Love Long Distance
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Christmas Surprise! - Chapter 30"A Wartime Romance
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Comment from Ulla
Oh dear, a lot is happening here. Two baby's at a trot and one may not be quite so strong. I hope she'll make it. It's a great chapter and so well written and at a great pace, as well. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
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Oh dear, a lot is happening here. Two baby's at a trot and one may not be quite so strong. I hope she'll make it. It's a great chapter and so well written and at a great pace, as well. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
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Hi Ulla, Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. We're glad you found it well written with a great pace. Your support means so much to us. Chapter 31 is almost done and will be posted soon. Wishing you a great weekend. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from damommy
This is an exciting chapter. The events covered are great and written well.
I especially liked the part about the birth of the twins on Christmas morning. The cliffhanger about the baby girl being in an incubator was poignant--hope she makes it. The poem is super!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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This is an exciting chapter. The events covered are great and written well.
I especially liked the part about the birth of the twins on Christmas morning. The cliffhanger about the baby girl being in an incubator was poignant--hope she makes it. The poem is super!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hi Yvonne. Your continued support means so much to us! Thank you for reading and reviewing this chapter. Also, we really appreciate you mentioning the parts you like best. Awesome comments. Chapter 31 is already in the works and coming soon. Wishing you a wonderful Friday and weekend. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Mistydawn
Twins, wow what a surprise and on Christmas day of all things. I do hope Cathy and the baby girl are alright and Bill can get to them soon. Your chapter is very well-written, interesting start to finish. As always, I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Twins, wow what a surprise and on Christmas day of all things. I do hope Cathy and the baby girl are alright and Bill can get to them soon. Your chapter is very well-written, interesting start to finish. As always, I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hi Mistydawn.Thank you SO MUCH for the AWESOME six star rating and review! We're so glad you enjoyed this chapter. A double "SALUTE" to you! Thank you also for the continued support and encouragement. Chapter 31 is coming soon. Wishing you all the best. Take care and God Bless.
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Cathy and Bill, this is an excellent chapter. There is great flow and descriptive wording in everything. I can visualize all as I read it. This is one of the best, if not the best, chapters in the novel. Readers have so much to read, enjoy, and think about. It is written with the sense of life and death both in Viet Nam and at home. All of the events keep readers interest from start to finish.
The beginning grabs the attention of readers and the rest follows--never letting up in intensity. The description of the babies' arrival is done well. I thought they all would make it to the hospital in time. Not doing so is a great twist. The conversation between Grandma and Grandpa during this time is realistic and perfect. Grandma seems calm about it all--but then she is a woman who has had babies. Her attitude is welcome to Cathy to help her deal with the experience. Grandpa thinks he will not know what to do, but living on a farm, he has helped his livestock when they give birth. I love the way the Smoky Mountain dialect is present throughout the chapter. It gives a real sense of place and the characters personalities.
Another twist is the birth of twins. What a special event. I love the way the babies arrive on Christmas morning. What a blessing. The title ties in perfectly with their births. What a Christmas to remember!
On the warfront, you include events that tug at readers' hearts. The 'Road Trip' with Bob Hope is great. The spirits of the soldiers surely lift with a 'piece of home.' However, we feel the sadness and longing Bill has about being away from his home and Cathy. His dream is well written to be able to see what he is thinking. The line about 'from my soul, through my heart, and by my pen' is exceptional along with the exceptional poem he wrote. His poem is AWESOME. The words are meaningful, the rhymes perfect, and the flow super. The message is strong, too. It shows how love can, and does, change people when they are truly committed to each other.
Bill's telephone call back reveals much about his personality and how much he loves Cathy. The way he finds about needing to call is filled with great details, as is what he learns about the babies. Wow! What a cliffhanger not knowing if the baby girl will survive! Readers can feel the impact of what he learns from the call. They are right there with him.
The attached videos are great to include as they add info to the story about the 'Road Show' and the song Bill is hearing in his mind. Your cover and presentation is EXCEPTIONAL. Thanks for sharing and hurry with the next chapter.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Cathy and Bill, this is an excellent chapter. There is great flow and descriptive wording in everything. I can visualize all as I read it. This is one of the best, if not the best, chapters in the novel. Readers have so much to read, enjoy, and think about. It is written with the sense of life and death both in Viet Nam and at home. All of the events keep readers interest from start to finish.
The beginning grabs the attention of readers and the rest follows--never letting up in intensity. The description of the babies' arrival is done well. I thought they all would make it to the hospital in time. Not doing so is a great twist. The conversation between Grandma and Grandpa during this time is realistic and perfect. Grandma seems calm about it all--but then she is a woman who has had babies. Her attitude is welcome to Cathy to help her deal with the experience. Grandpa thinks he will not know what to do, but living on a farm, he has helped his livestock when they give birth. I love the way the Smoky Mountain dialect is present throughout the chapter. It gives a real sense of place and the characters personalities.
Another twist is the birth of twins. What a special event. I love the way the babies arrive on Christmas morning. What a blessing. The title ties in perfectly with their births. What a Christmas to remember!
