Unpacking Love
When love goes wrong21 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
Another great acrostic poem for the contest. A lovely but sad poem with an interesting title. I never thought about live that way...you should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Another great acrostic poem for the contest. A lovely but sad poem with an interesting title. I never thought about live that way...you should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Thanks, I am very happy that this is total fiction, Whew!
Comment from RShipp
"Intimacy bound in cubes of ice" This is my favorite line!
Enjoyed the read.
Best of luck in the Acrostic Poem writing contest.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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"Intimacy bound in cubes of ice" This is my favorite line!
Enjoyed the read.
Best of luck in the Acrostic Poem writing contest.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your validation on this line of poetry.
Comment from elchupakabra
Crushing words...creating trauma - I actually think the ellipsis in this instance takes away from the impact of this line
Otherwise, great work overall, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Crushing words...creating trauma - I actually think the ellipsis in this instance takes away from the impact of this line
Otherwise, great work overall, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Agreed, done away with! thanks much.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Acrostic poem about how easily lovers can miss their life's outcome when they don't communicate about the important things in their relationship but keep hurting each other knowingly or unknowingly.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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A very well-written Acrostic poem about how easily lovers can miss their life's outcome when they don't communicate about the important things in their relationship but keep hurting each other knowingly or unknowingly.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Sandar, thanks fro reading and commenting, fortunately, this is a work of fiction, whew!
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Writer all I can say as I see this peace that you so gracefully penned. "You nailed the qualifications and the rhythm and rhyme right on the head. Your presentation is so on spot as well. I love the wording and each line falls in a certain pattern that's noticeable. Great job. Well wishes for your entry.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Writer all I can say as I see this peace that you so gracefully penned. "You nailed the qualifications and the rhythm and rhyme right on the head. Your presentation is so on spot as well. I love the wording and each line falls in a certain pattern that's noticeable. Great job. Well wishes for your entry.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Mary, wow! Thank you so very much for this wonderful six-star review and kind comments.
Comment from Sheila Golding
Very clever use of words, to make the title with the first letters of each line. Telling a story too, well done, hope you do well ð???
This should do well, nice work.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Very clever use of words, to make the title with the first letters of each line. Telling a story too, well done, hope you do well ð???
This should do well, nice work.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Sheila, thank you!
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You are welcome 😄
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your poem revibrated in my heart as I could properly identify with it. "Everyone for themselves where love is lacking", is a universal truth. Thanks for sharing your thoughts as we pray for the emotional satisfactions we so need.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Your poem revibrated in my heart as I could properly identify with it. "Everyone for themselves where love is lacking", is a universal truth. Thanks for sharing your thoughts as we pray for the emotional satisfactions we so need.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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ESOTINE, in the course of our lives we at times find ourselves in a desert searching for an oasis.
Comment from AnnieDawn
This follows the Acrostic rules for this contest and you have done a good job with your free form poem. There is a bit of pain and suffering in it but it does not overwhelm the reader. I wish you luck in the contest. Good work.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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This follows the Acrostic rules for this contest and you have done a good job with your free form poem. There is a bit of pain and suffering in it but it does not overwhelm the reader. I wish you luck in the contest. Good work.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Annie, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poetry. Have a wonderful week ahead.
Comment from kiwisteveh
A rather grim little poem about the end of love and what has caused the breakdown. I'm a little puzzled by the title, which is of course also the Acrostic phrase. I can imagine a situation where 'unpacking love' might apply to the end of a relationship, but you don't really go there in your poem to show what it means to you.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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A rather grim little poem about the end of love and what has caused the breakdown. I'm a little puzzled by the title, which is of course also the Acrostic phrase. I can imagine a situation where 'unpacking love' might apply to the end of a relationship, but you don't really go there in your poem to show what it means to you.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Steve, I have seen time and again, many relationships that just start unpacking all that stuff they had hidden -perhaps as false fronts -especially when the relationship is starting to crumble and someone in the relationship must take a stand to move alonmg.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Unpacking love, this acrostic poem is balanced, with rhythm of thoughts expressed each line; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Unpacking love, this acrostic poem is balanced, with rhythm of thoughts expressed each line; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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ALCREATOR, thank you for your time spent reading and commenting on this poem.
