Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Winged Frenzy"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
24 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written contribution to the Renga format that tells a story from beginning to end by different poets' contributing based on the last posted 5-7-5 or ,7-7 post?
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A very well-written contribution to the Renga format that tells a story from beginning to end by different poets' contributing based on the last posted 5-7-5 or ,7-7 post?
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Hello Sandra!
So pleased you enjoyed!
What a fun and creative venture!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your fourteen syllables to describe a little bird's drive for sustenance--at the expense of those lovely red berries and their beauty!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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You have made excellent use of your fourteen syllables to describe a little bird's drive for sustenance--at the expense of those lovely red berries and their beauty!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Hello Janice!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem throws some skis onto the renga and brings the gory scene of gorging birds into the scarlet scene of berry mutilation.
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This poem throws some skis onto the renga and brings the gory scene of gorging birds into the scarlet scene of berry mutilation.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Hello Bill!
So pleased you enjoyed and contributed as well!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice iamge
and presentation, diane.
-The author notes are good
and helpful, too.
-You did a good job with the 7/7
follow up poem.
-The imagery creates a vivid
word picture of the birds
feasting in the orchard.
-The concluding line is very good, too,
personifying the frenzied picking by the birds.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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-Very nice iamge
and presentation, diane.
-The author notes are good
and helpful, too.
-You did a good job with the 7/7
follow up poem.
-The imagery creates a vivid
word picture of the birds
feasting in the orchard.
-The concluding line is very good, too,
personifying the frenzied picking by the birds.
-Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Good Morning, Pam!
Thank you for your excellent rating and review.
I so enjoyed your haiku, and to tell you the truth, I was munching on Traverse City cherries when I read it!
I've never participated in an exercise like this; I so enjoyed the opportunity.
Wishing you a beautiful day!
diane
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You are very welcome, diane. That is ironic that you were enjoying some fresh cherries. They seem to be making the rounds in the poems. I have never done anything like this, either, and it's nice to see people are participating. It was fun.
Comment from Sally Law
Eautidul, and in my favorite color of ruby-red. I like how these poems layer of the previous on. How creative and beautiful as I read alomg.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your writing endeavors,
Sally xoxo
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Eautidul, and in my favorite color of ruby-red. I like how these poems layer of the previous on. How creative and beautiful as I read alomg.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for your writing endeavors,
Sally xoxo
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Hello Sally!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Such a energizing and creative exercise!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, I hear you. The birds always go for the low hanging fruit instead of the higher up ones that we with invisible wings can't reach.
An excellent idea from Gypsy and a pleasure to read and review. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Ha, I hear you. The birds always go for the low hanging fruit instead of the higher up ones that we with invisible wings can't reach.
An excellent idea from Gypsy and a pleasure to read and review. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Good Morning, Gloria!
Thank you!
Cherry harvesting here in Traverse City = both winged and footed abound!
Glad you enjoyed!
diane
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have read a few poems recently about the birds and the berries they are enjoyed of late and you must be blessed with gardens of both birds and berries, delightful words here Diane, inventive and magical, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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I have read a few poems recently about the birds and the berries they are enjoyed of late and you must be blessed with gardens of both birds and berries, delightful words here Diane, inventive and magical, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Hello Dolly!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Such a creative exercise!
thank you!
diane
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Winged Frenzy
by Mrs. KT
Hello, Mrs KT,
Wow, what a vivid image! I love it. I can see the little birds eating the berries in a frenzy... The idea of setting the orchard on fire is a wonderful juxtaposition with the garnet gems. Beautiful imagery. A perfect couplet to follow Pam's haiku. Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Winged Frenzy
by Mrs. KT
Hello, Mrs KT,
Wow, what a vivid image! I love it. I can see the little birds eating the berries in a frenzy... The idea of setting the orchard on fire is a wonderful juxtaposition with the garnet gems. Beautiful imagery. A perfect couplet to follow Pam's haiku. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Good Morning, Gypsy!
Thank you!
Such a creative exercise; thank you for affording me the opportunity to join in the fun! I am excited to see where the creativity progresses!
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, this is beyond beautiful, Mrs. KT. It is absolutely exquisite, with an amazing imagery and choice of words, a gorgeous picture and artistic presentation. Your visuals on this hit the root.
I loved it.
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Oh, this is beyond beautiful, Mrs. KT. It is absolutely exquisite, with an amazing imagery and choice of words, a gorgeous picture and artistic presentation. Your visuals on this hit the root.
I loved it.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Good Morning Eternal Muse!
So very honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review.
Such a splendid creative exercise!
I hope you join in the fun!
Wishing you a beautiful day!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great couplet to continue the thought from Pam's poem, Mrs. KT. Your words make a great statement I've not thought of before. I love your pictures and the way your well-chosen words describe them
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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This is a great couplet to continue the thought from Pam's poem, Mrs. KT. Your words make a great statement I've not thought of before. I love your pictures and the way your well-chosen words describe them
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Good Morning, Jan!
Thank you!
I've never participated in a multi-author book; what a fun and creative exercise. Excited to see where all of the contributors take this. You should join in the fun as well!
Take Care!
diane