Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Summer by the Pond"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
19 total reviews
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
This is a delightful few lines that enable us to envision a summer day, by a pond, with our loved one. Your selected artwork just adds to your overall presentation.
Mark
P.S. As likely mentioned previously, I am not a fan of any italic or script font for poems even if it 'feels' so (-; IMHO, you might at least increase the type size to improve its appeal to other FS reviewers.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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June,
This is a delightful few lines that enable us to envision a summer day, by a pond, with our loved one. Your selected artwork just adds to your overall presentation.
Mark
P.S. As likely mentioned previously, I am not a fan of any italic or script font for poems even if it 'feels' so (-; IMHO, you might at least increase the type size to improve its appeal to other FS reviewers.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thanks for the positive feedback. Will see what I can do about the type.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written contribution to the book of 5-7-5/ 7-7 poems to tell a continuous story about the subject chosen by the previous poet. The end product will be interesting to read.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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A very well-written contribution to the book of 5-7-5/ 7-7 poems to tell a continuous story about the subject chosen by the previous poet. The end product will be interesting to read.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Yes, it has been very interesting to see how this story will continue to unfold. Thank you for your supportive comments!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation, June.
-A very good 7/7 that
follows the previous haiku.
-You create a vivid word
picture of the willows swaying,
the breeze, and giggling lovers.
-I also wanted to thank you
for the perfect segue for my
haiku by having one of my
favorite topics with the birds:)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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-Nice image and
presentation, June.
-A very good 7/7 that
follows the previous haiku.
-You create a vivid word
picture of the willows swaying,
the breeze, and giggling lovers.
-I also wanted to thank you
for the perfect segue for my
haiku by having one of my
favorite topics with the birds:)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Yes, it has been very interesting to see how this story will continue to unfold. Thank you for your supportive comments!
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It will be at that. We have gone from a storm, to birds and berries, and now lovers enjoying wine! You are welcome for the review, June. I think at the end of this someone could write a story, too:)
Comment from Bill Schott
Summer by the Pond tacks on a new couplet to the building renga taking us from the berry massacre to a scene of summer love in the charming solitude.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Summer by the Pond tacks on a new couplet to the building renga taking us from the berry massacre to a scene of summer love in the charming solitude.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Yes, it has been very interesting to see how this story will continue to unfold. Thank you for your supportive comments!
Comment from roof35
Your illustration sets the stage for the words that follow. You said a lot in so few words yet made me see the lovers and the setting. This is very nicely done.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Your illustration sets the stage for the words that follow. You said a lot in so few words yet made me see the lovers and the setting. This is very nicely done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Yes, it has been very interesting to see how this story will continue to unfold. Thank you for your supportive comments!
Comment from Cindy Decker
June,
The photo you chose is beautiful and very alluring.
Your couplet is charming. I can see bright images of a swaying willow tree and hear a soft giggle. Your poem is excellent, June. Good luck in the contest.
Have a nice weekend.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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June,
The photo you chose is beautiful and very alluring.
Your couplet is charming. I can see bright images of a swaying willow tree and hear a soft giggle. Your poem is excellent, June. Good luck in the contest.
Have a nice weekend.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the positive and encouraging feedback!
Comment from Ogden
You have teased up an intriguing story with just a handful of ordinary words. If you'll finish it, I'll be sure to read the whole thing.
Good work!
Ogden Don
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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You have teased up an intriguing story with just a handful of ordinary words. If you'll finish it, I'll be sure to read the whole thing.
Good work!
Ogden Don
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the positive and encouraging feedback! It will be interesting to see how this story evolves as different Fanstorians contribute their chapters...
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June, my review was for 'Summer By the Pond.' Your reply, referring to contributions by other writers, appears possibly to be in response to some other review.
Don
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning, June!
How I love the positivity of your couplet. Death, life, rejuvenation abound in all of these wonderful entries. I can visualize and feel the emotions.
Beautiful!
Wishing you a beautiful day!
diane
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Good Morning, June!
How I love the positivity of your couplet. Death, life, rejuvenation abound in all of these wonderful entries. I can visualize and feel the emotions.
Beautiful!
Wishing you a beautiful day!
diane
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the positive and encouraging feedback!
Comment from Sally Law
Just a gorgeous couplet and so beautifully illustrated, dear June. A fine chapter entry for the poetry book. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your writing endeavors,
Sal xoxo
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Just a gorgeous couplet and so beautifully illustrated, dear June. A fine chapter entry for the poetry book. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your writing endeavors,
Sal xoxo
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Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the positive and encouraging feedback!
