Angel of Ireland ~ The Twins
Cal and Tomas30 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
Well, Sally, two is always better than one. Even when it is said that one plus one makes three. :) That is the angel with the two. Good story Sally. Twins have always felt what the other feels. They came into life together, they may not be identical, but they shared everything mama had to give. Thank you for sharing. Take care and bless you and your family.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Well, Sally, two is always better than one. Even when it is said that one plus one makes three. :) That is the angel with the two. Good story Sally. Twins have always felt what the other feels. They came into life together, they may not be identical, but they shared everything mama had to give. Thank you for sharing. Take care and bless you and your family.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review and kind comments, dear Jose. It is so appreciated. Sending you my best today and to your family as always, Sally xo
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hey Sal.
The story demonstrates certainly the relationship between twins. My wife is a twin and I have observed that for nearly 50 years how they interact with each other.
A very interesting part of the story to me was the response of the bully. He just wandered off without a word. That is how all bullies should be.
It seemed to me that the Parson did not see the Angel as he carried the boy into town. It's a well told story and I will add that, "His Eye Is On the Sparrow" is one of my favorite songs.
Your pal. Z
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Hey Sal.
The story demonstrates certainly the relationship between twins. My wife is a twin and I have observed that for nearly 50 years how they interact with each other.
A very interesting part of the story to me was the response of the bully. He just wandered off without a word. That is how all bullies should be.
It seemed to me that the Parson did not see the Angel as he carried the boy into town. It's a well told story and I will add that, "His Eye Is On the Sparrow" is one of my favorite songs.
Your pal. Z
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you, dear Z. This is one of my favorite songs as well and it would ran around in my head while I was writing this, so I knew it was the perfect song. So glad you liked it all.
Sending my best today as always,
Sally xo
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You're welcome.
Pal Z
Comment from LisaMay
Your tale has a feeling of myth and legend, a spiritual connection of angelic appearance told in a very appealing manner. It evokes an Irish childhood and lifestyle clearly and engagingly, with underlying themes of twin connection, destiny choices, and assistance from beyond the veil.
Some comments:
I'd prefer if a different word was used in the second instance of "scrapes" in the following sentence to avoid close proximity repetition. Maybe "dicing with death"?
"Never did they enter into the parsonage without scraped knees, tales of scrapes with death,..."
I love the spooky feeling of this passage:
"Every tree was named a spectre, with bent branches that looked like arms and legs, and Scottish Pines that seemed to have eyes."
"The cracking sound said it didn't matter." I don't understand what this means. What doesn't matter?
"His Eye is on the Sparrow" was the perfect choice to sing!
"Cal limping along with Tomas, leaning on his arm" - I doubt that with a freshly broken leg he would be able to even limp by putting pressure on it.
A word missing: "The O'Fallons would always recall (the) day they sighted and interacted..."
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Your tale has a feeling of myth and legend, a spiritual connection of angelic appearance told in a very appealing manner. It evokes an Irish childhood and lifestyle clearly and engagingly, with underlying themes of twin connection, destiny choices, and assistance from beyond the veil.
Some comments:
I'd prefer if a different word was used in the second instance of "scrapes" in the following sentence to avoid close proximity repetition. Maybe "dicing with death"?
"Never did they enter into the parsonage without scraped knees, tales of scrapes with death,..."
I love the spooky feeling of this passage:
"Every tree was named a spectre, with bent branches that looked like arms and legs, and Scottish Pines that seemed to have eyes."
"The cracking sound said it didn't matter." I don't understand what this means. What doesn't matter?
"His Eye is on the Sparrow" was the perfect choice to sing!
"Cal limping along with Tomas, leaning on his arm" - I doubt that with a freshly broken leg he would be able to even limp by putting pressure on it.
A word missing: "The O'Fallons would always recall (the) day they sighted and interacted..."
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind comments, dear Lisa. I appreciate your critiques and improvements as well.
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :)
Sending my best today as always,
Sally XOs....
Comment from WalkerMan
A confident boy may do a lot of risky things, at least some of which could have bad or even disastrous consequences, but that is his path to adulthood as a self-confident man. In cases such as this one, it helps to have an earth angel at hand to keep a mishap from becoming more than temporarily painful.
You told this story well with your usual useful detail of plausible events and relevant dialog, so the reader feels immersed in the action. The story is realistic enough to be less surprising that it actually is based on your own grandsons' comparable adventure decades ago, and I can see how such an event might influence their later lives.
