Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Pray for Rain"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
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Comment from Gloria ....
Gypsy this is a terrific follow up to your tumbleweed couplets.
Droughts are horrible things and if only the olive trees can extend their branches to entice the rain.
Always a pleasure to read your work. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Gypsy this is a terrific follow up to your tumbleweed couplets.
Droughts are horrible things and if only the olive trees can extend their branches to entice the rain.
Always a pleasure to read your work. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Hello, Gloria, thank you very much for your review and kind words. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Hugs :)
Gypsy
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 5-7 -5 poem about the farmers praying for rain. I am doing the same thing for where we live. It is so very hot. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery from the picture you chose. Thanks for sharing! love, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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This is a very well written 5-7 -5 poem about the farmers praying for rain. I am doing the same thing for where we live. It is so very hot. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery from the picture you chose. Thanks for sharing! love, Teri
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Hugs
Gypsy
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Lovely and elegant--resilient souls indeed! Years ago I learned--and just confirmed--there exists a 4000-5000 year-old olive tree in Jerusalem. This verse is a fine addition to the renga. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Lovely and elegant--resilient souls indeed! Years ago I learned--and just confirmed--there exists a 4000-5000 year-old olive tree in Jerusalem. This verse is a fine addition to the renga. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I didn't know about the olive tree in Jerusalem...wow.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Lovely and elegant--resilient souls indeed! Years ago I learned--and just confirmed--there exists a 4000-5000 year-old olive tree in Jerusalem. This verse is a fine addition to the renga. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Lovely and elegant--resilient souls indeed! Years ago I learned--and just confirmed--there exists a 4000-5000 year-old olive tree in Jerusalem. This verse is a fine addition to the renga. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Wabigoon
Gypsy--
Yes, but, it's not a very good poem! In fact, it's lousy. So, I don't care much for what follows. "Prays" for rain? Of whom, to what? Why doesn't he do, in the fashion of an Orpheus poet, something about it, like journey to hell to recover Eurydice to solve the reasons for drought?
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Gypsy--
Yes, but, it's not a very good poem! In fact, it's lousy. So, I don't care much for what follows. "Prays" for rain? Of whom, to what? Why doesn't he do, in the fashion of an Orpheus poet, something about it, like journey to hell to recover Eurydice to solve the reasons for drought?
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Okay
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contribution to the renga book, Gypsy. Your words are precise and filled with imagery. The image is perfect. The souls are the olive trees and the man.
[IF you would like to make you dedication/or comment where you can on the 'Show Advanced Options', (hope that is the right name on the page use advanced editor--then do this
Where you can write a dedication, Before you begin, add then write your dedication and Add . Doing this will make the dedication show in bold font.
Like this:
JOIN THE FUN ADD A CHAPTER TO THE RENGA BOOK
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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I enjoyed your contribution to the renga book, Gypsy. Your words are precise and filled with imagery. The image is perfect. The souls are the olive trees and the man.
[IF you would like to make you dedication/or comment where you can on the 'Show Advanced Options', (hope that is the right name on the page use advanced editor--then do this
Where you can write a dedication, Before you begin, add then write your dedication and Add . Doing this will make the dedication show in bold font.
Like this:
JOIN THE FUN ADD A CHAPTER TO THE RENGA BOOK
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Jan.
Hugs
Gypsy
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same procedure applies to author notes
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I'm confused. Is there a problem with the dedication? The all caps?
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No, I was just giving you some info that you can File 13 if not interested. The dedication line is the one place you can use all caps.
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Oh, lol, I deleted it. That's okay. Thank you very much.
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How can one delete replies?
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You mean I should not use all caps in author notes?
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You go to reviews received
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Not at all. I wish FS would allow all caps in regular titles. The dedication line is where one can do that and/or notes.
Comment from Joan E.
And also help fight forest fires. Thank you for adding another of your vivid, 5-7-5 haiku to your Renga book. I empathized with the olive tree farmer in the picture. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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And also help fight forest fires. Thank you for adding another of your vivid, 5-7-5 haiku to your Renga book. I empathized with the olive tree farmer in the picture. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, Joan. Have a wonderful day.
Hugs
Gypsy
Comment from QC Poet
A little while back I seem to remember reading a similar story about wineries. This offering seems to be missing the 7,7 couplet? Reads; Guest poets check the last stanza in the renga book to know what to write next. A 5/7/5 stanza is followed by 7/7 couplet. Good Luck to all writing the book.
Is that for each addition
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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A little while back I seem to remember reading a similar story about wineries. This offering seems to be missing the 7,7 couplet? Reads; Guest poets check the last stanza in the renga book to know what to write next. A 5/7/5 stanza is followed by 7/7 couplet. Good Luck to all writing the book.
Is that for each addition
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Hello, this Japanese poetic form is a cooperative form...one poet writes a 5/7/5 and the next poet writes a 7/7....and repeats.
Thank you very much for your review.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, I see you changed the order of the poems to fit the thematic connections so your poem about rain leads to Deb's poem about the rainbow. I really liked the "resilient souls" which makes me think of both the farmer and his olive trees.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Oh, I see you changed the order of the poems to fit the thematic connections so your poem about rain leads to Deb's poem about the rainbow. I really liked the "resilient souls" which makes me think of both the farmer and his olive trees.
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, Helen. Have a wonderful day.
Hugs
Gypsy
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Well written. Nice job. It is clear and concise. I like how you structured this poem. Excellent work! Thanks for sharing!
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Well written. Nice job. It is clear and concise. I like how you structured this poem. Excellent work! Thanks for sharing!
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, Raul. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy