the beautiful doe. The reader feels like she is out in nature.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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I learned a new word today, susurrus. Your poem paints a vivid picture of nature. Your use of words appeals to the senses, crunching of leaves and the beautiful doe. The reader feels like she is out in nature.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem.
Cheers
Gypsy
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the amber and rust leaves that are crunchy when step on by doe's cloven hooves and the sound travel far in the silent wood.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the amber and rust leaves that are crunchy when step on by doe's cloven hooves and the sound travel far in the silent wood.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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thank you
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your haiku is excellent--descriptive and appealing. In your few syllables, you have placed the reader in a fall setting in nature--complete with
flora and fauna.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Your haiku is excellent--descriptive and appealing. In your few syllables, you have placed the reader in a fall setting in nature--complete with
flora and fauna.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much, Janice, I appreciate your review and time. Take care.
gypsy
Comment from Mark Valentine
"creek's soft susurrus" - lines don't get any better, sound-wise, than that!
And, now that you've taught me about the kireji (thanks), I can more fully appreciate, not only the sound of that line, but its function within the haiku as a whole - contrasting with, and thereby highlighting, the softness of the creek's sound.
I always learn something about the haiku form when I read you.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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"creek's soft susurrus" - lines don't get any better, sound-wise, than that!
And, now that you've taught me about the kireji (thanks), I can more fully appreciate, not only the sound of that line, but its function within the haiku as a whole - contrasting with, and thereby highlighting, the softness of the creek's sound.
I always learn something about the haiku form when I read you.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much, Mark, I appreciate your six stars, exceptional review, and time. Take care.
gypsy
Comment from royowen
Well done Gypsy. This is an excellent post my friend, I like the sussurusic sound of a stream or running water, comibed with the rustling whisper of leaves. Well done, great haiku, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Well done Gypsy. This is an excellent post my friend, I like the sussurusic sound of a stream or running water, comibed with the rustling whisper of leaves. Well done, great haiku, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much, Roy, I appreciate your review and time. Take care.
gypsy
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Blessings
Comment from Janetsue
This is a wonderfully relaxing read just before getting ready for bed. We need to be experiencing more positive and soothing poems and images. Thanks for sharing this lovely posting, Gypsy.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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This is a wonderfully relaxing read just before getting ready for bed. We need to be experiencing more positive and soothing poems and images. Thanks for sharing this lovely posting, Gypsy.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much, Janet. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and well worded haiku you have penned for the contest. You used very beautiful imagery and very descriptive words. I could see this as I read each word. Best wishes in the contest. love, teri
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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This is a very beautiful and well worded haiku you have penned for the contest. You used very beautiful imagery and very descriptive words. I could see this as I read each word. Best wishes in the contest. love, teri
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much, Teri. I appreciate your review.