War Kiss
100 word dash20 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Clever--your narrator cast as giver of the iconic V-day kiss. This may be a winner. Sobering--also amusing--bit re social distancing and virtual kisses. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Clever--your narrator cast as giver of the iconic V-day kiss. This may be a winner. Sobering--also amusing--bit re social distancing and virtual kisses. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from Spitfire
This points out the gap between generations. Even before social distancing, there was texting and other devices to keep people apart. Jaimie missed the whole point. Her grandfather made history.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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This points out the gap between generations. Even before social distancing, there was texting and other devices to keep people apart. Jaimie missed the whole point. Her grandfather made history.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from Animated Phoenix
one track mind these kids have. This story does a good job of showing the thinking differences between two different eras. I can't tell though what exactly is making the grandpa sad. Is it the virus or how the kid thinks a virtual kiss is just as good as a real one?
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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one track mind these kids have. This story does a good job of showing the thinking differences between two different eras. I can't tell though what exactly is making the grandpa sad. Is it the virus or how the kid thinks a virtual kiss is just as good as a real one?
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from sibhus
Great story, and in only a hundred words. This is well written with a good setting, conflict, and conclusion, which I'm a lot of people are thinking, during these trying times. Excellent entry for the contest and good luck.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Great story, and in only a hundred words. This is well written with a good setting, conflict, and conclusion, which I'm a lot of people are thinking, during these trying times. Excellent entry for the contest and good luck.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from Jacob David Collins
You made me smile when you mentioned social distancing. Times when we could freely see each other and have parties feel very long ago in the past. I enjoyed reading this piece. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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You made me smile when you mentioned social distancing. Times when we could freely see each other and have parties feel very long ago in the past. I enjoyed reading this piece. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The world has changed a lot from those days. The men and women coming home from the war had no idea what was in store over the coming years. I enjoyed your story, sad and true as it is, it makes us think about the things happening now. Good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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The world has changed a lot from those days. The men and women coming home from the war had no idea what was in store over the coming years. I enjoyed your story, sad and true as it is, it makes us think about the things happening now. Good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
Comment from Janice Canerdy
What a GREAT--moving and significant--topic choice you made for your flash writing! The dialogue is excellent, revealing the perfectly understandable distance between generations and their understanding
when it comes to such matters.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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What a GREAT--moving and significant--topic choice you made for your flash writing! The dialogue is excellent, revealing the perfectly understandable distance between generations and their understanding
when it comes to such matters.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from roof35
This is an excellent job of melding the past with the present and doing it with a kiss. I really enjoyed reading this and, of course, your picture pairs beautifully with your words. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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This is an excellent job of melding the past with the present and doing it with a kiss. I really enjoyed reading this and, of course, your picture pairs beautifully with your words. Nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, Grandpa has his treasured memories even if his grandson doesn't understand what was going on back in the day. You picked a great topic for your contest entry, Mystery Author. Everything flows nicely together. Your entry is super. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Well, Grandpa has his treasured memories even if his grandson doesn't understand what was going on back in the day. You picked a great topic for your contest entry, Mystery Author. Everything flows nicely together. Your entry is super. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from oliver818
Haha nice story. I enjoyed the post war imagery. The good thing is the social distancing won't last forever and if it keeps your grandson alive then that's a good thing. Thanks for sharing this
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Haha nice story. I enjoyed the post war imagery. The good thing is the social distancing won't last forever and if it keeps your grandson alive then that's a good thing. Thanks for sharing this
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Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Thanks for reviewing zanya