Renga Multi-Author Book
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem in addition to the multi-author Renga book about doves in the garden that brings a sense of peace and tranquility when they settle down in our garden.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem in addition to the multi-author Renga book about doves in the garden that brings a sense of peace and tranquility when they settle down in our garden.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much. Elaine
Comment from Aussie
The dove represents the Holy Spirit that alighted on Jesus as he was baptised by John. I believe we see peace when we see the doves, no matter the colour. They are so gentle and yes, tranquility reigns. Well done friend.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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The dove represents the Holy Spirit that alighted on Jesus as he was baptised by John. I believe we see peace when we see the doves, no matter the colour. They are so gentle and yes, tranquility reigns. Well done friend.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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I love the doves in my yard, they constantly remind me of God and heaven. Thanks so much. Elaine
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Thank you very much for your addition to our renga book. Beautiful 5/7/5 with good syllable count and connection between lines.
following the rules of Renga poetry, a 5/7/5 is followed by a 7/7 couplet and the topic should relate to each other without repeating words.
You are following Roy's (royowen )5/7/5 poem,
Chapter seventy by royowen
Lion and the Lamb
They will rise at future's morn,
Erase jester's pawn.
Your turn is supposed to be a 7/7 can be something like this....
God's messenger flies
through dark (7)
valleys-- tranquility reigns (7) or anything else you would like but it must be a couplet 7/7.
Please add the author notes to your author notes for other people to follow....
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Author notes:
Renga is a Japanese collaborative poetry form in which poets write alternating verses of 5-7-5 stanzas and 7-7 couplets which are linked in succession by multiple poets. Only the first 5/7/5 is a haiku; the rest 5/7/5 stanzas are only restricted to syllable count. Renga is older than haiku.
Please, if you would like to add a chapter to this book of renga, read these instructions then copy and paste to your author notes. If you need help, please do not hesitate to contact Gypsy Blue Rose.
Steps to Post a Chapter:
click on the ADD CHAPTER icon, located above the review box.
If the last poem is a 5/7/5 stanza, write a 7/7 couplet, if the last poem is a 7/7 couplet write a 5/7/5 stanza. Write about the SAME THEME of the previous chapter but please don't REPEAT words.
Post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
(If you would like to read the previous chapters, copy and paste this link to your browser).
https://www.fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=39516
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And one last thing, could you please change the Chapter number to 72? You go to the box where it says 71 and type 72. I don't know what happened. It's supposed to change automatically but sometimes we have glitches.
I'm sorry for all the trouble with the rules but that's how it goes with renga poetry.
Please let me know if you need help.
Hugs,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Hello, my friend,
Thank you very much for your addition to our renga book. Beautiful 5/7/5 with good syllable count and connection between lines.
following the rules of Renga poetry, a 5/7/5 is followed by a 7/7 couplet and the topic should relate to each other without repeating words.
You are following Roy's (royowen )5/7/5 poem,
Chapter seventy by royowen
Lion and the Lamb
They will rise at future's morn,
Erase jester's pawn.
Your turn is supposed to be a 7/7 can be something like this....
God's messenger flies
through dark (7)
valleys-- tranquility reigns (7) or anything else you would like but it must be a couplet 7/7.
Please add the author notes to your author notes for other people to follow....
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Author notes:
Renga is a Japanese collaborative poetry form in which poets write alternating verses of 5-7-5 stanzas and 7-7 couplets which are linked in succession by multiple poets. Only the first 5/7/5 is a haiku; the rest 5/7/5 stanzas are only restricted to syllable count. Renga is older than haiku.
Please, if you would like to add a chapter to this book of renga, read these instructions then copy and paste to your author notes. If you need help, please do not hesitate to contact Gypsy Blue Rose.
Steps to Post a Chapter:
click on the ADD CHAPTER icon, located above the review box.
If the last poem is a 5/7/5 stanza, write a 7/7 couplet, if the last poem is a 7/7 couplet write a 5/7/5 stanza. Write about the SAME THEME of the previous chapter but please don't REPEAT words.
Post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
(If you would like to read the previous chapters, copy and paste this link to your browser).
https://www.fanstory.com/chapterdetails.jsp?id=39516
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And one last thing, could you please change the Chapter number to 72? You go to the box where it says 71 and type 72. I don't know what happened. It's supposed to change automatically but sometimes we have glitches.
I'm sorry for all the trouble with the rules but that's how it goes with renga poetry.
Please let me know if you need help.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much. I wasn't sure if I was suppose to create a 5-75 or a 7/7 couplet. I will try to change my poem. Elaine
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Looks good :) I hope you'll add more chapters in the future. Remember to add my author notes and follow the theme of last poem. A 5/7/5 is followed by a 7/7 poem.
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Thanks for your help. I hope to add more poems.
Comment from judiverse
What a sweet looking dove in the picture. We need something to remind us of peace. I like your description of them as flying through valleys of turmoil. They are a sign that tranquility reigns. Beautifully presented. It will be a great addition to the book. judi
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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What a sweet looking dove in the picture. We need something to remind us of peace. I like your description of them as flying through valleys of turmoil. They are a sign that tranquility reigns. Beautifully presented. It will be a great addition to the book. judi
Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much. Elaine
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation, Elaine.
-We usually have a
pair of doves each year.
-You wrote a very good
poem about it with
effective imagery.
-The concluding line
shows the true spirit
of this peaceful bird.
-Very well done.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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-Nice image and
presentation, Elaine.
-We usually have a
pair of doves each year.
-You wrote a very good
poem about it with
effective imagery.
-The concluding line
shows the true spirit
of this peaceful bird.
-Very well done.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much. Elaine
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You are very welcome, Elaine.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
A very nicely written piece. A dove is good symbolism
for peace and tranquility. I love this photo works really well with your poem. I like the ending Tranquility reigns. The dove instilled peace.
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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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A very nicely written piece. A dove is good symbolism
for peace and tranquility. I love this photo works really well with your poem. I like the ending Tranquility reigns. The dove instilled peace.
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much. Elaine
Comment from mrsmajor
We have only to ask, God is always there to clear the darkness, and bring us into the light, however he chooses....Thanks for sharing, your thought with us, I understand!....Blessings
Warmly,
Victoria
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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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We have only to ask, God is always there to clear the darkness, and bring us into the light, however he chooses....Thanks for sharing, your thought with us, I understand!....Blessings
Warmly,
Victoria
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much. Elaine
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You're very welcome, it was my pleasure!
Victoria