Superb, aptly illustrated, and well accompanied by the chosen music videos.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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A confident boy may do a lot of risky things, at least some of which could have bad or even disastrous consequences, but that is his path to adulthood as a self-confident man. In cases such as this one, it helps to have an earth angel at hand to keep a mishap from becoming more than temporarily painful.
You told this story well with your usual useful detail of plausible events and relevant dialog, so the reader feels immersed in the action. The story is realistic enough to be less surprising that it actually is based on your own grandsons' comparable adventure decades ago, and I can see how such an event might influence their later lives.
Superb, aptly illustrated, and well accompanied by the chosen music videos.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Mike, for your kind and thoughtful review. My twin grandsons just turned twelve and this happened to my red-headed Caleb two summers ago. Twins have such a special bond, and angels around my two made for another 'Angel of Ireland' story.
Thanks again for the wonderful review and starshine. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally :))
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You are most welcome, Sal. Though there never have been any twins in my family at large, I always have had such a bond with my five-years-younger sister; and it has strengthened over time, despite our being over a thousand miles apart for the last sixteen years. She and I have been each other's angel when needed. Consequently, I can relate to aspects of this story better than otherwise might have been so. --Mike
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I was a twin but she didn't make it full term. I always feel like part of me is missing. Twins or even a close sibling share a common bond of closeness. :)
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Ah, that explains a lot. Twins usually occur in alternate generations. Yes, that is how things are between my sister and me. -- Mike
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Twins are amazingly more than one. They are so intertwined with their partner making them two with one persona. Your description at the beginning is so articulate and leads into a very lovely and well-written story. The magic doctor being in the right place at the right time kept the story from being tragic. Well done Sally.
Ralf
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Twins are amazingly more than one. They are so intertwined with their partner making them two with one persona. Your description at the beginning is so articulate and leads into a very lovely and well-written story. The magic doctor being in the right place at the right time kept the story from being tragic. Well done Sally.
Ralf
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for the excellent review of my work. Glad you enjoyed it, and were able to follow the continuing story of my angel. Sending my best today as always,
Sally XOs.....
Comment from lyenochka
So poetically written, Sal! I remember the story about your twin grandsons and the beautiful relationship they have. God does send us angels at just the right times.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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So poetically written, Sal! I remember the story about your twin grandsons and the beautiful relationship they have. God does send us angels at just the right times.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the lovely review and generous six star rating, dear Helen. You have a great memory. That was a while ago that I shared Caleb and Tyler's story. I'm blessed once again! Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs.....
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This piece--based on true events--moved me to tears and smiles. Your story is well-plotted, with specific, vivid details, and conveys a sweet message about the power of God and His angels.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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This piece--based on true events--moved me to tears and smiles. Your story is well-plotted, with specific, vivid details, and conveys a sweet message about the power of God and His angels.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Janice dear. I appreciate your excellent review and kind comments. It is so appreciated and needed.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally XOs.....
Comment from fm wright
Such an amazing story. It is told so wonderfully that it reads more like a fantasy rather than non-fiction. I loved it's telling, as well as the photo and videos.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Such an amazing story. It is told so wonderfully that it reads more like a fantasy rather than non-fiction. I loved it's telling, as well as the photo and videos.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Faye dear, thank you so much for this great review and glorious stars! I'm pleased you enjoyed it from end to end. :)
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs............
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My best to you. Look forward to your next posting.
x's and o's,
Faye
Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles to you Sally Law
I enjoyed reading your fiction spiritual story of the twins and the angel who was a Doctor.
Thank you for your authors note telling us that your spittual story was based on a true story.
Gert
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Smiles to you Sally Law
I enjoyed reading your fiction spiritual story of the twins and the angel who was a Doctor.
Thank you for your authors note telling us that your spittual story was based on a true story.
Gert
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Dear Gert, thank you so much for the lovely review and kind comments. It is so appreciated. Sending you my best today as always,
Sally XOs....
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You are so welcome Sally Law
Gert
Comment from elchupakabra
This was a nice story, and I was able to identify with it because my best friend actually has twin girls :) Really great work here and I liked the musical inclusion. Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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This was a nice story, and I was able to identify with it because my best friend actually has twin girls :) Really great work here and I liked the musical inclusion. Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for the kind review and comments. It is so appreciated.
Sending my best today and always,
Sally xo