Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Tumbleweeds"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
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Comment from Gloria ....
I think you have definitely captured the essence and rustling sound of the tumbleweeds. They are interesting once detached from their roots.
I would check into the spelling of susurrous as it shows susurrus in my dictionary.
A superb project and I can imagine a challenge to keep up with, but in the end well worth it.
Many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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I think you have definitely captured the essence and rustling sound of the tumbleweeds. They are interesting once detached from their roots.
I would check into the spelling of susurrous as it shows susurrus in my dictionary.
A superb project and I can imagine a challenge to keep up with, but in the end well worth it.
Many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, I fixed the spelling. Thank you, Gloria, for your review and kind words. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Hugs :)
Gypsy
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 7/7 chapter you have penned for the Renga Multiple Author Book. I love the art work you chose and very good descriptive words. I am going to bookcase some of these until I can write it down and maybe try it sometime. love, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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This is a very well written 7/7 chapter you have penned for the Renga Multiple Author Book. I love the art work you chose and very good descriptive words. I am going to bookcase some of these until I can write it down and maybe try it sometime. love, Teri
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, Teri. I hope you decide to add a chapter. It's a lot of fun :) I know you are busy....maybe in the future. It's a good idea to save it.
Comment from Joan E.
You are amazing--not only do you share new poems frequently, but you even add to your Renga book. I relished your use of the very descriptive "susurrous" in this 7-7 couplet. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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You are amazing--not only do you share new poems frequently, but you even add to your Renga book. I relished your use of the very descriptive "susurrous" in this 7-7 couplet. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Susurrous is almost the same in Spanish. Susurros. I really like the sound.
I don't know how it happened but someone posted to our book skipping two chapters so I had to write them quickly lol. It all worked out. It's a big project so a few errors are bound to happen. I'm glad you like it. :)
Hugs
Gypsy
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I am glad the errors are few an far between, since it is a complicated project. Smiles- Joan
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Well, I like it. It's a challenge :)
Comment from Mrs. KT
Such an atmospheric couplet, Gypsy!
I felt as if I could actually hear the tumbleweed rustling along on their way.
Beautiful imagery.
I want to thank you publicly for creating this renga exercise. I so enjoyed the opportunity to contribute!
Thank you!
diane
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Such an atmospheric couplet, Gypsy!
I felt as if I could actually hear the tumbleweed rustling along on their way.
Beautiful imagery.
I want to thank you publicly for creating this renga exercise. I so enjoyed the opportunity to contribute!
Thank you!
diane
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, Diane. Have a wonderful day.
Hugs
Gypsy
Comment from QC Poet
Just noting that the word susurrous it's self means full of whispering sounds I believe the word used after it in that sentence - whispers is redundant? I tried checking the notes but they are scrambled a bit probably from copying and pasting- that happens when transferring information. Good Luck to all writing the book.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Just noting that the word susurrous it's self means full of whispering sounds I believe the word used after it in that sentence - whispers is redundant? I tried checking the notes but they are scrambled a bit probably from copying and pasting- that happens when transferring information. Good Luck to all writing the book.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, OC. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
I love the sound of your poem especially with the whispering sounds of the word "susurrous" (a word that the Fanstory editor doesn't know). It gives us an aural experience of the poem, hearing the tumbleweeds roll by.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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I love the sound of your poem especially with the whispering sounds of the word "susurrous" (a word that the Fanstory editor doesn't know). It gives us an aural experience of the poem, hearing the tumbleweeds roll by.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and valuable feedback.
Hugs
Gypsy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great continuation of your interesting, well-thought out book, Gypsy. This poem is well-written. I love the image and your words match it perfectly. Of course your syllable count is correct. Your words are filled with great imagery. Where I live, we have tumbleweeds all the time and when the March/April winds hit--watch out!.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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This is a great continuation of your interesting, well-thought out book, Gypsy. This poem is well-written. I love the image and your words match it perfectly. Of course your syllable count is correct. Your words are filled with great imagery. Where I live, we have tumbleweeds all the time and when the March/April winds hit--watch out!.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, Jan. Have a wonderful day.
Hugs
Gypsy
Comment from Seth Hill
A word never read before.
I rarely give 5 whole stars.
They want one hundred fifty
Characters; that is their rule;
So I have to keep typing.
The first 2 lines are what counts.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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A word never read before.
I rarely give 5 whole stars.
They want one hundred fifty
Characters; that is their rule;
So I have to keep typing.
The first 2 lines are what counts.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, Seth. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
Comment from zanya
Here is a star couplet shining brightly in the poetic firmament - the juxtaposition of words including the use of 'susurrous' create a veritable tangible setting
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Here is a star couplet shining brightly in the poetic firmament - the juxtaposition of words including the use of 'susurrous' create a veritable tangible setting
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, Zania. I appreciate your exceptional review and six stars.
gypsy
Comment from royowen
A lovely addition to this completion of the haiku determining this renga. You've done a great thing with this excellent addition of poetic contributions and opportunity to learn a proceed in this convention, Gypsy, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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A lovely addition to this completion of the haiku determining this renga. You've done a great thing with this excellent addition of poetic contributions and opportunity to learn a proceed in this convention, Gypsy, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, Roy :) bless you too
gypsy
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My pleasure