On the warfront, you include events that tug at readers' hearts. The 'Road Trip' with Bob Hope is great. The spirits of the soldiers surely lift with a 'piece of home.' However, we feel the sadness and longing Bill has about being away from his home and Cathy. His dream is well written to be able to see what he is thinking. The line about 'from my soul, through my heart, and by my pen' is exceptional along with the exceptional poem he wrote. His poem is AWESOME. The words are meaningful, the rhymes perfect, and the flow super. The message is strong, too. It shows how love can, and does, change people when they are truly committed to each other.
Bill's telephone call back reveals much about his personality and how much he loves Cathy. The way he finds about needing to call is filled with great details, as is what he learns about the babies. Wow! What a cliffhanger not knowing if the baby girl will survive! Readers can feel the impact of what he learns from the call. They are right there with him.
The attached videos are great to include as they add info to the story about the 'Road Show' and the song Bill is hearing in his mind. Your cover and presentation is EXCEPTIONAL. Thanks for sharing and hurry with the next chapter.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration, Jan
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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What an AWESOME review, Jan! Thank you SO MUCH for the shiny six stars, and detailed comments. A double "SALUTE" from both of us to you! Your help and support mean so much to us. We're glad you enjoyed this chapter! The next one is in the works and coming soon. Wishing you all the best. Have a great Friday and upcoming weekend. God Bless.
Respectfully with Love and Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again, you left us with a horrible hook. We need to make sure that baby girl makes it through this and Bill makes it in time to help Cathy. You have us on pins and needles. Great writing.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Once again, you left us with a horrible hook. We need to make sure that baby girl makes it through this and Bill makes it in time to help Cathy. You have us on pins and needles. Great writing.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hi Barbara. HURRAH! We love those shiny six stars--Thank you SO MUCH! Your continued support means so much to us. A double "SALUTE!" We're so glad you enjoyed this chapter and found the writing great. Stay tuned--the next chapter is coming soon! Wishing you all the best. Take care and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Cathy and Bill,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lively images at some places, and beautifully depicting the scenes related to the birth of Cathy's twins- a baby boy and a baby girl.
The next chapter will show whether little baby girl will survive or not. It's a good hint about the next chapter.
The poem is also noteworthy.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hello Cathy and Bill,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lively images at some places, and beautifully depicting the scenes related to the birth of Cathy's twins- a baby boy and a baby girl.
The next chapter will show whether little baby girl will survive or not. It's a good hint about the next chapter.
The poem is also noteworthy.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hi RP! Your continued support means a lot to both of us. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this chapter. Thank you also for noting Bill's poem to Cathy. Chapter 31 is already in the works and coming soon. Have an awesome day! God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
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Cathy & Bill, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very gripping story. fast paced and very evocative of time and place. also like the miltiary style - my wife served 20 years in miltiary intelligence so that dialogue rings true
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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very gripping story. fast paced and very evocative of time and place. also like the miltiary style - my wife served 20 years in miltiary intelligence so that dialogue rings true
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hi Jake! Thanks so much for stopping by to read and review this chapter. We're thrilled you enjoyed it! Also, thank you for confirming that the dialogue rings true. We hope you will join us in Chapter 31 which is coming soon. Wishing you all the best. Have a wonderful day and God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, twins that is a nice surprise for the future parents and grandparents. Laughs and joy will bring life back into the old farm. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Wow, twins that is a nice surprise for the future parents and grandparents. Laughs and joy will bring life back into the old farm. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hi Iza. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing Chapter 30 of Love Long Distance. Thank you, also, for the support. Yes, laughs and joy will bring life back into the old farm. Well said! Chapter 31 is currently in the works and coming soon. Wishing you all the best. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Christmas Day twins! What a lovely gift from God. This is one grand story. Even the poem is touching. The tape add much to this post. Well done again!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Christmas Day twins! What a lovely gift from God. This is one grand story. Even the poem is touching. The tape add much to this post. Well done again!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Hi Rebecca. Why, thank you SO MUCH for those shiny six stars and great comments! A double "SALUTE!" We are thrilled you love our story. We have only a few chapters to go, and Love Long Distance is already being professionally edited and typeset. Publication coming soon! HURRAH! Stay tuned for Chapter 31. Wishing you all the best. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy
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Your writing life sound so exciting! I am very happy for you.
Comment from sibhus
A really good pace with plenty of action that holds the readers interest. The dialogue was well pace and sound authentic. Specially liked the banter between Grandma and Grandpa, it reminded me of my grandparents. I well written chapter.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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A really good pace with plenty of action that holds the readers interest. The dialogue was well pace and sound authentic. Specially liked the banter between Grandma and Grandpa, it reminded me of my grandparents. I well written chapter.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Hi sibhus. Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review this chapter. It made us smile when we read what you said about Grandma and Grandpa! Great comments here. Chapter 31 is in the works now and will be posted soon. Wishing you all the best. God Bless.
Respectfully with Admiration,
Bill & Cathy