Comment from Steven Hicks

Good

First let me say that I love all of the literary references you have tucked away in the lines of your poem.
The title works so well, for it makes me want to read the poem and it truly delivers on its promise of whimsey.
I am not sure of what Hummy's warehouse is so I miss the connection to the Gatlin' gun.
The only real criticism is without any punctuation at all from the second stanza to the end, I did not have enough air to make it all the way through. We need to give readers the ability to read the piece, and they have learned that they may breath at punctuation points.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your response...you are right...it need a little tidying up.....Godspeed and Best Wishes..

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Absolutely love the name of your writing group, the Alliance for Lackluster Poets striving for new heights. ALPS a perfect anagram.

Wishing you luck with the voters with this gem of genius illustrating your writing technique.

Really good and a most enjoyable read today. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020

Thanks so much....these are lots of fun....obviously running far distant to some of the more elegant entries....But for now it's good for me....Godspeed and Best Wishes

Comment from Vanna1

Good

It is definitely an original style. I'm not sure how it fits the contest. You said a lot about writing poetry but it is all satire. Very entertaining to babble through all the lines you wrote, fun and silly. Your unique writing makes you stand out, in a positive way.

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 Comment Written 10-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020

Thanks so much for your response....you are right....these are scattershot nonsense which is fun though not necessarily truly competitive....Best Wishes and Godspeed

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Mmm, I think this would be an excellent entry for the rhyming contest too. I get how you write your poetry in a witty way with ideas springing as fireballs into imagination. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020

Thank you so very much..these are fun, little bits of bouncy nonsense....Godspeed and Best Wishes.....

Comment from ebeta

Excellent

This felt to me more like a verse than a poem.
If this was a freestyle battle you would show 'em
No bullets - but shots fired
old poetry rules retired
But the words were so inspired
Silverstein and Dixie Chicks - we all know 'em
We outgrow 'em
So I was happy to read this fresh poem.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2020

Thanks for your response....Let me guess...it took you thirty seconds to pen back that bouncy little verse...A man after my own heart.....Best Wishes Brother and Godspeed

Comment from HarryT

Exceptional

Thoroughly enjoyed this write. Very cleaver by the poet. Wonder why no picture attached. However, not needed. The work flows smooth good rhyming and references. Love the gatlin' gun image.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020

Thank you so very much..am brand new to this structure and don't know lots of little details....grew up with slapdash verse and as they say.. "nonsense tickles the brain cells".....Godspeed Brother and Best Wishes

Comment from R. Hiland

Excellent

I like it--can't say why really. But even without getting inside all the nicknames the intention is clear. That's a good thing. And I like your mentors a lot. Fun piece, a nice rhythm and good rhymes. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020

Thanks so very much....you are right ..it's a little herky jerky...but fun nonetheless. Very best to you....

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Not quite sure what this poem is about here except to say that you feel you are unlikely to like traditional poetry but poetry of a different kind, a gritty kind, I enjoyed the rhymes even though the meter is uneven in places, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020

Thanks so very much.You are right...it is a little gritty, grimy, garble but great fun to throw together...Best Wishes to you and Godspeed

Comment from RShipp

Excellent

Best of luck with the How do you write your poetry? contest.

I saw this one, and my interest was piqued, but then I had NO IDEA what to do with my thoughts.

You had a very innovative twist! Enjoyed!

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020

Thanks for your thoughts....you are right...it is a little goofy, spoofy but fun to compose Best Wishes and Godspeeds

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Very clever, you've done a great job in scribing this very quirky entry in this contest, also clever inasmuch you've inscribed this with your very own stamp I suspect, we may be similar in form but definitely different our own personal stamp, so well done, you've done a crack jack job, in a selfstyled ballad style, beautifully written good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020

Thanks so very much for your thoughts...you are right ...it is a little droopy, loopy but fun to put together....Godspeed and Best Wishes

reply by royowen on 10-Aug-2020

Good job