Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Stunning image--yellow desert sand skies--not quite the color I envision but I'll grant your poetic license. (Do you mean desert AND skies?) Cheers. LIZ (multy-author s/b multi-author)

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020

Elisabeth, it is a pity you couldn't see this phenomenon here in Mallorca. In the summer, hot southern winds color the sky completely yellow. It comes with fine, brownish-yellow sand from the Sahara desert in Africa. When it also starts to rain, we have to hurry the laundry inside, because it colors everything, houses, plants, cars, and of course the forgotten white sheets hanging out to dry, in a light brown-yellow color. Thanks for the review!

reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 20-Jul-2020

Marjon--put that superb description/explanation in the footnotes so all can appreciate what is hard to convey in three lines.

reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020

Thanks for the tip, Elisabeth! I am glad you liked my description. I think I will follow your advice.

reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020

Thanks for the tip, Elisabeth! I am glad you liked my description. I think I will follow your advice.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a great little poem, Marjon. The alliteration of 's' works well. The image is a good pairing with your few syllables that convey a large event. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020

Jan, thank you for a nice review.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Great artwork and
nice presentation, Marjon.
-A good poem with vivid
imagery and alliteration.
-I like the comparison of the
skies to "Sahara desert sand."
-Well done.

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020

Thank you so much for your review, Pam. It is important to me.

Comment from Cindy Decker

Excellent

Marjon,
A nice poem.
The image of rippled sun-lit sand, appearing as majestic as the sky is an excellent comparison. I hope you are well where you are. Holland? I'm sorry if I have forgotten.
Excellent 7-7.
Best wishes.
Cindy

 Comment Written 19-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020

Cindy, thank you for your review. I live in Mallorca (spain) for the last 35 years already. You should see the sky here, as it colors completely yellow, when the southern winds carry the yellow sands from the Sahara desert.

reply by Cindy Decker on 20-Jul-2020

I imagine it is beautiful!☀️

reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020

It is! Smiles, Cindy!

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Waltzing with the wind through winter skies in the desert. Great medley of S sounds in both lines and consonance of W in line one. A fine addition to our book!

Warmly, rd

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 Comment Written 19-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020

Rama, thanks a lot for your review!

reply by rama devi on 20-Jul-2020

*welcome*

reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020

:))

reply by rama devi on 20-Jul-2020

:-)))

Comment from royowen

Excellent

What a marvellous 7/7 Marjon, I couldn't to read your marvellous addition to the Gypsy book, you can be relied on to reveal a truly poetic soul, and I am persuaded you are a more than that, well done, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 19-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020

Thanks soooo much, Roy! I am very pleased you liked my contribution.