Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Wine's Truth"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
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Comment from Janetsue
What fun to find you participating in this renga collection. I hope to do add something, myself as soon as I can. I like your romantic couplet which gives the reader lines to ponder regarding the truth of the relationship. Nicely done, Helen!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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What fun to find you participating in this renga collection. I hope to do add something, myself as soon as I can. I like your romantic couplet which gives the reader lines to ponder regarding the truth of the relationship. Nicely done, Helen!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Your affirming words are such an encouragement, Janet. Thanks so much. Looking forward to your poem soon! Hugs!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Lovely--makes me want to have a glass even though I abhor the taste of alcohol! Love's lips is whimsical and alliterative--as is sun sweetened. Cheers. (apropos!) LIZ
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Lovely--makes me want to have a glass even though I abhor the taste of alcohol! Love's lips is whimsical and alliterative--as is sun sweetened. Cheers. (apropos!) LIZ
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Lol. I only like sweet wines and I can only handle sips of beer. But I can see how they might help with digestion in small quantities. Thanks so much for reviewing, Liz!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image, Helen.
-I review Ulla's poem
that followed this but
hadn't seen yours.
-I am glad you are participating;
it's a great project.
-You did a good job following
Bill's poem.
-It is a very interesting process how
we have gone from storm to birds
and berries, then wine and love.
-I like your imagery of the grapes
and how truth is derived from "love's lips."
-Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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-Nice image, Helen.
-I review Ulla's poem
that followed this but
hadn't seen yours.
-I am glad you are participating;
it's a great project.
-You did a good job following
Bill's poem.
-It is a very interesting process how
we have gone from storm to birds
and berries, then wine and love.
-I like your imagery of the grapes
and how truth is derived from "love's lips."
-Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much, Pam! I will go read Ulla's now. Hugs!
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You are very welcome, Helen.
Comment from w.j.debi
I like the alliteration of the "s" sound that begins and then comes full circle to round out the poem. Love the imagery created in the second line. The word "divining" can take on several meanings and in this case makes that love deeper and sweeter.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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I like the alliteration of the "s" sound that begins and then comes full circle to round out the poem. Love the imagery created in the second line. The word "divining" can take on several meanings and in this case makes that love deeper and sweeter.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Debi. It was a quick response to Bill's poem. Maybe you'll join us in this book?
Hugs!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Mmm is the season of wine, the season of a good time and the start of a new romance. Wine and love mixed well with chocolate, and red roses. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Mmm is the season of wine, the season of a good time and the start of a new romance. Wine and love mixed well with chocolate, and red roses. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Iza. Hope you'll join us in this book. Hugs!
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Maybe thank you for the invitation I'm not worthy of this honor
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wine's Truth
by lyenochka
Hello, Helen,
Thank you so much for adding a chapter to our renga book. Beautiful 7/7 couplet. A great addition to our renga. Nice alliteration. :)
Please, copy and paste this rules to your author notes. Thank you!
Renga is Japanese collaborative poetry in which alternating stanzas, of 5-7-5 stanza and 7-7 couplets are linked in succession by multiple poets. The most famous renga master was Matsuo Basho.
Guest poets check the last stanza in the renga book to know what to write next.
Try not to repeat words from one stanza to the next.
Renga starts with first chapter, Pigeon Plum Flowers a #1-- 5/7/5 haiku.
Followed by a #1-- 7/7 couplet that relates to #1 haiku
Followed by a #2-- 5/7/5 stanza that relates to #1-- 7/7 couplet
Followed by a #2-- 7/7 couplet that relates to #2-- 5/7/5
.....repeated up to 100 stanzas Source: Wikipedia
To contribute to this book, just click on the icon ADD CHAPTER. If you need help, please contact Gypsy Blue Rose. You post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. you can edit it and add a picture if you like. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
The language is often pastoral, incorporating words and images associated with seasons, nature, and love. In order for the poem to achieve its trajectory, each poet writes a new stanza that leaps from only the stanza preceding it. This leap advances both the thematic movement as well as maintaining the linking component. Source: Poets.org
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Wine's Truth
by lyenochka
Hello, Helen,
Thank you so much for adding a chapter to our renga book. Beautiful 7/7 couplet. A great addition to our renga. Nice alliteration. :)
Please, copy and paste this rules to your author notes. Thank you!
Renga is Japanese collaborative poetry in which alternating stanzas, of 5-7-5 stanza and 7-7 couplets are linked in succession by multiple poets. The most famous renga master was Matsuo Basho.
Guest poets check the last stanza in the renga book to know what to write next.
Try not to repeat words from one stanza to the next.
Renga starts with first chapter, Pigeon Plum Flowers a #1-- 5/7/5 haiku.
Followed by a #1-- 7/7 couplet that relates to #1 haiku
Followed by a #2-- 5/7/5 stanza that relates to #1-- 7/7 couplet
Followed by a #2-- 7/7 couplet that relates to #2-- 5/7/5
.....repeated up to 100 stanzas Source: Wikipedia
To contribute to this book, just click on the icon ADD CHAPTER. If you need help, please contact Gypsy Blue Rose. You post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. you can edit it and add a picture if you like. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
The language is often pastoral, incorporating words and images associated with seasons, nature, and love. In order for the poem to achieve its trajectory, each poet writes a new stanza that leaps from only the stanza preceding it. This leap advances both the thematic movement as well as maintaining the linking component. Source: Poets.org
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thanks so much, Gypsy! I copy and pasted it now. Hugs!
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thank you, Helen :)
Comment from Sally Law
Now I have wine to go with my fruit basket from Ulla. Thank you, Helen. Wine does loosen the lips and relaxes them. I don't drink at all, but it fun to watch at the dinner table.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your writing endeavors,
Sal xoxo
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Now I have wine to go with my fruit basket from Ulla. Thank you, Helen. Wine does loosen the lips and relaxes them. I don't drink at all, but it fun to watch at the dinner table.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your writing endeavors,
Sal xoxo
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thanks so much, Sally! I'll have to go back and see what others have written. Hope you join us! Hugs!
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is a very clever and creative poem with the perfect picture accompanying it. We were confused at first thinking that it was supposed to be a 5-7-5 until we realized that it's a 7-7. Really a wonderful little poem. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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This is a very clever and creative poem with the perfect picture accompanying it. We were confused at first thinking that it was supposed to be a 5-7-5 until we realized that it's a 7-7. Really a wonderful little poem. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your kind review. It was a spur of a moment reply to the previous poem in the book. Hope you'll join us in this multi-author book!
Blessings!
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a cleverly put together couplet, with the cross rhyming wine/divining contained within alliterative parentheses, sun sweetened and love's lips.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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This is a cleverly put together couplet, with the cross rhyming wine/divining contained within alliterative parentheses, sun sweetened and love's lips.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thanks so much, Jim, for reviewing! Blessings!
Comment from royowen
You've done well Helen, this marvellous 7-7 form is a fine application of the form Gypsy has developed, I never knew how many Japanese forms there are dear girl, she's a real asset, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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You've done well Helen, this marvellous 7-7 form is a fine application of the form Gypsy has developed, I never knew how many Japanese forms there are dear girl, she's a real asset, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Roy! I hope you join us in this renga book fun. Blessings!
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I've no idea where you are Helen
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I mean this book started by Gypsy. We alternate writing 5-7-5 with 7-7 and try to keep a thematic link. We'd love for your poetic contributions!